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| To See A World by Nightwing | 6 Review(s) |
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| Timmy2222 | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 7/6/2004 |
| A nice chapter, but though it is well written it kept me asking why this flashback needed to be so long. It does not serve much to the ongoing story. IMO it would have been enough to make clear that the queen wanted Aragorn to be Legolas' friend. The last paragraph but left me in wonder, who helps Legolas and Aragorn while not showing himself. I'm looking forward to the next chapter... Timmy :) | |
| Ithilien | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 9/18/2003 |
| Well, I think I know what murky waters Lisette may have saved you from, but I see know evidence of murk anywhere near here. So I'll just keep paddling along. No need to run for the hills. I see we are settling in for the angst factor in this story, and I am ready to get all comfy here. Another hot button for me you know -- angst. I eat it for breakfast. Well, maybe not, but I could. (Cold, with a little brown sugar sprinkled on top...yummy! But I digress...) What is with this cabin and provisions and horse and food? Wow, you really have my head spinning over who could be doing this for them. Certainly, this event was an accident. Wasn't it? I mean, everything feels comfortable and good (at least THIS part of the story does), but that no one has come back to claim anything just seems *odd*. I'm getting vibes, and I don't want to, but all of this feels eerie, sort of. But not. Friendly, kind of. Like Hansel and Gretel before the witch popped out and tried to shove them into an oven. I mean...uh, I shouldn't be worried, should I? Poor Legolas! I'm so glad to see he is showing signs of improvement, but boy, these are babysteps. The elf is a long ways off from anything nearing a recovery. Yet, they've fallen into a routine, and that is a good sign as it means Legolas has stabilized. What is Legolas wanting to tell Aragorn that he can't do in a conscious state? The curiosity is killing me. Gosh, I love the backstory here, especially the little details about the Mirkwood elves. I love how you describe them in comparison to the other realms. Very fitting. And I loved the little fight between Legolas and his brother. All over where to hang the banners? Um, these elves are a bit hot-headed, aren't they? I love it. Legolas' mother is a very special elf, isn't she? She seems not to hold prejudice, and is calm, even and eloquent. How lovely. She also seems to possess a modicum of foresight. Too bad she can't use it to prevent what is about to happen. Oh, this is so very sad. And knowing how these elves might act over hanging a banner, I can only imagine how they might react to losing a queen. Gosh, the only thing that surprises me is that Legolas is capable, after four years, of doing anything but crying into his pillow. But that would be a bit extreme, even for these elves probably. More soon, Nightwing. Such a lovely job you are doing. More. Please. | |
| LKK | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 9/12/2003 |
| I should have posted reviews on the previous chapters. I apologize. This story has been very emotional, quite gripping. The little cottage in the woods sounds too good to be true. I worry about what's going to happen when the "owner" returns. It's almost as if the two have stumbled across a fairy tale cottage. I keep expecting the wicked witch to come home any minute. From a writing standpoint, I like how you're integrating the flashbacks with the current timeline. The transitions are very smooth and flow well. And your characterizations are wonderful. Looking forward to more! | |
| Mirari | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 9/11/2003 |
| An intriguing piece of work. This comfortable little house seems a tad eerie to me, and I can't help but wonder if Aragorn and Legolas are as safe there as the Ranger seems to presume they are. Hmm... You've definitely taken and held my interest! The characterization is bang-on for Legolas, and though Aragorn seems less experienced and more unsure than usual I am attributing that to his young age. Wonderful job, and you can be sure I'll be back for more. ^^ | |
| Alisha B | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 9/11/2003 |
| Well, I've been following your story on ff.net, and I'm slowly making the transition here. You write the characters very well. Aragorn is a bit off, but he's also a lot younger then the books. Legolas, however, is right on. You've given him the perfect combination of eloquence and nobility. So far, he sound every bit of 3,000 years. (or so.) Congratulations on that. Generally, I've found that many authors make him sound too young and informal. But like I said, I'll be keeping an eye out for more updates, because I really can't imagine where you're going with it. But I'm sure it'll be great! Keep up the good work! | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 9/10/2003 |
| The flashback to the death of Legolas's mother was very well done. I liked the whole set up of famly relationships between the brothers and parents. And the picture of Mirkwood elves as "wild" was wonderful. Now I am wondering about whoever is leaving gifts. | |