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The Heir Apparent  by Mirkwoodmaiden 5 Review(s)
NurayyReviewed Chapter: 4 on 3/16/2021
Dear Mirkwoodmaiden,
Oh, the elves come in! I love them. Elladan and Elrohir, and Glorfindel too!
I loved the trust Ivorwen gives to Elladan speaking to him, and how Elladan takes it upon himself to fulfill that promise to a loving mother.
I also liked how you weaved in the twins and Arathorn's backstories of grief and vengeance.
Ivorwen's sorrow at the loss of her sons touched me. In these few lines you described them so well they became alive and I could feel the mother's pain.
Take care


Author Reply: Nurayy!

The Elves have arrived indeed...and will be present for the rest of the story. Sorry for not answering back sooner. I really happy you are enjoying the story.

Ivorwen is a mother desperate to carve out some measure of happiness for her daughter and doesn't give two figs what it might cost her dignity. She takes a chance talking to Elladan and she doesn't realise the bond that exists already between Arathorn and Elladan and Elrohir. They saw him grown up in Imladris as well though he was a little older when he started his fosterage in Imladris.

I remember reading somewhere that the twins almost lost their souls to vengeance after their mother sailed to the Undying Lands and its stands to reason Arathorn would be scarred in some way as well.

"In these few lines you described them so well they became alive and I could feel the mother's pain."

Thanks! That little passage turned out well I was very happy about that.

Thanks for reading!

Stay Safe! Mellon nin!

(((hugs)))

MM

LarnerReviewed Chapter: 4 on 3/7/2020
I am glad she unbent enough to let him know the basis of her sorrow. Gilraen will depend on his support when the time comes.

Author Reply: True! Gilraen was given a very hard road to travel, I wanted her to have as much support as possible.

MM

LarnerReviewed Chapter: 4 on 11/3/2005
Foreknowledge can indeed be painful, particularly when it shows such lossed. To know Aragorn must be born and held in safety in Rivendell to both protect him and to prepare him for his destiny must have been horrible for the mother of Gilraen.

I've written one story in which Gilraen is an active character, "Fostering." I'd like your feedback on how you see her portrayed there. I know I am thoroughly enjoying this one so far, although I realize I started a bit late.

Thanks for the feedback you've given me.

Author Reply: Larner!

I'm so gald that you are enjoying the story. I've really had a lot of fun creating it!

I can only imagine how hard it would to allow a child of yours to follow a path that will lead her into unhappiness, In fact, knowing all that you've been raised to believe in and hope for will not happen if you try to prevent your own child's unhappiness. That would be hard indeed!

Thanks for reading and responding. We write because we want to, but it is always lovely to know that my writing has touched somebody!

MM

Eruanneth_LuinReviewed Chapter: 4 on 6/29/2005
Once again you bring insightful details about the lightly sketched outlines provided by Prof. Tolkien.

The wonder of meeting elves for the first time held me nearly breathless with the pleasure and your portrayal of the Sons of Elrond appealingly real. Yes, trepidation would have been felt by many upon encountering those living legends, and hesitance certainly, in trusting the unknown.

In particular I loved the lightening transitions from playful to intense, as I perceive elves would be, especially the Half-elven, displaying the depth of feeling that remained hidden from most mortals.

But underlying it all is the foreknowledge of ultimate dooms and losses even after the defeating of the great Evil of their day, which for cannot be escaped.

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 4 on 9/28/2003
This meeting of Elves and Dunedain was interesting on both sides. The Elves, of course, have known the heirs of Isildur but these people still managed to surprise them, especially Gilraen's mother who is a striking figure here. And the men and women were predictably fascinated by the elves. Well, who wouldn't be? I liked the fact that Gilraen's father thought about the authority of his son when he decided to accept the Elven guard.

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