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| Interrupted Journeys: Part 5 Journeys in Mirkwood by elliska | 5 Review(s) |
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| Chloe Davies94 | Reviewed Chapter: 10 on 5/12/2009 |
| Aw... My heart goes out to them all *sniffes and sobs* You describe the characters' emotions so well throughout the story, especially Thranduil, Legolas and Galithil (especially when Thranduil asks him why he isn't in the talan with the others). Poor Dolgailon, I can't help feeling that he's going to struggle somehow. And Thranduil, losing both his father and his little brother in battle, AND having to try and rebuild his kingdom and comfort those little elflings at the same time. Well done, Elliska! You write in a way that both inspires me and mesmerises me, keeping me completely hooked. Author Reply: Thank you! I am glad the emotions come across well because that seemed really hard to get right. (especially when Thranduil asks him why he isn't in the talan with the others) I liked that part too, so it is so cool to have people mention it. You are right though--everyone faces some challenges after all that has happened, both emotional and political. Things stay pretty dark from here on out. Thanks so much for the review. I appreciate it so much! | |
| Sulwing of Mirkwood | Reviewed Chapter: 10 on 5/11/2009 |
| I hope you're happy--I'm weeping all over my keyboard right now... :( It's just *so* sad. The poor little elflings. What a hard wake-up call. I think you promised not to kill any of them (the elflings) and if you did, I'm just reminding you. If Galathil fades, that will be just too much for me. I felt terrible for poor Dolgailon. He's going to have an awfully hard time healing his brother's problems and his own. Hmmm. Maybe Maidhien can help? :) Sorry, that smile doesn't look right sitting in the review of a most distressing chapter. Thranduil really has a hard life of it, you know. Legolas is going to have to be very strong and supportive of Galathil, poor things. Oh,go Tulus! Looks like you won't be getting any extra bills in the mail--yet. Author Reply: :-) I am very happy if I got a good emotional response with this chapter. ;-) Seriously, thanks so much! I think you promised not to kill any of them (the elflings) and if you did, I'm just reminding you. If Galathil fades, that will be just too much for me. It is just so tempting to say that 'fading' is a lot different from actually killing a character, but that would be just mean because you are right that I did say I don't have the heart to kill children. :-) Dolgailon is going to have a tough time in this series, along with Tulus. And of course the whole family has a lot of healing to do. Poor things. It does get rather dark from here. Thanks so much for the reviews! I appreciate them so much! | |
| Fantasia | Reviewed Chapter: 10 on 5/11/2009 |
| Oh! I'm crying...as I said before poor everybody... I feel so sorry for them. I have the bad habit of reading at work, so I can't leave you a proper review, but I like this chapter, than you Author Reply: Hehe! I know what you mean. I can't resist peeking at fanfic and reviews at work, but I really can't get caught doing it. Bad employee! ;-) Thanks so much for the review, though. I'm glad it made a good emotional impact. This was a hard chapter to write--action is easy, but its aftermath is tough to convey. Thanks so much for the reviews! I really appreciate them! | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 10 on 5/11/2009 |
| "Why are you not in the talan with your cousin and friends?" Thranduil continued. Galithil stared dumbly at his uncle. He was not in the talan because he did not want to cry in front of Anastor. He was not in the talan because he couldn't bear to look at the wounds Legolas and Tulus had. He was not in the talan because sitting still gave him nothing to do but think. He had no idea how to begin to explain any of those things. That repetition with variation is beautifully done. Poor Galithil. What a list of ways he feels guilty. And this is also nice: This time, Galithil did not even have to pretend to be sorry. He was sorrier than he had ever been in his whole life for anything. And he hoped so much that if Thranduil forgave him, it might take away even just a little of the guilt that he felt. Even if it did not, Galithil needed Thranduil's arms around him at this moment more than he could have ever imagined needing an adult's comfort. There's a simplicity about the language that fits well with a mind and heart preoccupied with grief and guilt. Galithil has that same sad simplicity when he tells Legolas that he went south because he loved Maidhen and wanted to know why she was unacceptable. Galithil is good to remember that Legolas needs Thranduil too. And what an interesting reappearance of the yarrow, which, as I recall, is there in this story's opening. Not enough to save Aradunnon, of course, but it's helped everyone else. Legolas is very elfy in thinking that if trees could flee to Mandos, those in this southern village would do it. It's interesting to see the children changing the side they take on the move-the-village argument after seeing the forest and the battle. The problem is that there doesn't seem to be a right answer. It's canon that Oropher and Thranduil withdrew in the face of overwhelming forces, but that couldn't have made it easy. Author Reply: This review made my day when I got to glance at it during work today. You picked out some of my favorite parts of the chapter and that made me feel so good. :-) I found it very interesting trying to convey how someone in Galithil's position might be thinking and reacting. I also enjoyed bringing the yarrow back--eventually poor Galithil might be able to see that he contributed something positive by helping to gather that yarrow. Ultimately though, this series is about Legolas and Thranduil, so Legolas's thoughts in this chapter eventually become very important to the story overall. It is a really shocking thing for Legolas to realize that he cannot agree with his father on the issue of how to best defend the south. All these impossible decisions with no right answer make for a really interesting situation to me. :-) Thanks so much for the review, daw! I appreciate them so much! | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 10 on 5/11/2009 |
| A hard lesson indeed! Galithil's mental process was heart-wrenching, really. It was wonderful how he picked up the toughest part of it all, that his Adar had told him to be honest about his motives... and all of a sudden he goes right deep dpwn there: he does love Miadhien, he was selfish and irresponsible and it all has consequences...harsher than being confined to his chambers! It was very well done, Elliska, somehow it all had the muffled atmosphere of people completeley shocked by such a blow. All seemed blanketed in stupor, and kind of slow-motion. I think I could even hear them whisper and the boys argue for te sheer habit, but without any interest... Now, poor Dolgailon, I wonder how he is going to cope with all that... Author Reply: All seemed blanketed in stupor, and kind of slow-motion. Excellent! That is exactly what I was going for--that feeling when something so momentous has happened that you can't even quite take it in. It was wonderful how he picked up the toughest part of it all Again, excellent. I liked this part too. Galithil is a bit of a naughty boy (as I'm sure his father was), but he still has an upbringing that, given something of this magnitude, requires him to recognize what he has done wrong. He has definitely learned something. Poor kid has probably been made to learn it too well. And you are right about Dolgailon--he's about to get way more responsibility than he wanted. Thanks so much for the review! I really appreciate them! | |