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| to lose hope is to give up by Laikwalâssê | 2 Review(s) |
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| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/15/2009 |
| The language is a bit stilted for such young children, but the playing and curiosity are spot on! Very nice! And I find myself wondering how Arahel might have become so ill! Author Reply: I´m glad you liked the garden scene. I wonder myself what happened to Arahel, but if Elrond is not able to find out....Thank you so much for the review. Lai | |
| Aiwen | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/1/2009 |
| Nice start. Your grammar and spelling in the story itself is well done. I certainly couldn't write a story in german that was worth reading. For future reference, it might have been good to have some foreshadowing of the disaster to come. As it is, I was a little confused by this chapter since it did not seem connected to the summary. Author Reply: Aiwen, thank you so much for the review and most of all for the praise with my english. You do not know what it means to me. You are right in backsight with the foreshadowing, but I wanted a nice start for the things to come, but I will consider this the next time. Thanks again for the advice. I really appreciate it for I´m still very new to this. Hope to see you at the coming chapters. You will not be dissapointed. Thanks. Lai | |