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| Dreamflower's Mathoms III by Dreamflower | 3 Review(s) |
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| Andrea | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 3/25/2014 |
| Very well done. It must be very difficult to write such a scene without dialogue. That meant he'd have to finish him, for the half-orc would never allow himself to be meekly shown the Bounds. Facing such an enemy even Frodo would have had no other chance than to kill him. And maybe that is part of the reason why he did not participate. Author Reply: I've written short scenes in which the cousins communicate with little more than gestures, but never before a whole story! It's quite a bit more challenging than "dialogue only" stories! By that point in time, Frodo's tasks were different. He now must see to securing the reconciliation of the Shire, while Sam saw to its restoration. The reclaiming was left to Merry and Pippin. But just as the longer and more perilous Quest outside the Shire took all four, the Quest to scour the Shire took all four of them as well. Author Reply: I've written short scenes in which the cousins communicate with little more than gestures, but never before a whole story! It's quite a bit more challenging than "dialogue only" stories! By that point in time, Frodo's tasks were different. He now must see to securing the reconciliation of the Shire, while Sam saw to its restoration. The reclaiming was left to Merry and Pippin. But just as the longer and more perilous Quest outside the Shire took all four, the Quest to scour the Shire took all four of them as well. | |
| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 3/25/2014 |
| Again--love the ability to cooperate so well, and the realization that the half-elf must not be allowed to remain to the death of someone else. So glad they were encouraged to complement one another in their training. Author Reply: Thank you so much, dear! These two will always complement one another: Merry, with his ability to plan ahead and foresee consequences, and Pip with his ability to improvise and think on his feet. The two together are pretty formidable! | |
| Lindelea | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 3/24/2014 |
| O yes! Beautifully done! It is as much a challenge, I think, to write something wholly without dialogue and keep it from bogging down in description, as it is to write something wholly dialogue and labour to make it clear to the reader, who is speaking each line. But it flows nicely, from second to second, from tense and waiting start to satisfying finish. Author Reply: Thank you so much, dear! And thanks for your help. | |