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| The Enemy Within by daw the minstrel | 11 Review(s) |
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| Tari | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/21/2016 |
| I looked up Deep As A Tomb by Dorothy A. Winsor. I hope that's you because I just bought the Ebook. . Author Reply: That's me. My fanfic writer name is my initials. Thank you for buying the book. I'm with a small press and they can't afford to do a lot of promotion, so I'm afraid no one will hear about it. | |
| asms2 | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/24/2016 |
| A new story! I can't tell you how happy I am to see this. Discovering your writing this spring and being able to go through all the stories was so much fun. And, in fact, it was difficult for me to read anything else for a while afterwords because it didn't seem to compare to how much I enjoyed your writing. You really do a great job. I like the way you described Legolas' boredom at the beginning...complete with him tuning out on the end of a the first meeting. Missing an important note is something most people can relate to. It's fun that both brothers seem to be in town for the moment. I enjoy reading about family dynamics and you write it so well. Can't wait to read more! Author Reply: You are making me feel really good here! And I have to say, I'm enjoying the chance to play around in fanfic for a while. It's pure play and a joy to do. Legolas is not the best record keeper for Thranduil's court, but it occurred to me he was probably learning more than he realized about how his father governed. Now we'll see how he does hosting some guest at a party. daw | |
| curiouswombat | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/24/2016 |
| It was so good to see your note telling us that you had written this - and a pleasure to have time to sit and read it in comfort and at a leisurely pace. I do love Legolas losing interest to the extent that he missed the actual decision his father made, and Thranduil's interaction with the merchant. I almost dread to think what can possibly go wrong with Legolas let loose at the festivities with two young mortals in tow. And look forward to finding out! Author Reply: I'm really enjoying the chance to dip back into fanfic again. I miss these characters. Sadly I also miss the lively social interaction that used to exist around LOTR fanfic, but I fear the moment for that is over. I'm working on an Ithilden chapter at the moment, but Legolas will be exploring his unexpected freedom, much to his father's frustration. | |
| Tari | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/24/2016 |
| I just tried to comment on your story, but something went wrong and I don't think you got it. So here goes again. I was very excited to see a new story being posted by you. I read everything you wrote on HASA. It's so sad that they decided to shut down. There were many stories left that I wanted to read. Can you repost your stories here? (I hope.) I look forward to the next chapter to see what that rascal Legolas gets into next. Author Reply: I was sorry to lose HASA too. They were a good site. All my stories are on this site. If you look at my author page, I think they're all listed there, with the links at the bottom of the page. At least I hope so! daw | |
| obsidianj | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/23/2016 |
| I love to see young Legolas again. You describe him being bored by the court proceedings so well. Not sure what to think of the merchant and why he brought his son and daughter onto this trip. Author Reply: I'm glad you liked it. I have trouble with opening chapters. daw | |
| Dot | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/23/2016 |
| This made me so happy :-) Poor Legolas, bored and, well, safe. I laughed out loud when he realised he'd completely missed whatever sentence Thranduil handed down. I pretty much sat back with popcorn then to watch the scene unfold once the merchant refused to leave without speaking to Thranduil. Yikes. Clearly he hasn't dealt with him before. And he's brought his own sullen teenagers, who presumably have their own views of how the world is treating them. Then Camil's back straightened, and Hoth paused with a grimace That's a great moment of the son realising "oh God, here we go..." Um... who's the elf who broke the weathervane???? "You can show my son and daughter that not all elves are wild, eh?" Did someone mention Turgon? At least Legolas feels all is working out well. He obviously hasn't yet learned that if he and the visiting merchant are the only two smiling, it doesn't bode well. I'd like to learn more about Ithilden's bad day, please. And I should say, I'm loving all your little details. From wiping the pen to the rocking ink bottle to Thranduil's hand not moving. It all gives the wannabe writer in me a little thrill :-) Author Reply: Legolas, bored and, well, safe Exactly. And Thranduil approves of both states. That's a great moment of the son realising "oh God, here we go..." One again, exactly! He's been putting up with annoying paternal behavior too. Ithilden chapter coming right up. Thanks for saying that about the details, Dot. I was afraid I'd rushed this because I know the people and location too well. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/23/2016 |
| My, but it's a joy to see teenage Legolas again. So sure he's mature enough to cope with anything and full of the adolescent huffs. I'm sure nothing will go wrong ... ... ... Author Reply: Legolas teeters on the edge between child and adult and Thranduil intends to keep an eye on him until he's sure which was the kid will land. If nothing went wrong, there would be no story! | |
| Astrid | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/23/2016 |
| Thank you so much for this new story. I discovered your stories about two years ago and I can't stop reading them again and again. I love how you describe the family's dynamics. I am so fond of the paternal but strict Thrandeuil you created. "A watchful parent" as Legolas says. Author Reply: Thank you! When I first started writing fanfic, there was a vogue for stories about evil Thranduil, the abusive parent, which I thought was really unlikely. I figure he thinks he has to be strict because his boys are wood-elves, ie less wise and more dangerous. But he does love them. My beta used to say that I was really writing about family. | |
| m_mcfly | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/23/2016 |
| I have just recently discovered your Young Legolas stories and I simply adore them. So finding out you had just posted a new chapter for a new story filled me with joy :) The premise for this story is interesting - it'll be great to see Legolas interact with young humans who are roughly the same age as he is. I can't wait to read more and get to know Legolas and his family even better. Thank you for writing and for sharing. Author Reply: I love hearing from new readers. I've said before that it's like finding friends I didn't know I had. Mix a bunch of teenagers together at a feast and things are sure to be more lively! Thanks for telling me you're enjoying these stories. | |
| meckinock | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/22/2016 |
| How can this possibly go wrong? If I recall, Legolas at this stage of his adolescence is a wellspring of impeccably constructed, well-considered bad decisions. I feel bad for the poor merchant who's just trying to make an honest living, keep out of the marital doghouse, and appease the Laketown mayor. And maybe show his kids a bit of how the other half lives. I can't wait to see how Legolas's curiosity plays out. Author Reply: The merchant does have a lot of conflicting obligations going on. And Legolas can add two human adolescents and their decisions into the mix created by him and his buddies. Thanks for the review. | |