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To See A World  by Nightwing 9 Review(s)
Timmy2222Reviewed Chapter: 11 on 7/17/2004
I really enjoy the story as a whole, but there are some things I cannot explain.

Since we got to know there are people living in the woods I begin to wonder why they did not find the old healer and tried to bury him. If Aragorn and Legolas could do it, why should they not? And the other question is why the people leave food on the doorstep. Would they not want to know who those strangers are? For I think they must know that this food will no longer be taken in by the healer.
And I might have missed it, but what is the real reason for Aragorn and Legolas to stay in that cottage and prepare for winter? Would they not prefer to return to Mirkwood as soon as Legolas has recovered?

Timmy :)

MuinthelReviewed Chapter: 11 on 12/30/2003
Hi....Nightwing! It's me from the old world....:-)! I found your message and tried to reach you....did you get my mail?
Your newest chapter is just lovely and made me smile alot. I like the new name for the cat better...even though I grinned evily about the first!!
I think you just hit the spot again, showing in few words the deep and depending relationship the two have.....well there is nothing like a real "men-friendship".

FadesintothewestReviewed Chapter: 11 on 12/26/2003
Crazy here with the holidays and family, but I had to sneak in
cathing up with your story! As always, loveley, and I was
so moved by Legolas'and the oak tree. Hope your muses cooperate!

Shaan LienReviewed Chapter: 11 on 12/24/2003
Absolutely wonderful, though I think I've already read it. I just realized that. Please post quickly, I eagerly await the next installment. I'm glad you didn't make Legolas incredibly prideful, that I find quite annoying.

LossenchristalReviewed Chapter: 11 on 12/24/2003
Hi, I just read your whole story. I love it! There seem to be a lot of Aragorn/Legolas stories going right now. Yours is one of the better ones. It is a little disturbing to have Legolas blind, but it IS a new twist that no one else had thought of yet. Please make him better soon though! I don't know how much more I can stand of him being so helpless!:( It is so sad! Keep it up! I can't wait for the next installment!

Namarie!
Lossenchristal

LKKReviewed Chapter: 11 on 12/24/2003
I love Squeaky's Sindarin name. Congratulations to you and Ithilien for coming up with it. :-)

I know that I've missed a couple of reviews for chapters. My apologies. It was circumstances in my world that kept me from writing. Nothing to do with the quality of your story or your writing.

One of the things I love most about your story is your pacing. You let things that should take time take time, if that makes sense. For instance, after revealing that the orcs who killed Legolas' mother were nearby, many writers would have immediately sent the elf on a mission of revenge. But instead, you have held him back because he hasn't recovered properly. And that is how it should be. You're taking the time to allow both of them to adapt and adjust to their new circumstances. I appreciate that. Plus I like the small details you give to their daily life.

Oh! And I loved Legolas' comment about how he always regarded Aragorn as unusual but suspected the he was "the Strange One" this time! :-)

A wonderful chapter, Nightwing, preceeded by equally well done chapters that I should have also reviewed.

LKK

LOTRFaithReviewed Chapter: 11 on 12/24/2003
Hello there! Another lurker coming out of the shadows lol. I really, really like your story. It is very well written, though poor Legolas! I do hope he will get his sight back. :-D Merry Christmas! Namaarie~ LOTRFaith

French PonyReviewed Chapter: 11 on 12/24/2003
Oooh, it's back! I wasn't really sure how long you took generally to put out more story, but I am well prepared to wait.

This continues to be a good, strong, patient exploration of changed circumstances. I love the way you describe every bit of Legolas and Aragorn's journey in adjusting to sudden blindness, especially since there are no therapists or trained personnel around to guide them through. They've got to do everything for themselves and figure out what they need as they go along. The detail about counting paces between points A and B, and the problem of walking drift (and how many of us sighted people would even think of that?) bring this process to life in all of its slow, frustrating glory.

Now, as to the problem of Legolas being able to follow sound but not walk in a perfectly straight line -- He does seem to be able to perceive "voices" in the natural world around him all through the Trilogy. I wonder if it might be appropriate to place different natural items with their own "voices" at important points. I wonder if he could "hear" a potted plant calling. The horse might prove useful as well. Horses have good memories for direction, and while there is no seeing-eye dog around, a seeing-eye horse might be an acceptable substitute.

Right now, the murder mystery is of secondary importance to me -- we've never really met either the old man nor the townspeople, so they're far less real than Aragorn and Legolas, who are brought to life in such stunning roundness. But clearly the murder mystery is important to them, so I will follow what they follow.

It's also nice to see how perspectives change -- Legolas, an Elf, thinks that Aragorn is strange, while the human townspeople think that Legolas is strange. It all depends on how you look at it, I suppose.

Orophins DottirReviewed Chapter: 11 on 12/23/2003
What a lovely holiday treat! This has become one of my favorite stories. The blindness is overwhelmingly sad but it is none of this "torture the elf" genre of writing. Something that is very plausible and could happen.

I love the cat and am glad you gave her a dignified name. As the owner of two elvencats, this is most important. They can become sulky if called Squeeky. They have too much dignity!

I thought the part with Legolas seeking comfort from the trees was perfect. Aragorn's trepidation at the idea and still letting him go was also good.

Keep writing! (Dare we hope for an update before the New Year?)

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