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| All Is Fair in Love and War by Chigger | 4 Review(s) |
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| Grey Wonderer | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 1/3/2004 |
| I don't know about the men reading this, but I felt as if you had been to war when I read it. Are you sure you aren't a soldier on leave writing to pass the time before the next conflict? I respectfully request that you don't kill Narion in battle as I would be heart-broken. I love the image of Morwen as a bare-foot child seeing him off to battle. He still remains one of my favorites among your characters. Also hope Belecthor isn't getting too sure of himself. Also love this : ["Do not be ashamed of your tears, my Lady," he said gently. "For the tears of a Lady bring a slight amount of joy to the hearts of men, even as they bring pain. No man wishes to go to war thinking the women of his country do not worry for him, or grieve for him should he die.] This is my favorite part in the entire story so far. It is like a line from a John Wayne movie! Something the hero says to comfort those left behind! Perfect! Keep it up as it is only getting better. Author Reply: I'm pretty sure. I'm just a 14 year old girl sitting at home on her computer with a stuffy nose and a bad cough. :) *Spoilers* I don't plan on killing Narion anytime in the near future. Now . . . it will have to happen sometime, but he'll have reached a ripe old age before I kill him. After all, I like him, too, you know. ;) I'm sure Morwen was a cute little barefooted kid. I can see her running around like that. I love the little sound of tiny bare feet hitting hard stone floor. :) And Belecthor knows enough to be careful. He's just a man trying to act tough in front of the ladies. ;) He'll be careful. When I read that line, I usually don't have all the pauses in the right places for John Wayne to be talking. :) I guess it would have to be something more like this. "Don't be . . . ashamed o' crying, ma'am," he drawled. "Men LIKE to see a Lady cry . . . when they leave for war. Makes 'em happy . . ., even when it . . . makes 'em sad. They don't like to leave . . . thinkin' . . . the girls don't miss 'em . . . or want 'em t' live." :D Thanks a lot. Since EomerofEastfold has now been nice enough to read over my battle chapter and let me know that he couldn't find much wrong with it, I plan to post sometime in the next few days. Anyway, here's hoping. ;) | |
| EomerofEastfold | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 1/3/2004 |
| I actually think you captured that feeling quite well. And it's not exactly a feeling unique to men, but rather those born with a warrior's spirit. It isn't a feeling that you can easily put into words. Lord knows I have tried and failed on many occasions. Those without a warrior's soul struggle to understand, and the ones that do understand the way you think and feel almost effortlessly. Some people's feelings are stronger than others, but that's the way I see the world. I, for one, feel that I would rather take an an army of Orcs armed only with my teeth than to run for the hills. Author Reply: I'm with you. I may not want to go into battle, and I know I'm never going to enlist in the Army or anything like that, but if some CREEP comes storming into MY house, threatening MY family and tries to KILL us all, I am NOT going to simply let him do so, if I have anything to say about it. I hate it when people act like cowards and let jerks take over their lives. DO something, for crying out loud. Don't run outside and call the police using your cell phone, because by the time they get there, the idiot will have gotten whatever he wants, maybe killed you and already run. Anyway, that's how all my characters feel too. ;) | |
| dr_seuss_is_cool | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 1/2/2004 |
| i think you did really well with getting the right feeling...i'm not a guy...but i think that u probably did get that feeling well...i'm glad that Eradan won't be joining them just yet man...i almost started crying cuz i don't want Narion to leave i'm gonna cry if and when he dies aww...and Belecthor...aww i feel really really bad for Eradan...i wish that he could go into battle...but...i'm still glad that he gets to spend more time with Morwen really excited to see some fighting awesome job!! Author Reply: Eradan's not as happy about staying behind as you are to see him stay. ;) Still, he has to admit that Morwen isn't exactly the worst company he could be keeping. :) Don't worry. Narion actually wants to go. Of course, like all happily married people, he would rather stay at home with his wife and kids, but he's also a fighting man who loves his job. :) The next chapter may take a little while. It's going through some extensive editing and such. I'm not very good with battles, really. Still, it's up to five pages so far. | |
| coonzalas | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 1/2/2004 |
| I think you captured the feelings of military men perfectly. Though I'm a girl as well, my dad is in the USAF, and has been in combat before, and shortly will be again. He has described the feeling for me, and what you said pretty much matches up. I look forward to the next chapter. I'm really enjoying this story! coon Author Reply: Give my best to your dad. I've always been facinated by the Air Force. I'm also glad I captured the feeling right. I don't think I was exactly sure what I was going to write when I started this chapter, and I just put down what came to me. It really didn't even take that long to write, which surprised me. Glad you're enjoying it, and thanks for the feedback. | |