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| Serious Trouble by The Karenator | 12 Review(s) |
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| Lamiel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 4/1/2004 |
| This is absolutely charming. Beautifully written, clever, and with a wonderful thread of humor that kept me smiling the whole way through. Marvelous! Author Reply: Lamiel, Thank you for such kind words. Daeron has been a tremendous amount of fun for me to write. I get to let him 'think' all the snarky little things many of us would like to say out loud if we didn't fear being considered socially unacceptable. He's a good kid. Unfortunately, he's a mischief magnet...an innocent one, but still, he attracts trouble like dust to a TV screen. Thanks for reviewing. I hope you'll enjoy the rest of the tale. :>) Karen | |
| Celeb | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/12/2004 |
| We were apprehended with little incident since we were out-weighed and out-elfed. Sputter! That did it for me. What a fantastic chapter! I love Daeron's turn of phrase, that combination of wry humour and child's indignant sarcasm had me giggling all way through this. The more poignant moments were really well done too. I thought the end of teh chapter, with Seregon and Daeron was really lovely and touching. Celeb Author Reply: Celeb, I'm so glad you enjoyed the chapter. Daeron is a bit irreverent in his thoughts. He means well, but trouble seems to follow him. I think Thranduil does as much parenting as Daeron's naneth does. He's sort of taken on the father figure role. Seregon is good guy, too, but he's carrying his own baggage and has never quite stepped up to the plate in assuming a role of guidance for his younger brother. But he loves the little scalawag. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and review this. I've enjoyed Daeron telling me his story. Thanks, Celeb. Karen | |
| Maeglin the Traitor | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/9/2004 |
| Maeglin bows with courtesy to his fair Queen. He has received his summons to attend her story and raced here in eagerness. A story from the Queen of the Southern Woodlands! Kaladriel shall weave a tale for the ages! Alright, so she has to put Lalaith in it. Comes with the territory! HIS queen shall rise above that upstart wind. Milady, may I say that the "Dark Lord of Mirkwood" has just become my favorite description of Thranduil ever? Maeglin the Traitor ____________________ This is wonderful! I now understand why the Dottir has screamed for its publication. Daeron has to be one of the most charming OC I have ever read. May he thrive and continue in many stories by both you and Queen Lalaith! Author Reply: My sweet elfling, How it gladdens my heart to see you in attendance in my court. Yes, my windy sistah is in the story. She was there, ya know. One look from her is far more frightening to the little guys than Thranduil on his most scary day. He could, however, be a bit 'dark' at times. 'Tis true, Lalaith is a force to be reckoned with...meteorologically and personally. But YOUR queen shall ever be your champion and stand firm at the side of the most beautiful First-Age Elf to ever grace Arda. Thank you for reading this and for the wonderful review. Your addition to our little demented group has been like finding a vein of mithril running through the backyard. Between you and the Dottir, I don't know who makes me laugh harder. I was just thinking this morning that your calling may be to write a book on the intricacies of the fair Southern tongue. Here, sugah, have a grape Nehi and a moonpie before you have to get back to the 'Drunken Elleth'. It's on me. Forever, my sweet elfling, Kaladriel | |
| Jules | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/9/2004 |
| What a pair of adorable brats. I agree, the girls deserved it. Thranduil, Aldamir and Seregon may be driven crazy by them but at leat the elflings keep things interesting. Can't wait to see what mischief they come up w/ next. I do hope they get their bows and knives back soon, though. I know I'm a softy but it's like taking away someones much loved stuffed animal. Thanks for writing Jule Author Reply: Thanks, Jule for reviewing. I agree; those girls were asking for it! The boys got a bit carried away in retaliating, but the elleths deserved it! I love the comparison of taking away their weapons to taking away their much loved stuffed animals. It certainly was for Daeron, and I think Legolas was none to pleased to lose his bow either. Yeah, they get them back, but I don't think they'll use them on the elleths again. But just think! Every time they shoot an orc in the future, they can picture the two girls! An Elven form of visualization. Thanks again for reading and reviewing. I'm having a great time with the little guys, and I hope you'll enjoy them, too. :>) Karen | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/9/2004 |
| Karen! I just laughed and cried and laughed again! Oh, this is just wonderful! I really like your use of this POV - it is hard to do and yet I feel like Daeron - and oh, am I glad I am not him! I like your Legolas, for what little we heard from him. He is brave and at least knows when to shut up. You are making me thankful my mother wasn't a screamer - and seldom did I need the dressing down treatment. Usually one look had this child under her bed - I so hated it when my parents were angry with me! Oh, I really look forward to where you take this. Will this all be from Daeron's pov, or will we see others? Author Reply: Yes, poor Legolas is not quite certain how to react to being a supporting character instead of the center of the universe. However, he's handled it well so far. He's been gracious and kind in allowing Daeron to tell the story from his point of view. First-person is a funny pov. Some people really like it and some hate it with a passion. I tried to stay only within the boundaries of what was Daeron's knowledge and his impressions. There were a couple of places where I thought it could go either way, but changed little about them because I felt it was still Daeron's perspective of what he was observing...his conclusions. Thank you for the compliment. I enjoyed looking at Mirkwood through the eyes of someone who was not one of the Thranduilions, but was intimately present in the household. This whole story is in first-person/Daeron. I may attempt to tell more about these adventures in another story later, either from Daeron's view again, or switch to third-person so we get a better look at the others. Thank you for reading this and leaving a review. You are such a sweet adorable child. :>) Karen | |
| Orophins Dottir | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/9/2004 |
| Oh, Sister! How did we ever survive their childhoods! So proud they have made us, but the cost along the way! My poor husband actually has a few silver threads among the gold of his hair. He tells me each one is named "Daeron" or "Legolas", and I believe him. The little scamps! Seregon and Aldamir, at least, continue to bear themselves with the full dignity of the House of Oropher. *She whispers to Mîr-Gilúviel that he shall be allowed to produce a few silver hairs for Thranduil in the very next story. She is sure Sister Kaladriel will not forget her quiet one.* The Queen of Commas thanks you for the privilege of being able to work on this fair story in any small capacity. How is the Mangy Ranger anyway? *Lalaith waves blithely to Meckinock!* Ever, Lalaith Author Reply: It is true, fair sistah of mine; Elven childhoods last a long.g.g.g time. Often have I wondered how the king managed to not lock them in the dungeon until they came of age...or send them to Elrond for spite. Tell Mir not to worry, he has put more than his share of silver threads through his adar's hair. He just happened to not be home for this adventure...something I suspect he is quite grateful for. Ah, and the Queen of Commas...what would I do without her? You have been a great help and more than a lot of fun to run the ideas by and then, the rough drafts themselves. Your comments are far better than anything I write. It's a shame the other readers don't get to see them. I never got back a corrected chapter than I didn't laugh through the whole thing. Thank you so much, my fair sistah, for your help, for reading this again and for taking the time to review it. BTW, the mangy ranger is doing quite well. She is still sharpening the sword Emily, but she stops every now and then to challenge Halbarad to a game of poker. Your humble servant, Kaladriel | |
| Kitt of Lindon | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/9/2004 |
| Not a bad idea...shooting arrows at my own Fluffy and Flouncy...oh, this is a public review. Ignore that. Very entertaining story, as original as Legolas stories go. (It is hard to do an original Legolas story with so many of them out there.) Out of curiousity, does Daeron's name have a particuler meaning? Continue soon, dear lady. Author Reply: Hey Kitt, I imagine we all have known a few people we would like to shoot arrows at. Feel free to let 'em rip! It's very cathartic. Thanks for the kind words. It is hard to come up with original Legolas stories. Tolkien told us so little about him or his family that I suppose one can just sort of take off in almost any direction they want. Daw's Mirkwood has influenced me greatly. I love her creation of family and culture. I doubt Tolkien could have done better than she has. Daeron mean 'shadow-one' in Sindarin...maybe. The book I have put a question mark after the meaning, so I suppose it's up for debate from anyone who is more knowledgeable than me about the language...which would be almost everyone. Thanks for reading this and a special thank you for reviewing it. I really appreciate it. Karen | |
| meckinock | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/9/2004 |
| PS Would you believe it if I told you that I intentionally mangled that review just to make you feel better? Author Reply: No. (Pats the ranger's hand affectionately.) | |
| meckinock | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/9/2004 |
| And the award for Best Disclaimer goes to... You are simply a riot, Fair Queen! I bow before you. And thanks for graciously crediting my odd and misplaced advice, but truly I think the only feerreting I'm currently capable of is I think the only thing I'm capable of ferreting out lately are nasty-smelling messes left by the sword Emily in the living room. Your wit, imagination, and skewed psyche did it all. Daeron is a great and subtly complex character - beneath the wise mouth lies a budding sage, if he can only stay out of Thranduil's hair long enough to survive childhood. Your descriptions and observations are dead-on, as always. - Some of my favorites: Thranduil - all day long! I couldn't believe that Daeron DIDN'T dive for cover. Something about those calm gray eyes peering out from above those steepled fingers at the "two gamey hens"...the vein coming out of hiding, the fist slamming down, and finally, the bellow and arm-flinging. Lovely buildup. Seregon and his quiver strap...Greenwood the Hop, Skip, and Jump... and finally, the coup de grace - Yes, that is a VERY long time to poke blueberries into batter! Keep it coming, fqk! Author Reply: Thank you. Thank you very much for this auspicious award. I'd like to thank all the little people who made it possible...NO, not hobbits. The rangers and windy elf-queens... Really, I could not have done this or gotten up the nerve to post it, if it hadn't been for your 'feerreting'. (Is this a new species? Something you ran across on your travels through Arda, or did you see it in a book at the Eriador-South Middle School?) Anyway, I do appreciate all the patience you've shown me and all the help given. If people could see the mistakes you ferreted out of the rough drafts.... Thanks for the kind words. You really are a trooper to read this thing AGAIN! I really have enjoyed Daeron and Legolas and their adventures. You being along for the ride made it even more worthwhile. You're the best! fqk | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/9/2004 |
| Oh what a bad day these two had! I suppose it's their own fault but still, they were so miserable. You do a nice job with the first person POV here, Karen. You give us Daeron's personality by showing us his thought and words. He certainly is a handful! I'm not sure I would want him loose with weapons either. The families are nicely done. We can see the older brothers and Daeron's naneth emerging nicely. Thranduil is his intimidating self. Daeron and Legolas have courage if they cross him regularly. Author Reply: Hi daw, It's true. These two little elflings had a big, bad, terrible day. And yes, it was their own fault. Aren't life's lessons a bummer to learn? They obviously missed the part of the book where Tolkien stated that elflings needed little guidance. Thank you for the compliment on the POV. First-person is always risky. It's often the kiss of death for a story, and some people hate it with a vengence. As I've told you before, I like a good first person pov. But, I think, this story's pov was chosen by Daeron instead of me. This will certainly serve as a good excuse if it falls flat on its face. It was his fault! You're not the only one to want to get the weapons out of Daeron's hands. The Ranger was terribly nervous for a while, too. Thanks again, daw. I really appreciate you reading and reviewing. Karen | |