News Resources
Login
Become a member
Help
Search
|
|
| About Us News Resources
Login
Become a member
Help
Search
|
|
|
| The Storyteller by PIppinfan1988 | 6 Review(s) |
|---|---|
| Hobbits Soul | Reviewed Chapter: 13 on 7/10/2004 |
| I love what you did with the pink seashell! It was so sweet! Great chapter..sort of sad..but good. Author Reply: Yes...the lovely pink seashell...there had to be "living" proof of his little journey. A souvenir, if you will. :-) You know--I've had to re-read this story in order to keep up with you! It's been a while since I last read it, and I've noticed a couple errors that I need to repair in the coming days, but I also noticed that I ought to show a little better the emotions of Adalgrim and Flambard. Yes, they were angry--and most parents would be if their teenagers had taken off to places unknown. But more than that, both fathers were relieved to see that their lads had returned safe and unharmed. Paladin and Adelard's punishments could wait until they had at least arrived home. The heartache of missing home, parents, and children was a bit of what I wanted to convey. Thank you, Hobbits Soul! :-) Pippinfan | |
| Pearl Took | Reviewed Chapter: 13 on 3/24/2004 |
| The meeting of fathers and sons was perfect! And I love Paladin being so pleased with himself for figuring out a way to entertain the children. This is such a delightfull story. Author Reply: Thank you, Pearl! Your encouragement has always meant a lot to me. Your stories are a must-read for anyone who likes Tooks! :-) Take care. Pippinfan | |
| Dreamflower | Reviewed Chapter: 13 on 3/24/2004 |
| I usually try to avoid reading "in progress"--it's so *frustrating* to have to wait-- but you've been so nice to me! So I went ahead with this one. What fun! I had not really thought much about Gandalf's previous interactions in the Shire, although it's clear that he was busy there even before Bilbo! I like your Isengar very much; and don't over-enthusiastice caregivers everywhere make the same mistake in underestimating the elderly? I do hope it's finished soon though! Author Reply: lol..you won't have to wait too long; I usually post quickly, though I had an important errand to run this morning, I might be a tad late today. The story is drawing down to an end, so again, it won't be long now--I rarely go past ten chapters. I like Isengar, too; if you want to read more about him, I have a story called Gandalf and the Seahobbit where he is featured, if you're interested. Take care. Pippinfan P.S. My you've been busy posting today! I gotta get the next chapters up, but afterward, I'll be checking out Buckland again. | |
| Pervinca | Reviewed Chapter: 13 on 3/24/2004 |
| Aww! Loved the reunions - I think I just love reunions in general! And hopefully there'll be more in the next chapter when they get back to the Smials. That little hint of Eglantine being in love with Adelard before Paladin was great! Do I detect the begginings of another story? Or at least a more thorough explanation in this one!:) Author Reply: Well...I think she was pulling Paladin's leg on that one, but yes, it would be nice to write a love story between Paladin and Eglantine. I imagine them as childhood sweethearts, but I'm afraid I think it would only be you and I reading it! Thank you for taking the time to review! Pippinfan | |
| Grey Wonderer | Reviewed Chapter: 13 on 3/24/2004 |
| )looking over to the pink sea-shell lying on her vanity.) Question answered and in a very nice way. Just knew that had to still be somewhere! LOL Author Reply: Like I said--can't get anything by you! :-) PF | |
| Arwen Baggins | Reviewed Chapter: 13 on 3/23/2004 |
| One little piece of advice...the flash backs should be told in the first-person POV, since Paladin, a main character in the story, is the one telling it. Author Reply: Thank you--and I'll take that advice to heart. You're going to cringe when I tell you that I actually entertained that idea, but I had already posted the first few chapters... Then after I got to thinking about it more, I decided to leave it as is so that it wouldn't sound *too* much like Seahobbit. Gracious me! I was already doing the *flashbacks*--I forgot just how strenuous those can be, and I don't think I'll be doing it again for a long while! :-P It's almost over--thanks for taking the time to review and give advice. :-) Pippinfan | |