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| Fallen Rain: (Wie Gefallner Regen) by Bodkin | 6 Review(s) |
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| Imhiriel | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 9/1/2006 |
| Very intense. The story draws the reader in right from the start. Marvellous imagery. There were so many beautiful, haunting passages that it is truly difficult to choose a few, but this is one: Their fury subsided from searing flame to burning peat; slow, concealed, unstoppable. As he grew, from infant to child, from child to boy, he needed her less. The candle burned down, and began to flicker. It must have been so hard for Gilraen, having lost her love, and then giving up her home, her life, subsuming her own needs and desires for her son. I have such an immense respect for her courage and sense of duty! To compare Gilraen and Celebrķan had not occured to me before, but it fits very well in the way you show it. Author Reply: Actually, a lot of the (few) female characters seem to have something in common with Gilraen and Celebrian! There isn't a lot of happy ever after - even Arwen has to lose everything she gained before she can find peace in death and be reunited with Aragorn. Gilraen has a really tough role to play - one that isn't very glamorous or dramatic, but that is an essential part of building up the Aragorn who could become king. Modern taste is much more in favour of the Shield-maiden, though - taking her fate into her own hands and challenging the female role. And the poor twins. They fed off each other, I think, and supported each other through their need to wipe out the orc species - but they needed to go 'home'. | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 4/25/2004 |
| I like this - it's a treat to read *good* stories about the twins, there are so few! Thankfully this site has more than most. I like the gradual waning of their bloodlust for orcs, the slow acceptance of Celebrian's departure, and the way they comfort Eldarion. Finally, I'm so glad they eventually sail and are reunited with their mother - I find stories where the twins become mortal and die so sad! Jay Author Reply: Thank you. I like the twins - and they seem a bit one-sided as adults. (I like your little rascals!) My version and I don't want them to become mortal. I can't believe they wouldn't want to be reunited with their mother and father, and I feel that the sheer length of their lives would detach them from mortals too much for them to want to choose that path - unless they were like Arwen and fell desperately in love. (Besides I have decided elfhood is a recessive gene and if you inherit it from both parents, you are an elf, whether or not you are peredhil! Arwen is an elf, too. I could go further, but it gets boring.) | |
| Lindelea | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 4/25/2004 |
| Let me see if i can do this from memory... Log into SoA (enter your name and password). From the list of your stories that ought to appear, click on the number of chapters for "Those Who Remain" (if you click on the title that only allows you to edit the information *about* the story, not the story itself). This brings up a chapter listing. Click on the title of the chapter you wish to edit. This brings up an editing screen. Make your changes, scroll to the bottom of the page, and click on the button there (should say "edit" or something like that). That is, if your computer works anything like mine. I find SoA astonishingly responsive and easy-to-use in posting and editing stories. Hope this helps! L. Author Reply: Thank you so much. It worked. I've never tried posting anywhere else, but I do enjoy doing this! I doesn't seem to matter how carefully you proof read, you always overlook something. And no matter how much your computer nags you about using sentence fragments, it completely ignores meaningless (in context) words. | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 4/25/2004 |
| Wow. Just wow. Where have you been hiding these stories, Bodkin? This was beautiful and moving and so true. Your language is poetic and you are subtle as you show us the twins coming to understand and accept what had happened. I am just awe struck. Author Reply: Reciprocated. I seem to be dreaming up first lines - which isn't very good for plotting, but works for me on some levels. | |
| Lindelea | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 4/25/2004 |
| Lovely! A nicely balanced flow, very Elf-like in that it covers a great number of years while scarcely noting the passage of time. There is one little thing that needs attention: He raised his voice enough to be hurt by the remainder of the small party. (I think you mean "heard" rather than "hurt", don't you?) Author Reply: Rats! I clearly mean heard - how on earth do I change it? Thank you for your comment. | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 4/25/2004 |
| Well, Bodkin, I can hardly type this through me tears. I am sitting here sobbing, feeling the grief of the twins as they suffered being torn from their mother and watching their brother and sister die; to their joy at seeing thier mother well again. Your writing is beautiful and the flow of this is very well done. Author Reply: Thank you - I'm feeling for Elrond and Celebrian at the moment. Update me soon! | |