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| Freedom From Fear by Fionnabhair Nic Aillil | 1 Review(s) |
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| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: 16 on 5/9/2004 |
| You write claustrophobia so well. The walls of Éowyn's world are closing in slowly but surely, and Grima is sitting untouchably at the center of it all. The one formatting suggestion I have is that you make sure that you begin a new paragraph every time you have a new speaker. Sometimes when you're in the middle of a conversation, you let two speakers run together into the same paragraph, and it gets a little confusing. | |