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| Dark Dreams by Avon | 4 Review(s) |
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| Nancy Brooke | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/13/2004 |
| Another lovely and tender story. I really enjoyed your compassionate portrait of this 'family,' and while I was saddened and a little (appropriately) troubled at those fragile boys it was equally easy to see the men they would grow into. Good job. Author Reply: Thank you, Nancy! I'm pleased you enjoyed it. Avon | |
| Raksha The Demon | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/28/2004 |
| This is a wonderful "wallow", one that I'm sure I'll reread often. (having already reread it twice!) Imrahil is very well written; I've always thought of him as being the man Faramir could have become if he'd grown up in a happy and supportive family - not that there is much wrong with adult Faramir, but he is clearly not as cheerful and self-assured as his uncle. The only thing I didn't quite get was Faramir's "Never again?" line; I don't quite understand what he was referencing.... Author Reply: Hi Raksha, Thanks for the feedback. I'm really pleased tnat you liked it. I don't really know what to say when people say such nice things... Imrahil is very well written; I've always thought of him as being the man Faramir could have become if he'd grown up in a happy and supportive family Now there's an inspiring thought. You're so right now I think of it. The only thing I didn't quite get was Faramir's "Never again?" line; I don't quite understand what he was referencing.... You're not the only one - that one is due for some rewriting. I know what I mean but that's not much use if I'm puzzling my audience. ;-) He meant that never again would Numenor happen - that dark as the future might look it didn't hold 'inescapable darkness'. Cheers, Avon | |
| Éile igen Briain | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/27/2004 |
| How DO you churn out these wonderful stories so quickly! Great characterization and a lovely story. The ending is a bit off. I feel kinda like I been left hanging. My suggestion would be to leave off the last two sentances and change: “Never again,” I whispered. “I swear.” ...to something like: “Never again,” I whispered, hoping my words would prove true. ::Shrugs:: Just my 2 cents... :) FYI, I finally emailed you on 'Remembering Boromir,' sorry it took so long... Author Reply: How DO you churn out these wonderful stories so quickly! Right at the moment I'm darned if I know - stories just seem to be leaping at me! I'm usually nowhere near this prolific. Thanks for the suggestion about the ending - as soon as I get some time I think I'm going to try it a couple of ways - one with an expanded vision and one with no vision and see what happens. BTW - thank you VERY much for the wonderful beta you sent me on 'Remembering Boromir'. I will e-mail you proper thanks - it's just that stories keep attacking me ;-) Avon | |
| Jules | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/27/2004 |
| This is a wonderful story. I loved all of the characters. Thanks for writing Jule Author Reply: Thansk for the feedback, Jules! Avon | |