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| Freedom From Fear by Fionnabhair Nic Aillil | 1 Review(s) |
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| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: 19 on 5/30/2004 |
| Goodbye, Théodred! You will be missed. But Éowyn gets to ride outside at last. You did a pretty good job blending in the movie scenes. If you must re-narrate those scenes, it is best to do them as a minimum of description only, as you did. In further chapters, I would urge you to look into comma placement; you have quite a few run-on clauses that want commas. | |