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| Tell This Mortal by Chathol-linn | 5 Review(s) |
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| Weil | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 8/3/2015 |
| You have managed to describe the utter loveliness of the Elves and Legolas without sounding trite or silly, bravo! Have you been close to being hit by lightning? You described it so well with just one sentence - "My hair stirred, as of it wanted to leave my head" - I can imagine the static charge hovering over her. You have a fine knack for describing a situation/event so succinctly that we feel we are there seeing it with our own eyes or experiencing it ourselves - very good story-telling skills. Wonderful! | |
| Linsul | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 8/15/2004 |
| Oooh! I love the "needs" thing! Great writing, I especially love your descriptives! | |
| Lamiel | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 6/20/2004 |
| The description of Legolas' conflict, the need to sail over sea coupled with the desire to stay in Middle-earth, is very vivid and beautifully done. And I just loved the description when the narrator first saw him, "For a moment I thought he was limned in pale light, but lighting is uncertain just before a storm." Nice. The giving of the description, hesitantly, taking it back again. Very nice. I'm not sure why the close call with the lightning bolt was necessary - maybe a warning from the Valar not to give in to those fangirlish urges? But I like the image of this beautiful Elf. "A tall, slender youth of about 20 or so, with three-thousand-year-old eyes." Yes, I like it very much. Author Reply: Hi, Lamiel. Ha, ha! The warning to fangurls may very well be one of the functions of the lightning bolt. Whether or no, I' keep it in mind! Many thanks for your comments. Regards - Chathol-linn | |
| Rose Sared | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 6/19/2004 |
| Your writing is so powerful! I love it. What a feeling of bitter menace you manage to get into your scenes of beauty, hah, I want to yell don't go to your sailmaker, but would I deny her her experience of Legolas. No. Just yummy, Rose Author Reply: How encouraged I feel when I read your remarks! This was the kind of response in readers that I hoped I would achieve. Thank you for letting me know. Regards - Chathol-linn | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 6/19/2004 |
| This seems to me to be a plausible description of sea longing. It's like an addiction. How tragic. Galadriel was right. He's never going to be able to walk beneath the trees of ME in contentment again. And yet, he's tied there. It's his home. He's like a displaced person no matter where he goes. Author Reply: "Addiction" was exactly the condition I imagined for Legolas. In fact this story originally was going to be an exploration of addiction: Aerlinn for wine and Legolas for the sea. Thanks, daw!Regards - Chathol-linn | |