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| Home by Rose Sared | 4 Review(s) |
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| lwarren | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/25/2004 |
| Ai, RS, I sit here in tears and make a list of all the beautiful phrases you included in this lovely tale of two friends. I love the friendship between these two unlikely characters; I look for stories about it constantly. This one is unusual because of the way you used POV, which made it even more memorable. "These sweeping actions, repeated daily over the span of my years...could have ground the great iron-tower of the Dark Lord to ruin..." - powerful, when you think of all the repetitive actions in our lives "...the elf has ruined me for polite company." Dear, grumpy Gimli. :-) "...sorcery born from the spell of mineral oil, the mourning of the gulls, and the tilt of that unchanging head." *sigh* Legolas perched on the mast - the gulls "sweep round his head like a swirl of leaves..." :( heartache approaches, it makes me think of time for Legolas from that point on as autumn; the leaves are falling, everything is changing for him (and the elves of ME) and winter is coming quickly " 'Gimli,' his voice barely makes the distance between us. 'The sea.' " *sob* such a short wrenching statement And there are others; the way the bow of the ship held him as he literally threw his heart after the flying gulls, and how the dwarf was his anchor, and the way they seemed to understand each other. You have written an extremely affecting piece here, at least for me. I can't think of many that have caught the friendship between Legolas and Gimli any better. You may not have read the directions right, but this is a keeper! linda Author Reply: Now you have made me cry! How blessed I am to have someone who loves my fiction so much. Thank you, you make all the aggravation and striving worth while. Most gratified you enjoyed the exercise. Rose Author Reply: Sorry to reply to a reply of my own, but have you found the 'Big List of Legolas Gimli fics' on the Axe Bow archive. Both friendship and slash lists are there, and most of the best fics in the genre. Lotsa Love Rose | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/24/2004 |
| This was lovely, Rose. I enjoyed seeing the actions from the two different character's perspectives. And the imagery was nice. Author Reply: Thanks daw. Writing for a workshop is so different from free writing, it is very good mental exercise, and makes me just examine why I write the things I do. I have a three hundred word version up on the HA workshop site. I don't like it (no pictures) but others do. Is it taste? Don't know. Sorry for the rave, thanks for the reveiw. Rose | |
| Lamiel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/24/2004 |
| Oh, very nice. I love the imagery, the little details - the wave catching under the bow of the ship, like a cat stretching. And such beautiful description of Legolas perched high on the crosstree of the mast, his hair glowing in the sun. Lovely. You portray the even through the two perspectives very well, and without seeming redundant or repetitive. Very nice. Author Reply: So glad you liked it Lamiel. I have posted a three hundred word version, now, to the workshop, it is such a contrast, no imagery. Some people like it but I don't know if it just a matter of taste or a matter of good writing. Interesting huh? Rose | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/24/2004 |
| I like Gimli - he doesn't really get featured enough except as a sidekick to the handsome prince. He's a very wholehearted person, isn't he - and strong in mind as well as body. I don't know if Legolas would have survived 120 years of sea longing without his support. Nice story. Interesting combination of points of view. Author Reply: Thank you, it is always fun to do writing exercises as they push you into doing things you would never otherwise do. Glad the experiment succeeded for you. Rose | |