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The First Journey  by Manderly 4 Review(s)
Starlight and MoonlightReviewed Chapter: 4 on 3/1/2018
"The matter of timber?" Wow, that sounds very, totally exiting.

Sigil GalenReviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/1/2004
LOL! You certainly captured that youthful excitement with Legolas. I was the same way as a child - especially if it involved an amusement park. The night before a trip to Six Flags I would be completely sleepless and get so excited that my nose would bleed. Happened all the time. (I probably shoudn't admit to that). Anyway, my point is that you captured that restless eagerness spot-on. :)

Author Reply: I remember the first time I was allowed to join a school outing - the sleeplessness the night before and the nausea in the morning was all there for me so I am writing from personal experience. Your nose would bleed? (wow!). At least I didn't have that symptom.

Thanks for the review!

FirnsarnienReviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/1/2004
Aw, Leggy's excitement is contagious! LOL I thought for sure, he was going to puke at morning meal. His enthusiasm for going could hardly be contained! And Tavaro taking his time eating his poridge, it's a miracle Leggy didn't just dump it over his head and declare him finished!!! I'm glad Tavaro finally gave in to the little imp, er, I mean, his brother, heh, heh, and finally announced his readiness to leave! LOL

Aldeon's thoughts for Legolas were really sweet. It's too bad that little Elfling never enjoyed the freedom his brothers did. But, I can see why they'd want to keep him as safe as possible, he absolutely adorable! *sigh* ;)

Legolas has such a kind heart. I love the way he rushed back to thank his father and tell him he loved him. That was so sweet! *sniff*

Well, happy story or not, I'm still glad those two guards are with them on this journey. I swear I'm as bad as Thranduil...every time Legolas leaves the palace walls, my stomache clenches up and my heart begins to race with a little aprehension. ;) And yeah, I think Tavaro will be extremely glad for those guards by the end too. Legolas is tiring! LOL

So many little sweet moments in this chappy. ;) I hope you tell a little of how Leggy does sleeping in the tree. After all, it's a new experience for him. Perhaps Tavaro has to sleep next to him? Keep a hand on him? Hmmmm, this could be a wonderful little brotherly comfort scene here. ;)

Anyway, enough with my mindless rambling. Great chappy as usual! It made me smile and sigh an awful lot...pretty much means...I loved it! :) Can't wait for the next one! :) Hurry!!!

Author Reply: I am sure Legolas would have done what you said had Tavaro gone for his fourth bowl of porridge.

I can really sympathize with Aldeon's feelings about Legolas as I feel the same way about how the world is so much different now for my kids than when I was growing up.

Tavaro will be become more and more grateful for the two guards as the journey progresses. Legolas can only stay out of trouble for so long.

I guess I should have described Legolas' experience of sleeping in a tree more, but since I've never slept in a tree before, I really didn't know how to go about describing it. I would think you are right about Tavaro having to sleep close to his brother to make sure the elfling doesn't turn over in his sleep and drop to the ground. That would be some rude awakening.

Thanks for your review!

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/1/2004
What a great beginning for this trip. The two brothers are both enjoying themselves, and Legolas is having his great adventure.

Author Reply: Yes, the trip is off to a good start. I think Legolas is too star-struck with being out in the world to get into any trouble just yet and Tavaro must be finding it a change to be in charge of his young brother rather than being under the charge of Feren.

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