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| The King's Justice by maya_ar | 3 Review(s) |
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| Chathol-linn | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 7/15/2004 |
| What I like about this part, and its support of the story overall, is the balance it provides among narration, description, and dialog. I always think of these three elements as *the* elements of fiction. There was more narration in this part, and it was necessary to move the story along. It balanced the previous chapters that contained description and dialog. I was going to offer a featherweight criticism on the greater reliance on archaic terms and sentence construction. Then I realized that it all occurred as dialog in the mouths of the characters, which makes it sound natural instead of jarring or overdone. Once again, well crafted! - Chathol-linn Author Reply: Chathol-linn, I cannot tell you how much your comments here mean to me. One of the biggest concerns in drafting and redrafting this story was achieving an internal balance in terms of structure as well as themes. To have a reader pick out "balance" as one of the positive things about the piece - I'm sitting here with a huge grin on my face right now! Thank you! cheers, Maya | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 7/15/2004 |
| I liked the memories of their shared boyhood that Beregond and Faramir call up. Poor Beregond. The men he killed were only doing their duty too and they were comrades of his. Author Reply: Thank you - I was trying to create a back story for their relationship that would expand it without violating the canon. Yes, Beregond was terribly remorseful over those deaths. On the other hand, while they were following orders, they were doing so blindly. In modern armies, this would be like obeying "unlawful orders". So of the two, his choice is clearly the more honourable - he wanted to do the right thing despite knowing what the consequences to himself would be. Or so I see it, anyway. Thanks again for the comments! cheers, Maya | |
| Raksha The Demon | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 7/15/2004 |
| I like the way you write Gandalf. Poor Faramir has had plenty of practice in striving with terrible fear and pain and mastering them. Loved the back story on Beregond and Faramir; I've always wondered why Beregond was so fond of Faramir and risked so much to save him. Author Reply: Gandalf practically writes himself :-) cheers, Maya | |