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|See the Stars by daw the minstrel||12 Review(s)|
|endorearwen||Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 8/20/2013|
|Don't know if you get any responses I reply to the notices I get that you've responded to my review (did you get my message about Alfirin's mom??) so I'm putting this comment in as another review to ensure you do get it!|
I LOVE your writing - first story or not! If this was your first attempt at writing fanfic, I'm giving up the pursuit straight away! Nothing of my dabblings could meet the measure here! The plot was well thought out, the scenes were well described, the mystery was 'hidden' right up to the end - all skills that true writers only are blessed to possess! I'm going to content myself with simply continuing to read the great stories talented folks like you have so willingly shared with the rest of us on this site! :-) Don't take this story down - there's a lot of good lessons here for both writers and readers!
Author Reply: I don't know what happens if you just email back but it doesn't come to me, so I saw nothing about Alfirin's mother. Hm. There must be some online haven where all those responses hang out with their internet friends. :-)
Thanks for the reassurance. It makes me feel better.
|endorearwen||Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 8/20/2013|
|Another well written story, Daw! Nice transitioning from scene to scene and the mystery of uncovering the spy’s identity kept the pages turning. It was interesting to see you tackle such sensitive family issues. I think this story serves as a good example of how the actions of the one affect the actions of the many – and the consequences that must naturally follow. |
Author Reply: Thank you for being so kind about this story, endorearwen. It's the one I consider deleting most often because it really is raggedly written and the elves aren't really elfy. Sigh. Oh well. We all start someplace I guess, and this story did start me off.
|Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 2/15/2008|
|Hello again, daw! Just doing a quicky rereading of some stories (you're thinking that I have no life, I know it), and I realized that I don't think I've reviewed this one! I can notice the difference in your writing here--you don't seem as comfortable writing these characters as you do now; I think you were still rather getting the hang of them and fleshing them out. The writing's not bad though-the description is actually very well done. Of course, there are some aspects that don't quite fit with the rest of your stories (Thranduil's dalliances with other women, for once. It was suggested that Ithilden had inherited his awkward courting abilities from *somebody*).|
I also wanted to say something...I've been inspired to create some fanart. I have actually just finished one of Alfirin, and I have to say that I quite like it. With your permission, I would like to post it on my account at deviantart.com (with a disclaimer), and I would then send you the link. Of course, I have to figure out how to transfer it to the computer so it comes out clearly, because my scanner isn't working and a cameraphone just doesn't do it justice. However, I do have the cameraphone's version on my computer, and if you would like to see it beforehand, I can send it to you so you can have an idea of what it looks like and have a chance to reject the possibility of my showing it to the world ;-). I'm sure there will be more, I have quite a few nice little scenes pictured in my head ;-) And I haven't been really inspired to draw anything in quite awhile, but once the inspiration hits, I don't stop until I finish (it's like writing a chapter when you're in the right mood).
Also, there's a lovely picture of Thranduil and Legolas that is in my favorites, and I think you'd appreciate it. Here's the address:
The artist has a gorgeous Feanor done also, amongst other gorgeous elves.
Author Reply: Hi, Nessie:
This was the first story I ever wrote. I stopped in the middle to write "Watch This," but this was the first. I hope I've learned some stuff since then, including about the characters.
I'd love for you to post your picture! Do send me the link. I'm so excited.
Author Reply: And I just clicked on that link. What a cute picture of Thranduil and Legolas.
|pipinheart||Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 10/2/2005|
|Legolas protected them and killed the spy, but he hated doing it as well...|
Author Reply: Yeah. An elf killing another elf was rare apparently, and doing this would be pretty traumatic for a kid like Legolas, I think.
|pipinheart||Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/2/2005|
|Sweet...Galenadiual seems to have advise for all...Especially sweet is the picture of thier mother she gives Eilian, and how she was like him...|
Author Reply: Eilian's mother was pure wood elf, and he's a lot like her. I think she was adventuresome like he is.
Thanks for taking the time to read, Pipinheart.
|pipinheart||Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 10/2/2005|
|I think Thranduil is too hard on Eilian...Saying he was to old to go to the glade, he needs time to relax his troubles as well...|
Author Reply: Thranduil is pretty hard on Eilian, you're right about that. I think the two of them are quite different, so it's hard for Thranduil to understand why Eilian does some of the things he does.
|pipinheart||Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 10/2/2005|
|Legolas sneaking out of his room and playing a game...Good thing nobody knew who he was and Eilian got him outta there.|
Legolas thinks something is going on between his father and Galenadiual....
Author Reply: Sneaking out of the palace is a sport for Legolas. He does it for most of his adolescence, I think. Thranduil must have gone crazy.
|pipinheart||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/2/2005|
|It seems Eilian believes his father finds fault in everything he does. He loves him dearly. It seems his father dosen't expresse it to his older sons as much as Legolas.|
The son at the end didn't make him feel to good either...
Author Reply: This is the first story I ever wrote. I stopped in the middle to write "Watch This!" but this is really the first one, and now I can see real rough spots in it. I was still working out characterizations and I didn't know as much as I should have about elven marriage customs. Still, there are places I'm pleased with. I hope you enjoy it.
|Esamen/ Karen||Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 3/8/2004|
|Oh, just lovely! You write action so well! and everything is all wrapped up for now . . . this one was really good.|
Thanks again . . . .
|esamen||Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 3/8/2004|
|Oooo! I had wished for a little more fire and brimstone from Thranduil. I picked the right story!|
This is so fun to read. The writing is great. Everything is so smooth. Wonderful description, action and dialogue . . . and characterization . . . I love it!
Author Reply: Esamen, you don't know how good you have made me feel. This story is the first one I ever wrote. I stopped and wrote "Watch This" in the middle of it, but this was the first and now I can really see its rough spots. So if you are enjoying it despite them, then I am really glad (and relieved!).