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White Sands, Warm Hearts  by jenolas 2 Review(s)
LiannaReviewed Chapter: 19 on 7/25/2004
Splendid story. I enjoyed it very much. I must admit that some readers will probably contend that having both injury and grief occur in Valinor is non-canon, but personally, I don't care. You need to have something with which to create a plot, and in my opinion, a Valinor in which nothing even slightly unpleasant ever happens would be a dull place indeed.

I love your versions of both Thranduil and Legolas. It's great that your Thranduil is not nasty, and your Legolas is not a weakling or a victim. I am jealous of both of their wives!

One aspect of your story that I especially liked was that you were able to show that your characters had active and enjoyable sex lives without ever going beyond the boundaries of good taste. I so rarely see this in fanfiction. So many authors either write smut or avoid sex altogether. I'm glad that you don't find either of those extremes necessary.

Author Reply: Thank you, your comments are most welcome.

I take your point and agree that the story is non-canon, as is any story not written by Tolkien himself (as I see it), but as for no grief and hurt in Valinor, what of the kinslaying of the Teleri?

Ah, Thranduil! *sigh* Too bad he is spoken for!

When writing this story I was aiming to show romance rather than sex and I am pleased to see the attempt was both successful and appreciated.

jenolas

CuliwenReviewed Chapter: 10 on 10/9/2003
I am enjoying this story very much, as I have enjoyed your other stories that I have read. One aspect of your writing that I have noticed that you could improve on is your use of the word "to." Often, you use "to" when "too" is actually the appropriate term. For future reference, use "too" when expressing degree (e.g. "too much" not "to much"), or when using as a synonym for "also" (e.g. "I am going to the store, too." not "I am going to the store, to."). You may use "to" in almost all other instances of this word (except, of course, when you mean the number "two").

Author Reply: Thank you for your comments, but I feel that your extensive 'lesson' is a little unwarranted. I found TWO instances of TO being used instead of TOO in this chapter (which may in fact just have been typos and I have now corrected), but the correct usage (of which I am well aware) in the previous nine.

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