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| The Stone Tree by LKK | 11 Review(s) |
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| Avon | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/14/2004 |
| That's very, very nice. As people have mentioned it is great to see a Gimli perspective for a change - and when it is a Gimli perspective on our favourite Elf then even better ;-) The descriptionsare fabulous and the ending is particularly lovely. My only niggle is this: "Eyes as deep as Khazad-dûm lit by the stars of Durin's crown in Kheled-zâram." It's a beautiful description but it's not a sentence and that jars for me (you are allowed to dismiss me as grammatically-fixated if you like ;-)). Fragments can work - and in a drabble they can be very hard to avoid *but* to me this one floats unsupported. If you did want to change it I realise it would be difficult as you've only got your 100 words to play with but it woild probably be possible, I guess. Anyway, great work! Avon Author Reply: I will call you "grammatically-fixated", Avon, and mean it as a compliment. That sentence bothered me as well. The grammar check program passed it without complaint, but my instincts kept saying "no". I should have listened to my instincts. Thanks for weighing in on the grammar debate between the checker and myself. I did change the line somewhat. The new version still keeps my drabble a drabble and hopefully maintains the poetry I was trying for in this piece. Plus, it *should* be a real sentence now. LOL I'm glad you enjoyed the piece, poor grammer notwithstanding! Thanks for the review. :-) LKK | |
| Lasse-Lanta | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/13/2004 |
| Wonderful! So perfectly done in so few words, it's a real skill to project so much imagiry with a spareness of words. A very fine and very dwarf like tribute to a friend. Author Reply: Thank you, Lasse-Lanta! You're very kind. I appreciate that you took the time to drop me a review and let me know how you felt. :-) LKK | |
| Elf messenger | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/13/2004 |
| I LIke your little "drabble" as you call it. It shows Gimli's friendship with Legolas very well. Namarie Elf messenger Author Reply: Hi Elf messenger :-) A drabble is a short story or vignette that is exactly 100 words long, not including the title. The title can be up to an additional 15 words. It's harder than it seems to keep a piece to exactly 100 words. I'm glad that you enjoyed my 100 word depiction of the drawf's feelings about the elf. Thank you for your review! LKK | |
| Acacea | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/13/2004 |
| Hi LLK, This was relaly nice. It's a lovely insight into Gimli's perspective! Author Reply: Thanks, Acacea! I owe this drabble to you since you inspired me to write one. I'm glad you liked it. :-) LKK | |
| LOTR lover | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/13/2004 |
| Gorgeous description. This sounds like it was written by a Dwarf. I especially like the last paragraph. Author Reply: Thank you for the compliments. I'm very fond of that last paragraph myself. :-) | |
| sarah | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/12/2004 |
| Hi, romantic and nice. I think you did great writing from Gimli's POV. Sarah. Author Reply: Hi Sarah, I'm glad you liked my little drabble about Legolas seen through Gimli's eyes. Thank you for letting me know! LKK | |
| Coriel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/11/2004 |
| Ah, a fitting compromise from Gimli's quarter! Author Reply: I'm glad you liked the compromise, Coriel. I figured Gimli would only compare his friend to a tree if there was some stone in there somewhere as well. LOL Thanks for reading and leaving a review. :-) LKK | |
| Lamiel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/11/2004 |
| Oh, wonderful! This is truly marvelous. The poetry, the strength and power of the language is incredible. "A tree carved from stone." Wow. I am in awe. Author Reply: Oh, my. Now, I'm rendered speechless! High praise and greatly appreciated. Thank you! LKK | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/11/2004 |
| LKK, I liked this! So few people write from the dwarf's perspective. This is nice, and I especially love the line 'For our friendship, I will call him a tree. A tree carved from stone.' That seems much like Gimli would think. I hope you plan to do more - drabbles or stories, they are all welcome. Author Reply: Those lines are my favorite, Nilmandra. When they appeared on the screen, by magic it seemed, I knew that they had to stay no matter how I edited the rest. I plan on writing more, but I'll have to convince my muse to stop by more frequently. Writing is so much easier when the words magically appear on their own! :-) LKK | |
| Karri | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/11/2004 |
| Lovely, almost poetic vision of Legolas. well done! :-D Author Reply: Thank you, Karri. When I wrote this, I remembered how elegantly Gimli described the Glittering Caves. I figure there must be the soul of a poet hidden inside him, so I tried to bring that aspect out in his description of Legolas. I'm glad you felt I succeeded. LKK | |