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The Prince and The Shipwright  by Dragon 3 Review(s)
Kitt of LindonReviewed Chapter: 15 on 9/28/2004
Well, Cirdan, you were being needlessly cruel and heartless. Hmm, in Ereinion's place, I probably would have fainted. Poor elfling... as if a visit to the healer's is not bad enough!

'The Shipwright did not seem to be a kissing sort of person. He had even grown that scratchy beard to scare people away.'

I loved that! I'll have to add it to my favorite quote list or something.

No matter how bad the healer's place is, hopefully they can get Ereinion well!

Author Reply: *nods* I can't imagine anything as heartless as sending anyone that small in to see the doctor alone... awww!

Ereinion will get better, it'll just take a while, and a lot of milk and cuddling.

perellethReviewed Chapter: 15 on 9/27/2004
Oh gods! it is really hard to keep up with you!!!! specially when one is new to all this thing.... why do you update in bunches? (so many wonderful stories, and so little time!) I´m getting mad keeping track, just because I really enjoy what you write! seriously.. now forgive the question, is a rethoric one but have you got children? if so they have to be very special.. I mean, it is amazing how clearly you see through their psychology and their reactions, and the simple way they look at the world, though it is us the adults who always make things difficult!!!! Amazing, and so lovely they are..( children in your stories, I mean..:))
But then, I am reviewing th Shipwright and the Prince.... I ran into your story..( and into this archive and into fanfiction world in general ) not long ago (maybe last january?) and I have been around since then ( not that much but slowly getting "hooked"). This is one of my first reviews ever, and I do not know what I am supposed to say.. except that I very much like what you are doing. Giving Gil-galad a background is something I really like. In my personal AU (only inside my head! mind you) he is Fingon´s son, Fingolfín´s grandson and Finwe´s great grandson.. this line of ancestry meaning he is last in a line of caring, serving and fair kings who understood that honor was bound to duty and that protecting their people was first to every other consideration. I think that the editorial decision made by Cristopher Tolkien was a most fortunate one, for In my opinion it gives Gil -galad a more solid, dramatic personality and also a sense of fate that so perfectly suits his personal story.
I remember when I first red the silmarillion, those simple words "but his young son Ereinion he sent to the havens" really moved me, for it was striking to think that Fingon, recently deprived from his beloved father, with his brother "on the run" and never showing up to help his kin, should send away his only son, and most probably a child at that time.. it only added to "the Valiant"´s legend in my eye. Since that, I longed to read more of that young NOldorin Prince, the son of a kinslayer sent to foster in the land of the teleri.. Wow! I think it must have been hard for the child at the beggining.
So I must saya that you are reflecting it so well ( in fact I find that some parts of your story are so heart wrenching!) that I´m hooked to the story.
The challenge is..How far do you intend to go? I´m loving the amount of detail, and I can almost see him, his expresions, his puzzlement and the ups and downs of a child´s humour in such a situation, with their ability to be distracted by something this moment and then depressed by small details the next.( the bath part was.. splendid! I have a little nephew who loves a special pyjamas and one day he was suppossed to be sleeping at my home, he made me drove back to his, only to pick up that very special pyjama.. so I could not help laughing out just guessing the shipwright´s expression!!)
I mean.. Would you care to keep on until.. let us say.. the Prince becomes King and so you should change the title? (I´m joking) All this simply to say that I think you have a very personal approach and I very much enjoying it.
Just one thing. shouldn´t the kid be thinking of his Ata and Amme rather than Ada and Nanna? ( stupid question I know!! but then I thought he would learn and speak Quenya at home. although he probably would have also learnt Sindarin too.. but.. I think at such young age he would still unconsciously refer to his parents in Quenya..)
Plese do keep on... everything, but Valar! I cannot track you!
Perelleth

Author Reply: Hello!

Thanks for that lovely long review! I'm going to continue for a while yet - perhaps until Ereinion and Cirdan reach some sort of understanding. But Ereinion's story is continued in many of my other scribblings (and some Fingon and Fingolfin too). I think I have one baby Ereinion, two small Ereinion, two very-new-King Ereinion, and he's in AVTI quite a bit. I don't have children yet either (I'm twenty).

I think the Silmarillion descent for Gil-galad as son of Fingon suits him best too - very brave Kings, who are fair and just, and meet gruesome ends at the hands of terrible foes whilst trying to save the world!

Dragon

BodkinReviewed Chapter: 15 on 9/26/2004
Poor little Ereinion.

However well-meaning he is, Cirdan is not much of a guardian for a child - and perhaps someone should point out in words of one syllable the sort of care Ereinion needs. At the very least he should provide him with a designated care-giver!

Don't blame Ereinion for biting the healer. He's having yet another very stressful day - he should pass it on. I hope life begins to improve for him soon.

Author Reply: Ranlhach will try his best, bless him! He just gets a bit scared at times of offending someone as important as Cirdan. I don't think Ereinion wants any care-giver but Cirdan though, because that's who his Adar said would look after him.

I don't blame Ereinion either! I wish I could bite my doctors! :)

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