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Memory Of Darkness  by Jay of Lasgalen 6 Review(s)
NilmandraReviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/6/2004
Oh, brave Arwen! She did what I would expect her to do, and used her body to protect him. He would have done it for her, and they both know it.

Legolas's confusion is well done, and his reaction to the pain. Poor thing - being trapped under rock is dangerous and miserable. But I am glad the parents all know something is wrong and are on their way to help. However, someone should smack Lanatus. I'm sure you will have a long line of volunteers.

Author Reply: Knowing who her parents and brothers are, I think that Arwen would be brave and courageous. Poor Legolas isn't very coherent at the moment (and it will get worse) but rescue is on the way.

I'm afraid you'll have to join the queue to hit Lanatus! I love writing him - he's a little light relief in all the angst.

Jay

LKKReviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/6/2004
What is Lanatus' problem?! Sheesh! Someone give that elf a personality transplant. Did he seriously believe that the twins would abandon their sister and friend? *shakes head in disbelief*

I liked your description of Legolas' slow return to consciousness. Especially the part where he wonders why the person calling his name doesn't shut up and help the other hurt person and let him sleep in peace. Amusing and true.

I hope Arwen won't pay too high a price for her bravery in protecting Legolas from the next cave-in! Looking forward to the next chapter. :-)

Author Reply: I'm afraid that's what Lanatus is like. He doesn't really approve of *anyone*, especially not those Noldorin half-breeds!

Poor Legolas is hurting and not too coherent, but Arwen is doing her best to help. The next chapter should be up in the next couple of days!


Jay

mistry89Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/6/2004
oh no, no review until you stop with the cliff-hangers!!!

Seriously, this is great - those caves/tunnels/whatever have been begging to be explored since The Hobbit!


Author Reply: Well, I don't think the next chapter will be a cliffie (but I can't promise anything). As for the tunnels, I liked the idea that not even Thranduil knew exactly what was down there - and as mapping them was his idea, he's going to be feeling rather responsible!

AmleeReviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/5/2004
AHHHHHHHHHH!! Another cliffhanger! :p Great Chapter! Oh! Also I hope you put snotty nose Lanatus in his place soon!!

Author Reply: I love writing Lanatus - he's been very quiet for a while, but he's fun. And hopefully the next chapter *won't* be a cliffhanger!

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/5/2004
Oh my goodness, what a place to end the chapter. Your description of Legolas's pain and confusion struck me as very realistic. The parents' knowledge that their children were in danger must have been awful, because they were helpless to do much until Elladan appeared with information.

Author Reply: The part of this chapter set in the cave was written months ago, but as I was adding detail to it I kept thinking of the opening of 'Fire And Shadow' - I do hope it doesn't sound too similar! The parents would have been worried, but the fact that they didn't know *where* the children were wasn't going to stop Thranduil or Celebrian from looking!

KarriReviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/5/2004
Its wonderful to see this scene from Legolas's perspective -- especially as I've already read it from Arwen's, and so know it turns out all right in the end. ;-) I hope you will be kind and hurry with more.

Author Reply: Shh! Don't give anything away! Although this is based on the incident mentioned in EoME, I'm writing each chapter from scratch, so be patient!

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