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Memory Of Darkness  by Jay of Lasgalen 9 Review(s)
IthilienReviewed Chapter: 6 on 5/23/2004
Oh, Jay! I am loving this story. Very heart-wrenching and true. But please, for those of us not versed on crush injuries, explain what you mean by the toxins that are making Legolas hurt. Is this something of the body's doing, or was there something in the stones that poisoned him? Something tells me it has to do with bone marrow, but I really don't know for sure, and I'm aching (hah, pun) to understand where this pain is coming from.

Otherwise, this is just grand. I remember this story as a flashback sequence from way back when, and I'm glad you are telling it in its whole now. It is fleshed out so very well. I got all teary at the remembrance of the little hand held in the palm of Thranduil's own, and then the slip into the familiar, "Ada"... *sob*. How heartbreaking and grim it must be to see your son so ill and in pain. My heart was breaking with Thranduil's then.

More please. This is great!

Author Reply: I'll put a note in the next chapter about crush injuries, but I don't know a great deal about it myself.

I'm glad you remember the story from its original form, but there are several changes from the flashback (in the first story I ever wrote!), made to fit in with subsequent tales, and to generally improve it.

Poor Thranduil. You're right, this is harder on him than on Legolas.

lwarrenReviewed Chapter: 6 on 5/17/2004
That's it! I'm calling PETfE! Of course, Legolas is mainly unconcious, but you have Thranduil...and Calmacil...and Arwen to torment! Oh my, am hyperventilating with all this elf-angst floating in the atmosphere!;) (Seriously) I've been waiting for this update, and was not disappointed. I knew I had heard about the complications that can arise from crushing injuries, especially if the injured one is trapped and the body (or leg or whatever) is compressed for any length of time, so this is really interesting. Thranduil is going to need an extra shot of intestinal fortitude to help his little one through this (I almost died when I read the line of Thranduil thinking of that little hand that used to find its way into his, those little fingers holding on tightly.....*wails and sniffles some more*). Really heavy chapter, so well-written, including the interaction between Calmacil and Thranduil. Update soon, hmmmm? (Hey, is Nilmandra giving out that number for PETfE, ya think? I wouldn't mind being a case worker!:) )

linda

Author Reply: I think I'd be a case *study* for PETfE, don't you? I make no apologies for loving to write angst. Poor Thranduil is the one to suffer here, more than anyone else, but I have Elrond angst in mind as well!

LKKReviewed Chapter: 6 on 5/16/2004
A painfully convincing chapter, Jay. I think you captured the hurt and anguish of a patient and a loved one very well. Poor guilt-ridden Thranduil. He could not have known what was going to happen. Perhaps Elrond can help Thranduil understand that there is no reason to blame himself so. Speaking of the Imladris family -- is Arwen suffering nightmares, too? It would be very understandable if she did.

Good job!

Author Reply: I feel very sorry for Thranduil in this chapter - he feels so worried and helpless. And you know about that! We'll find out about Arwen next chapter.

Elendiari22Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 5/16/2004
Wow. Poor Legolas! I can't wait to find out what happens next!

Author Reply: Well, next chapter we see how Arwen and the twins are, then will look in on Legolas again. I'm writing (when I'm not sending reviews or replying to them) even now!

sofiaReviewed Chapter: 6 on 5/15/2004
exciting story. Update soon.
-sofia

Author Reply: I'm glad you like it - I love writing the angst!

NilmandraReviewed Chapter: 6 on 5/15/2004
Ah, Jay, you did good showing the agonizing hours of waiting for Thranduil and the pain for Legolas, when he is awake. I pity the parents who must sit through such times, wondering if their child will live, and knowing when they are coherent they are suffering. The nightmares are awful too.

Author Reply: I pity both of them, but especially Thranduil. This is not an easy time for him, and Calmacil's words came as a shock. Poor Legolas is going to have nightmares about this for some time.

ManderlyReviewed Chapter: 6 on 5/15/2004
That was quite heart-breaking. Poor Thranduil! There really is nothing worse than for a parent to see his/her child suffer. Hopefully Calmacil is right about the stubborness - I think both father and son will need it to get through this.

Author Reply: This is actually worse for Thranduil than for Legolas - at least he's unconscious most of the time. But they're both strong - and stubborn and can help each other.

KarriReviewed Chapter: 6 on 5/15/2004
A very intense chapter, Jay! Nice work. :-D


Author Reply: I'm glad you like it - poor Legolas is not at all well, and Thranduil has to suffer as well.

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 6 on 5/15/2004
Jay, it occurs to me that you have an injured Legolas in both your current stories. How do you do that? I would get so confused!

Poor Thranduil. I know that Legolas is in a lot of pain but at least he is unconscious most of the time. Thranduil is agonizing here.

Author Reply: The other story is already written, I'm just polishing it as I post. So I only have to worry about Legolas in *this* story. And as he's out of it mostly, I can concentrate on Thranduil angst!

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