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Interrupted Journeys: Part 1 New Journeys  by elliska 3 Review(s)
French PonyReviewed Chapter: 17 on 9/6/2004
Hi, sorry I'm late. I had a friend over for a few days, and I turned 28 and he turned 27, so I was a little too busy to read this instantly. But I am back now.

You have a couple of little bobbles. Two spelling errors: the opposite of winning is losing, not loosing, and to pass out is to faint, not to feint. And in Lindomiel frowned at that. Had Lindomiel actually done something so extreme to attract the king's attention? Marti thought she had better spend some time getting more information from Tulus. The conversation so far had been very productive.

I think you meant that to begin with Marti and not Lindomiel.

But on to the chapter. This is getting quite operatic, and there's nothing like a good operatic story when it's fleshed out better than Verdi could do. Tulus is just digging himself in deeper and deeper, isn't he? It's his own fault whatever becomes of him, and something awful will become of him, no doubt.

Marti is evil, but she's clever evil. She can put two and two together as well as any detective, and it's just too bad that she's unbalanced and being denied something she really really wants. She's kind of tragic, in a way.

Lindomiel is a saucy little gal. That's good for Thranduil. And she likes the forest -- but only in summer. She hasn't seen it in winter, when I imagine it is equally lovely (if snow has fallen), but not nearly so hospitable. I suppose this is where the saying "Never marry a man until you have summered and wintered with him" comes from.

Thranduil must be a phenomenal singer to be able to sing a) flat on his back, which is difficult enough, and b) with someone's head on his shoulder. I'm a good singer, and I'd have difficulty with either one of those conditions, let alone both.

But since he is such a good singer, here's the beginning of another folk song, altered just for our two lovebirds:

"When Thranduil came to my house
I swore he'd come to see me
Soon I'd found the rascal out
He'd only come to squeeze me.

Sing tee idey inkum, tee idey ay
Tee idey inkum tandee..."

The rest of the ballad is quite naughty and very funny, with an absolutely transparent metaphor involving a gun. It's called "Spencer Rifle," if you're interested. Thranduil and Lindomiel might get a kick out of it.

Author Reply: Sorry I'm so late in replying and never apologize for reviewing whenever you do it--I'm always just so happy to read them! We just got power back from Hurricane Frances so it was a real treat to login to see your review and Daw's. Thank you so much for pointing out the errors. Shows you what happens when you proof read while doing other things. People tell me I can't do fifty things at once--who are they to tell me that! :)

Love the folk song. Being a former teacher of medieval lit, I love this type of stuff from any century.

Yes, both Marti and Tulus are trouble in their own ways. And they both will pay for it in the end, though we won't see it in this story. They will survive here to fight another day with even greater skill born this of experience.

Poor Thranduil. I really don't think anyone, even an elf, could sing flat on their back but I think the worse part for him was Lindomiel's proximity. :)

By the way--I realized something before I went off line from the hurricane that I wanted to mention to you, so I will before I forget: The very first LotR fan fiction I ever read was one of yours--Coming Home. That was what got me hooked on LotR fan fiction. I remembered the story but didn't really realize who the author was (or, apparently, where I had read the story) until just a few days ago. Great story!

Thanks again for the review. I'd better get some new chapters up before Ivan comes through Florida. We just can't win this year.

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 17 on 9/4/2004
Oh dear. Tulus and Marti are a very bad pair. Isn't it amazing how people can make trouble even when real danger and shadow are around? How we can be so petty?

Author Reply: Yes, that is too true unfortunately. One would hope that elves, living for so long, would see the 'big picture' rather than their own little, tiny reality. But too many people think that they are the whole world.

BodkinReviewed Chapter: 17 on 9/4/2004
Me not like Marti - she is a seriously nasty elf-stalker. Does Mirkwood have stalking laws? What on earth makes her think that Thranduil has any interest in her? He barely grunts as she vamps him.

And Tulus is a complete moron. How did he expect Thranduil to react to his behaviour?

I haven't heard anything today about the hurricane, but I hope all is going well.

Author Reply: I love the term 'vamps' that made me giggle. Yeah, they need stalking laws don't they? Unfortunately she only sees herself and what she wants. Tulus is one of those elves that the phrase 'less wise' must apply to. :) Thanks for the review!

Frances is driving us all insane. It is approaching at 6 miles an hour which is exceedingly slow. 74 mile an hour winds extend 100 miles from the eye so most of central Florida is looking at winds and rain from Sunday at 2am to Monday at 2am--that is a very long time to be under a hurricane no matter how much it weakens. We are going insane waiting to see what will happen. I wish it would just come and get on with whatever it is going to do to us. Not how I planned to spend Labor Day :(

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