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| A Short Rest by Jay of Lasgalen | 19 Review(s) |
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| AleezaChocolat | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/12/2005 |
| I loved this! XD Lovely writing style, and good job on capturing the characters' personalities! It made me smile whenever Bilbo or Gandalf spoke, because it seemed to me so natural, as if I was reading a long abandoned part of "The Hobbit!" And when I read the summary at first, I immediently thought of the "couple of friends from Rivendell" quote from Gandalf! It made me giddy, for some reason. Anyway, great job! Author Reply: Sorry for the belated reply - I somehow missed this review. Thank you so much for the comments about Bilbo and Gandalf - I wanted them to sound like Tolkien's characters, but have very rarely written either of them before. When I was re-reading this chapter of The Hobbit, I saw the 'couple of friends' bit, and knew instantly who they had to be! | |
| washow | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 12/16/2004 |
| What a sweet story I’m so glad someone nominated it for a MC award or I would never have chanced upon it. This was a great story of what could have happened when the dwarfs traveled through Imladris. Good job! Author Reply: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed this - I certainly enjoyed writing it. It made a change from the angst I usually write. | |
| LKK | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/30/2004 |
| Delightful, Jay! You captured the rapid-fire questioning of an inquistive 10-year-old boy excellently. (My nephew would talk my ear off, if I let him.) Estel is very well portrayed. I loved the little throwaway line where he says he's glad he only has one name to worry about. You did an excellent job with Bilbo as well. Mixing in Tolkien's hobbit expression helped to make your Bilbo sound like the Professor's. Actually the whole piece had the same light-hearted, adventurous feel as The Hobbit does. Good work, there. My top-most favorite line(s) out of many favorites: “Oh, my word – you’re twins!” Elrohir raised one eyebrow and turned to stare at Elladan, as if this was news to him. “Why, yes, so we are!” he exclaimed. After three thousand years, I wonder if the twins grew tired of hearing that? LOL Author Reply: Thanks, LKK! I'm rather pleased with the way Bilbo came over in this story, as it's the first time I've written about him. I think everyone liked Estel's comment about names, but I'm really glad that you picked up my own favourite line about the twins - I get the feeling that it's not the first time they've been told that! | |
| paranoidangel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/13/2004 |
| I liked that, especially the part where Estel and Gandalf discussed names. Author Reply: Thanks, Nic. This is another story which is a total departure from my usual style and characters - but it was fun! Everyone seems to have liked the names. | |
| ArWen | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/30/2004 |
| Cute! I love Estel and his curiosity. Very well-done, believable story. :-) Author Reply: Thanks! It was a nice change to write a fun story as opposed to my usual angst. | |
| Leaward | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/29/2004 |
| I really enjoyed this! I liked the part where Estel is talking about the names and how he only has the one. Little does he know ... I thought you caught the characters very well, their speech really reflects how I see them talking. Well done! Author Reply: Thank you! I'm particularly glad that you think I caught the characters - it's the first time I've ever written a hobbit. Little Estel and Mithrandir were both fun as well, especially the discussion of names. Thanks for the review. | |
| Antigone Q | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/28/2004 |
| What a nice story! I enjoyed the descriptions of Elladan and Elrohir (I was happy to see he is still good at maps!) and Imladris,and I liked the characterization of questioning, curious Estel. I thought his question about the rabbit hole was SO funny! And Elladan and Elrohir have such great senses of humor, too. "Twins? Why, so we are!" And of course Estel would want to go on a quest to find a dragon and a treasure - he's ten! But here is my favorite line: "It must be confusing to have so many names. I’m glad I’m just Estel. I shall never have to worry about lots of names!” Just wonderful, Jay! Thanks for sharing this with us. Author Reply: I'm glad you spotted that bit about Elrohir and maps - I wondered if anyone would notice! When Estel asked about the rabbit hole, and pictured Bilbo getting stuck, I had in mind the Winnie-The-Pooh film when he got stuck at Rabbit's home. I imagine the twins would get fed up with people's reactions when they see them for the first time - I think it's not the only time they've given that reply! Ah, Estel's names - I was grinning lke an idiot as I wrote that, and I'm glad so many people like it. Thanks for the review. | |
| grumpy | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/27/2004 |
| what a wonderful story, you did great writing Estel, Bilbo and the twins. Loved how Estel is growing out of his clothes and so full of questions, plus how he did not believe the twins about dwarf women. I think he and Bilbo would get along very well together. would love to read more. Author Reply: Thank you for your comments - I'm glad you liked this. Writing young Estel and Bilbo are both new to me, so I'm thankful they came across well. I think they'd get on well, too - they have the same sort of curiosity. | |
| eiluj | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/27/2004 |
| That was fun! Would you think of doing a story for when Gandalf and Bilbo stopped in Rivendell on the return trip? Or other future meetings between Aragorn and Bilbo? And thanks for not killing off Gilraen. Author Reply: A sequel? I don't know - possibly. I may do the part where Elrond looks at Thror's map and finds the secret runes. I always try to keep to canon, so of course Gilraen is around! | |
| pebbles66 | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/26/2004 |
| I really liked this. I had never thought about Aragorn possibly meeting Bilbo in Rivendell, but it's a neat thought! I like the way you portrayed Estel as so enthusiastic and energetic, and I liked the interactions between him and the twins and between him and Bilbo. Very good story! Author Reply: We know that Aragorn was ten then, so it would be very odd if he didn't meet Bilbo and the dwarves - Elrond would have had to keep him locked in his room! Bilbo seemed to have a childlike curiousity, so would get on well with Estel, and the twins are typical big brothers, loving and teasing. | |