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Air, Fire, Water  by annmarwalk 4 Review(s)
docmonReviewed Chapter: 3 on 3/22/2005
ohhhh my. what can i say? so few words, and yet you create a world, or such emotion, or simple say It right.
"Gandalf –Gandalf?– laughing with joy, a sound like water in a parched land."

how more perfect a way to describe Gandalf's laugh, after all sam's been through. He knows real thirst, he knows what parched really feels like, so the words are doubly apt.

a true wordsmith,
mon

Author Reply: Thank you so much!
A true wordsmith did write those words, "like water in a parched land", for they are straight from the Professor's pen, snitched by me for the perfect finishing touch to my poor shadow of his genius.

BranwynReviewed Chapter: 3 on 3/22/2005
More beautiful word-painting! Loved the rain that "sweetens the strawberries and coaxes the fresh green shoots of new barley from the earth." So vivid and full of color--you must have the box of 102 crayons with the built-in sharpener!

Author Reply: Oooh, I loved those! The colors! The names of the colors! Thinking about what could be done with those colors! And as a grown-up, I once bought a set of 100 skeins of embroidery floss, just so I could sit and admire the color and silken texture.

LarnerReviewed Chapter: 3 on 3/19/2005
OOOOHHHHH! This is so very, very beautiful--from the End of All Things to the renewal, complete with laughing guardian angel.

Author Reply: Thank you, thank you so much - I wrote this quite a while back, and had forgotten it until tonight.
"laughing guardian angel" - ooh, I like that! I always love watching Gandalf's joyous, bubbling laughter in the film.

Ann

ArmarielReviewed Chapter: 3 on 3/19/2005
Very lovely, the use of strong images that appeal to all the senses really bring your writing to life. Amazing that you can accomplish it in such a small space.

cheers
Armariel~~~{~@

Author Reply: Thank you for your kind words! I'm helpless at plots, my dialog is week, but I do seem to have some small descriptive skill, so that's basically what I do. :)

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