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| Seasons by Allee | 10 Review(s) |
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| White Wolf | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 8/21/2005 |
| I really loved these little stories. In fact, I voted for them in the Teitho Contest. I'm glad they were one of the winners. You did a wonderful job of showing the progression of Legolas's relationship with his father. I like that you left it with hope for the future. I would never like to think that hard times between them would last. The last sentence was perfect. Author Reply: Thank you for your review and for your vote during the Teitho contest. I changed the wording just a tiny bit since the contest (I'm never quite satisfied with anything I've written!). I'm pleased that you liked the last line; it was one of my favorites, as well. In fact, it was the first line that I had when I began writing these vignettes . . . I have this very strange habit of writing the last line first. But as someone recently told me when I complained that I had the last line of a story but nothing else: "If you have the last line, you already have the rest of the story. You just have to find out what it is." Ahhh, words of wisdom. The last sentence of this collection did, in fact, provide the inspiration and guidance for me as I wrote the rest of the vignettes. I kept asking myself, "What would cause Legolas to speak this line? What could have happened up to this point?" Thank you, once again, for taking the time to read and review. Allee | |
| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 8/18/2005 |
| Hmm, true, he does not sail from the havens and I didn't think of that--that makes it a bit less sad, doesn't it. That he is at the havens and thinking about hope for healing between himself and his father. Good. :-) I'm glad I read the author's note. I'm left happier now. :-) Author Reply: I'm glad that you read the author's notes, too (I always wonder if anyone bothers to read my notes!). I decided to have Legolas in the Havens to emphasize that he was thinking on his future in Valinor and that those thoughts were giving him hope concerning his relationship with Thranduil. Thank you for taking the time to read and review! Allee | |
| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 8/18/2005 |
| It is very sad to see Legolas leaving M-e still estranged from his father. I'm glad you left a little hope for healing in Aman. I enjoyed this series. Nicely done, although quite sad. Author Reply: Sad, yes, but as you said, I wanted to leave things on a hopeful note. | |
| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/18/2005 |
| It is sad here to see the difficulties caused by the Shadow in their realm weighing on father and son after seeing their previously close and satisfying relationship. I suppose that might happen under such pressures and it is very tragic. Author Reply: Yes, it's sad the way that good relationships can turn because of the stress of external circumstances. | |
| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/18/2005 |
| And now an older Legolas. But he is still young enough to be proving himself (at least to himself) and wanting his father's approval. Again, very dear. I am enjoying these. Author Reply: Yes, Legolas is still eager for his father's approval. Glad you're enjoying these vignettes! Allee | |
| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/18/2005 |
| “Let us leave it, shall we, Legolas? The branch loves its young leaf and wants to hang on to it—just like me.” How sweet. This is a very dear image of young Legolas and Thranduil. Author Reply: I'm fond of that line, as well! Glad you liked it. Allee | |
| TithenFeredir | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 8/17/2005 |
| I really enjoyed this cycle. Each vignette stood well alone and together they told a complete story. It was short, simple and well thought out. The image of the leaf and tree worked very well. I loved it that you ended the story on a positive note, with Legolas hoping for a mending of his relationship with Thranduil---the leaf again connected to the tree, there to remain in a restored season of summer. Very nice ideed. Thanks for sharing! ~TF Author Reply: Glad that you think that each piece stands well alone and that collectively, they tell a complete story. That is what I had hoped for. I really found the tree/leaf image a nice (and appropriate) one to work with. Yes, I just had to end on a positive note--I have a habit of doing that, no matter how bleak things look! Thank you for taking the time to read and review. Allee | |
| shirebound | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 8/17/2005 |
| This is a marvelous progression -- not only showing the growing maturity of an elf, but of Middle-earth itself. Very nice. Author Reply: It was interesting to me as I wrote these vignettes how much the life of an individual can parallel the progression of his or her surroundings. Glad you liked it! Thank you for taking the time to let me know what you thought. Allee | |
| TithenFeredir | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/17/2005 |
| Hmmm, you are drawing a picture of growing tension between them, apparent from the increasing darkness, the pressure it puts on Thranduil and from Legolas desire for freedom. And again the leaf implies much about their relationship. Very nice. ~TF Author Reply: Yes, things are starting to get complicated in this vignette as the tension mounts. Allee | |
| TithenFeredir | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/17/2005 |
| "I thought him the strongest and wisest creature in all Middle Earth." This is a very sweet vignette without becoming overly sentimental. I think it captures the youg Legolas' POV very nicely. I loved the bit about Thranduil not wanting him to pluck the new leaf. ~TF Author Reply: Glad you didn't find it overly sentimental--I always worry about that when writing scenes like this one. Thank you for taking the time to let me know what you thought! Allee | |