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Just Desserts  by Lindelea 6 Review(s)
BodkinReviewed Chapter: 4 on 10/14/2005
Good for Airin. And Denny. Nothing like a bit of quiet rebellion. Rilion was brave to let them into the house to take some possessions for Seredrith, baby Robin and big Robin. Right, but brave nonetheless, because he could get into terrible trouble for it. I hope that Aragorn gets this sorted out pretty quickly!

I love it that Robin took the horse - in the long run, those kinds of thing are much more important than clothes. Poor lad.



Author Reply: Yes, Rilion was brave. I don't know if Elessar would have reversed a charge brought against him, since technically he was in violation of his duty whether right or wrong, but even so it might not have come to the King's ears until after Rilion had suffered the penalty, whether flogging or something else. He was quite brave, indeed.

Poor Robin, indeed. The way the story is set up it would be very easy to turn it towards darkness, if I were feeling destructive, but I simply cannot do that to characters I've grown to like. Probably makes me predictable as all get-out. I hate being predictable. Such is life.

BeruthielReviewed Chapter: 4 on 10/13/2005
So Seledrith and Robin get kicked out of their home with nothing? Kinda harsh. Hopefully Aragorn or Pippin will be able to do something about that.

This is much more angsty than I was expecting. Bliss! I love angst. More please (pretty pretty please).

Author Reply: Well, we aim to please.

Could write longer chapters, but it would be less angsty that way, with so many angsty bits all clumped together. Much angstier spread out. Longer story, too. At present I know what is going to happen, but not how many chapters it'll take. Goodness.

LarnerReviewed Chapter: 4 on 10/13/2005
I bless Rilion for his ability to bend the rules for the sake of humanity, and hope the King Elessar will show the courage to do the same. And glad Robin carried out the horse, and Denny the kettle.

Author Reply: Yes, poor Rilion, who must have been quaking in his boots at the possibility of discovery... he'd already heard the sergeant threatened with a flogging. He must be wishing he never got out of bed that morning.

DreamflowerReviewed Chapter: 4 on 10/13/2005
Ummummumm...tsk..tsk...tsk

*Someone* is being overzealous! I cannot imagine that if Aragorn, or even Pippin, had been on the spot, they would have been turned out so. For one thing, as Denny so wisely pointed out, it wasn't practical, and for another it wasn't humane. Sounds more like the way things would have been done under Denethor, though. It takes a while for a different way of doing things to sink in.

I like your Airin--what a nice name for the lass! *grin* Wherever did you find it? LOL! She is both sympathetic and practical. Poor Rilion, apparently is just *young*.

Bodkin asked for angst, huh? Looks like you are going to dish it out in spades! Ah well, angst makes for longer stories than fluff. 8-D

Poor characters!

Author Reply: I don't think this situation would have come up in the first place if Aragorn were accessible. It seems he went fishing early this morning... He's probably somewhere along the shore, having breakfast with some half-wild mysterious stranger or other... This may be the trip where his son nearly drowns, not sure without checking the timeline.

And Pippin is sticking very close to Jack and Will at the moment, and cannot spare a thought quite yet for other consequences of this whole mess.

Airin--lovely name, one I'd never seen before, actually. She's practically Seledrith's twin, having been raised with her from early childhood. Of course she's going to know what to pack... in the least amount of time.

Poor Rilion. Guess he's got room to grow.

Lots of angst in this one. Don't know quite how practical or realistic it all is. But we do our best to figure out rationalizations, and if something can't be rationalized it gets re-written. Four revisions. And counting. Whew.

Yup, angst makes for longer stories. The happy fluffy story is about one chapter in length, by contrast.

Author Reply: Huh. Since I am now informed of some psychological syndrome or other, whereby young children raised together, even if unrelated, are unable to fall in love later in life and have romantic feelings for each other, I am re-writing a few things to reflect that Airin was adopted by Turambor's brother, and is a best-friend-as-close-as-a-sister to Seledrith.

Interesting, the things one learns along the way...

harrowcatReviewed Chapter: 4 on 10/13/2005
I'm greedy for new tales Lindelea and prompt reviews (for what they are worth ) is all the payment I can give for the enjoyment I get from authors on this site. (Unless anyone wants a beta reader.) But now you have whetted my appetite! I want to see the other version too.

Author Reply: Well, feedback is excellent grease for the wheels, I have to admit. Sometimes I'll sign on to check my mail without any desire to write, just to read a couple of thoughtful reviews that spark my thinking and get me speculating about What if...? Amazing how that works.

Author Reply: ...as to the other version, well, we'll just have to see. Possibly part of it will be incorporated into this story, near the end.

harrowcatReviewed Chapter: 4 on 10/13/2005
Every time I see a new chapter a little thank you goes up for Bodkin who requested this! Turned out without anything but the clothes on their backs? I should think not indeed!

Author Reply: And you may bless Bodkin for requesting "angst". There were two versions of this story, before it was written, one short and sweet, and this is the other...

And blessings to you for the quick response and encouraging feedback!

Sure glad Airin was on the spot! (And thanks again, Dreamflower, if you happen to read this, for the list of names... "Airin" is much less confusing and cumbersome than "Turambor's daughter in law")

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