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The Search  by Jay of Lasgalen 4 Review(s)
LKKReviewed Chapter: 16 on 12/7/2003
I have been gone so long, I bet you've forgotten who I am.
But I haven't forgotten your story. Your wonderful, emotional, roller coaster ride of a story.

What have I missed since my last review?
-- A beautiful portrayal of parents aching for a missing child. This is a side of the stories we so seldom see in fanfiction: the thoughts of the worried parents.
-- A switch in the brothers' worries. We spend many chapters fearing for Elrohir, only to have our concerns flipped to Elladan who believes his brother is dead.
-- A family in mourning, with a son who lashes out in anger over his grief. I hope someone explains to him what really happened and that he and Elrohir reach a peace before the story ends.

There are more wonderful moments in the chapters I missed reviewing, I know.

As for this chapter --- Elrohir's fear was heartwrenching. Celebrian's amusement at the "son of an orc" reference added a small (and welcome!) touch of comedic relief. I'm glad that Elladan made the decision to return even though he still believed Elrohir was dead. So many authors would have had Elladan learning that his twin was alive and *then* returning. Your way was far more powerful.

Although I didn't get every chapter reviewed, I loved every one. I feel like this story is drawing to a close. Of course, the last time I felt that way in this story, you surprised me by paralyzing Elladan. Any more evil surprises hiding in that pen of yours???

LKK

Author Reply: The story is winding down, but there will be one or two more chapters yet - a few loose ends to tie up. I hope to update this weekend, I haven't abandoned this story! I find angst easy to write, the happy families part is harder. That must say something about me!

Many thanks for your review - it's nice to know things from other chapters that you liked as well.


Jay

Yuna_DaxReviewed Chapter: 16 on 11/21/2003
WOOHOO!! Another brilliant chapter:) I am so loving the angst, but also the subtle humour you work in as well. The bit with Elrohir calling Elladan a ' Son of an Orc' then getting sprung was simply amazing :)

Alas I wait for more :)

Jules

Author Reply: There will be more, I promise. I just have a slight work overload at the moment. There will be more angst to come, but I'm glad you like the other touches as well. Although Elrohir is desperately worried, I could see him becoming frustrated with his brother's lack of response too.


Jay

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 16 on 11/21/2003
Oh, that was nice. I am a little worried that Elladan can't hear his own voice but Elrohir seems to. Do you have yet more torment in store for us, Jay?


Author Reply: Not even I'm that evil, though I am reading a fic at the moment where Elrohir has been deafened by an explosion. The simple explanation is that Elladan did not speak out loud the first time, but Elrohir could lip read and recognised his own name. His *hearing* is fine!

Jay

NilmandraReviewed Chapter: 16 on 11/21/2003
Very nice to see Galadriel's foresight, the messenger, Arwen racing home as a good siter ought and finally the family reunited. I like the picture in my head of Elrohir holding Elladan in his arms. Very nice.

Author Reply: Well, Elladan did inherit his foresight from her, after all! So I thought she had to be involved. And it was time for Arwen to share in some of the angst. I also build a picture in my mind of scenes, and would love to be able to draw that one of the twins!

Jay

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