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To See A World  by Nightwing 8 Review(s)
Bad WargReviewed Chapter: 6 on 2/2/2016
So good lol

LifeIsRandomReviewed Chapter: 6 on 8/11/2008
Hello there Nightwing,

I, a fellow Michigan-der would like to congratulate you on a wonderful story so far! I am looking forward to reading the rest in a timely fashion. I can only hope that our favorite Elf-Prince regains his ability to see, but the answer to that, I leave to you. :)

I loved the cat too!

*the reveiewer would like to apologize for any grammatical errors made in this review*


TariReviewed Chapter: 6 on 11/13/2006
This story gets better and better. I would not have the mysterious healer be a witch. I would have it be a beautiful youmg maiden, who comes in at the last minute and restores Loegolas's health and sight, and who knows what else.

Author Reply: Hi, Tari. Thanks for your reviews of these early chapters. It prodded me to go back and take another look at them. It's been quite a while since I wrote them, but they still hold up OK I think.

I hope you have the time and the patience to stick out the whole thing. It's a long and winding road!

meckinockReviewed Chapter: 6 on 9/26/2003
Love your story, and thank God there's somebody else here who wore bell-bottoms the first time around.

HeiwenReviewed Chapter: 6 on 9/24/2003
....I just love it as ever....!!! What a good mix of humor and fear....!
I think one can tell you were sick...I just know the feeling from Legolas longing to clean is teeth after being not able to move for a long almost had the taste in my mouth while reading!!!
I love the way you discribe how Legolas is tracking Aragorn in the small is very sensible, with a pinch of humor!
....sniff....runs for kleenex...that is so special how Legolas fights to say thanks....sniff!
Oh and how can you put my ranger through so much stress....softly whispering with much fear while telling Legolas that he is blind...!!!

I think I have to join the redhaired whitch to rescue the elf and the you think Tom Bomabil would also watch my kids while we are on our mission??

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 6 on 9/23/2003
This was subtly done. We realize Legolas's state only when he does. Very nice. His panic seems so real, poor guy. Aragorn's plan is probably the best he could come up with and it's a sign of their desperation that they cling to it so.

LKKReviewed Chapter: 6 on 9/23/2003
Wow. You did it again, Nightwing. Another lovely chapter -- in a painful, tear at your soul, sort of way. I like the way you intermingle humor and pathos.

Poor Legolas, struggling to reach consciousness, deciding that the first thing he's going to do when he can get up is clean his teeth. (Having spent much time in a sickbed myself, I can identify with the sentiment!) Legolas lying there imagining what Aragorn is doing from the sounds in the room was a nice touch too.

Then the hints of pathos creep in as Legolas assumes he is always waking up at night because his sleep cycle has been disturbed. The spark of fear lights, fanned into an inferno by later confirmation. The elf is blind. Legolas' unreasoning but understandable panic, Aragorn's attempt to use his healer's training to calm himself and his patient --- you handled their reactions well, I think. Some might chide you for Legolas' reaction. I won't. Given that's he's been deathly ill for 2 weeks, feeling that he's finally out of danger, then suddenly discovering he's blind, I think Legolas' panicked reaction is fully justified.

And as for Legolas and the cat ..... I have one word: purrrrfect.
(Sorry, I couldn't resist. LOL)

By the way, you wrote some of the funniest reviewer responses I've ever read. The red-haired witch will work just fine, thank you. Is she going to try and eat the elf and ranger like in Hansel and Gretel?


AvonReviewed Chapter: 6 on 9/23/2003
Sorry, I don't have anything terribly useful to say - just that I'm reading it and enjoying it. I figure even mundane feedback is better than no feedback. It's rare - IMO - to find an angsty h/c story which isn't over the top but you seem to be managing it rather well. BTW I also totally agree with you about Legolas's age and the reasons why.


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