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To See A World  by Nightwing 9 Review(s)
TariReviewed Chapter: 7 on 11/14/2006
I love the humour you inserted into this chapter. Specifically Legoas calling Aragorn a cat-threatening insomniac, and later waving the cat's paw at Aragorn.
That is so sweet, and helps relieve some of the angst.

Author Reply: I liked that line too. There is a great deal of angst and what-not in this story, but the little bits of levity are necessary.

I'm also glad that you are reading here at SOA rather than at FFN. On this site I have made little improvements here and there, but not on the other. So you're reading the better version.

Timmy2222Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 7/6/2004
Poor Legolas, how far will his torment go? And I am still in wonder how both travellers stumbled into this hut in the middle of nowhere, which is quite conveniently equipped! And with full service of regular meals... And additionally, why there is no Elf searching for them if you have them logging there for fourteen days by now. Looking forward to the solve of this riddle.
Timmy :)

IthilienReviewed Chapter: 7 on 11/11/2003
This story truly has me caught. It is gripping and fresh and I am loving every word of it. Please forgive me for falling behind in reviews. I know it is important for authors to know their story is read, and more so, appreciated, and I have been horrible about fulfilling my responsibilities in that. So letís work where we can and get us caught up to date.

Underlying everything in your story is this mood that cannot be denied. Poignant and sobering and lined with dread. Almost dread. Thatís not quite right. Truthfully I canít put my finger on it, but it seems like I feel serious trepidation with every chapter. Itís as if there is foreshadowing just in their existence in that house, and the anticipation is just about killing me. I know there is something coming, but what? What?

So it is time to wake up and face the music, er, birdsong. Poor Legolas. And Aragorn. Legolasí situation is pretty horrible, but you have to give it to Aragorn, he is dealing with a lot himself.

Well, at least the elf has the cat to help. Nice kitty. I love cats. And hey, Legolas is making progress. Almost. Set backs are inevitable I guess. Poor Elf. Gosh, can I say that enough? Apparently not. I think you are going to coax those words from me many times over. Keep going, my friend. I havenít found a flaw in this magnificent tale yet.

FadesintothewestReviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/24/2003
Ai, I cannot believe, I missed the updates on this story. RL has been crazy of sorts, grad school and work, I get home too late to relish in reading! I couldn't help but laugh at your description of the cat as it sounds like mine, and acts as my cat does, sleeping with me. She is a character all right, and thinks she is the queen of all.

So now we wait to *see* what happens with Legolas. The poor Elf it's like is soul is missing.


MuinthelReviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/20/2003
....hey surely was your story the first to read, when going online again....!
And as ever...it really touched my heart. Some of your discribtions....over here we have a saying....you have to let it run over your tongue! Or better to let it melt on your tongue...but that you just do with really good things and good discriptions of something special. You paint a very good picture of the whole situation before my inner eye...and sometimes I have the feeling I hide behind a tree and watch the two heros.
One can feel the pain and the hurt and the uncertainty Aragorn and Legolas are going through while reading.....!
Can't wait to read more!
Hey....and LotR will never go of my priority-list....!!! How could it, when a certain ranger...looking like he took every mudhole again...is haunting me in my dreams (not that I do not enjoy it....whuahahaha!!!)

Thundera TigerReviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/14/2003
I stumbled onto this story by accident, but I'm so very glad that I did. Wow. Words are failing me, actually, but...wow. Where do I begin?

Well, let's talk emotions, for starters. You have managed to tap into several levels of emotions throughout this fic. You've paid homage to surface feelings, you've explored deeper feelings that the characters sometimes seek to hide, and you've probed the essence of their souls, going beyond even what they know and showing us as readers how they truly feel based on their actions and their memories. It's amazing. Your characterization is flawless, and you've built it using dramatic angst. Where some would show courage and stoicism by introducing a battle sequence, you've shown it in gentle words and simple actions. It's a very subtle and very elegant way to build a personality, and not many authors - even professional ones - can pull it off. You have, and for that, you have my awe and my congratulations.

Not that you've neglected action and battle. The first two chapters had their share of it, and you handled that magnificently. But rather than making it the focus of the story (which could have been easy) you made it a means to an end. And that is very refreshing. It's taken second tier to a more intense and personal battle waged by Legolas and Aragorn against the possibility that the elf might never see again.

Wonderful attention to detail, too. Small notes throughout the text paint a beautiful picture of the scenery and the setting. It's interesting that you've done so, because obviously Legolas cannot see any of this. And in working from his point of view, you've done an amazing job in emphasizing the sense of touch and hearing. The entire sequence where he is fading in and out of consciousness before finally breaking through to speak to Aragorn was wonderful. You kept it vague enough to be believable, but you inserted enough detail to give us a good idea of what was going on.

Amazing story, and I'll certainly be checking back for updates. Thank you so much for treating us to this wonderful work!

LKKReviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/5/2003
Ai, Nightwing! Another wonderful chapter. So many charming tidbits adding up to a delicious whole. Some of my favorite tidbits:

... the description of Aragorn's feelings as he watched his friend descend nearly into madness. We didn't get his reactions in the last chapter, so it was nice to hear how he felt during that heartwrenching scene.
... Aragorn needing Legolas to awaken and threatening to take the cat if he doesn't.
... Legolas' response to Aragorn's threat. I think it is not a good thing I have been sick these many days. You have turned into a cat-threatening insomniac lunatic in my absence. (My absolute favorite line in this chapter, by the way.)
... Legolas waving good-bye with the cat's paw. (My absolute favorite moment.)
... Legolas announcing he was still blind. (The most heart-wrenching moment.)
... Aragorn hand's providing the only thing they were still able to give. Solace. (The most heartfelt moment.)

There are many more; I just thought I'd name a few.

One of the things I like overall about this chapter and the others before it is the pacing of the story. Too often stories feel rushed. You're taking the time to allow the characters to reflect and to discover at a pace consistent with how things would happen in the Real World.

I also like that time in Middle Earth progresses in your story. Events don't happen in some void outside of Middle Earth time. Autumn turns into Winter, and Aragorn must prepare for its coming because they will not be able to cross the snow-covered mountains.

Well, I could go on and on about this chapter because it really touched me. But I think I'll let you go. If I keep bending your ear, you'll never get a chance to write the next chapter. And I certainly wouldn't want that to happen!

LKK
PS: I hope you're feeling better.

Jay of LasgalenReviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/4/2003
A great chapter. But I so hoped when Aragorn found Legolas outside at dawn that they could *both* see it! Poor Legolas - it must have been devastating when he took off the blindfold and he still could not see. How long are you going to torture him?

I like the cat. They are very comforting when you don't feel well, and at the weekends (the only time I don't have to get up so early) my cat always comes and sits on my chest, purring madly.

When are we going to find out what happened to the mysterious healer?


Jay

AvonReviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/4/2003
Poor Legolas! I like the cat and I like all the little descriptive details. I love the Orlando's wardroe explanation of the blindness. Cute as he is the boy shouldn't be allowed to dress himself - or do his own hair.

Um, you've had a formatting problem or something btw - the whole thing appears twice, one after the other.

One minor suggestion - please ignore if you don't want beta-level feedback - I think you need to use their names more often and not use name substitutes (the ranger, the fair Prince etc) as much. IMO it detracts from the story.

Cheers,

Avon

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