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Mazarbul  by Thundera Tiger 6 Review(s)
shiregardensReviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/30/2012
Great piece! I find the dwarves even more interesting than the elves, and this story was a great exploration of them and their culture. I wish more people wrote creative, deep pieces like this -- this is something that is like an 'addendum' instead of the typical fan story. Love it! It was amazing! Especially the part about Gimli singing in Moria and how 'the rest of Khazad-dûm would not hear me'. People often write of elves and their connection to nature, but the dwarf side is overlooked, so I really enjoyed this.

VictorReviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/15/2009
EXCEPTIONAL!

Everyone seems so enamored with Elves it is seldom that someone can grasp the honor and wisdom of dwarves. I'd still prefer to be an Elf but I'd certainly appreciate the axe of a hardy Dwarf at my side and the hand of he who wielded it.

I quite enjoyed the secret counsel given and the message of the need for hope to temper the yearning for what was lost.

WELL DONE.

Author Reply: Thank you so much for the review, Victor! I'm glad you enjoyed the story, even if your own preference for the elves. I definitely understand. I usually write Gimli and Legolas together because I like both the elf and the dwarf, but once in a while they decide to go their separate ways. I'm also glad you liked the message in the story. I had problems rendering it in a way that the dwarves might approach it, but it seems to have worked out. Thank you again!

shireboundReviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/1/2009
And as he listened, Thorin felt a longing wake within his heart. A longing for a home and a heritage that he had seen only in his deepest dreams. From a memory that was not his own, he could hear the sharp ring of many anvils and the throaty roar of many bellows.

What beautiful writing. You bring us deeply into dwarvish hearts and souls.

"I prefer a living record over a lost memory ... let the records of our day show that we chose to endure. That we put our trust in our future and that we looked forward to hope!"

Wise Gimli, who brings his people the only message that really matters. Well done.

Author Reply: Thank you so much for the review! I had great fun playing around with what might motivate the dwarves, and I'm glad that some of that came through. It all made sense in my head, but I wasn't sure if I would be able to transfer it to story form. And in my own imagination, Gimli is very wise and very practical. So I'm glad that came through, too. Thank you again!

Agape4GondorReviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/1/2009
It is so very strange - when one reads a really good 'gap-filler' - one always seems to want more. Yes - reading of the revelation of Aglarond would be great!

I loved every piece/part of this. You had difficult paths to tread, telling things that we all know (the battle of the Morannon, the losses in Moria, the death of Gandalf and the Balrog)... but you carried it well. Easy to read and not the least bit 'dull.'

However, the best part was Gimli... contrary to PJ's image, you reaffirmed this Dwarf's greatness and why Elrond chose him to be part of the Nine Walkers.

Very well done indeed.

Author Reply: Thank you so much for your review! To be honest, I was very concerned about retelling something that Tolkien already covered in canon. I felt it was important because I wanted to get a dwarven take on the whole thing and show how Thorin reacted to it, but I didn't want to rehash canon or bore everyone out of their mind. And I'm so relieved that you didn't find it dull. That was one of my primary fears. And I'm glad that Gimli appeared as someone who would have been chosen as one of the Nine Walkers. I cringe at quite a few of his lines in the movies. Thank you again!

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/31/2009
Wonderful account of one aspect of the aftermath of the Quest. There are things that Tolkien doesn't tell us that call out for a story and this is one of them. I like the way Thorin sees how Gimli's journey has changed him.

Author Reply: Thank you so much for the review. I'm glad that Thorin's perspective on Gimli was clear for you. I think the Quest would have changed him quite a bit, and those most familiar with him would be among the first to see it. Thanks again!

DreamflowerReviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/31/2009
Marvelous! Yes, this is such a good picture of how it could have been when Gimli returned with his news. It would have been the right thing to let the new King know privately of his news and concern, rather than announce it to the whole kingdom under the Mountain.

And once he is rested, he will have other news of hope for Dain and for Dwarves, for if they cannot and should not reclaim Khazad-dum, still there will be new Halls in Aglarond-- and those will prosper at least for a time!

Author Reply: Hey Dreamflower,

Originally, I had Dwalin and Gloin in on the scene, too, but that proved too cumbersome a conversation. And really, this is something Thorin would want to hear first and privately. I also tried to work in hints of Aglarond, but like Dwalin and Gloin, I eventually ended up dropping those, too. It just didn't fit the tone, and Khazad-dum really did need to be the focus here. It's a big part of dwarven history. Anyway, many thanks for the review!

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