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| False Faces by Alisha B | 38 Review(s) |
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| Sweetpea Deepdelver | Reviewed Chapter: 17 on 12/24/2013 |
| Very interesting. I enjoyed it, and look forward to reading more of your writing. | |
| Timmy2222 | Reviewed Chapter: 17 on 8/9/2004 |
| Yes, just fine, I enjoyed reading this story. Though I always think that Tolkien's world demands for some "ancient" vocabulary, this plot was delivered nicely. Take care, - T. | |
| Timmy2222 | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 8/9/2004 |
| HA! I love these turns! Now, on the other hand, I was right that the young man is not dead, but the twist was very well done. Aragorn appears a little bit too light-hearted and easy-going for the ordeal that lies behind him. I would not suppose him to make small talk just to distract the men from his ancestry. - T. | |
| Timmy2222 | Reviewed Chapter: 11 on 8/9/2004 |
| This chapter had quite a plot point! First, I would not have thought the young man to be dead (very bloody ending, though. that causes me to pity the man as well as Aragorn, who had to see him). I thought he would be able to escape and bring help. Second, I would have guessed the whole story will take place at Isengard. Now, wrong again. I look forward to see where this turn will take me to. - T. | |
| Timmy2222 | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 8/9/2004 |
| Again an interesting chapter, but I have to admit that I would have appreciated a character death warning in the header. The killing of a pregnant woman, even though she does not play a major part in the story, does not come lightly to me. Saruman plays his sorcery very cunning... - T. | |
| Timmy2222 | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 8/8/2004 |
| Now we see where this was leading to. Poor Aragorn! The chapter title could be considered somewhat mockingly... - T. | |
| Timmy2222 | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/3/2004 |
| Again a good chapter to read, but - though I might spoil the mood - there are some things I found strange: Aragorn had before wandered the lands far and wide, and his knowledge of direction was excellent. The Orcs were quite inattentive to let their captive sit on the horse and think him to be sleeping! A more powerful approach to his escape - f.e. he pushes the Orc rider off the horse - would have tightened the pace and add to the stregth of Aragorn to gain freedom on his own. I suppose Orc archers not to be so accurate at aiming that they would have risked to shoot Aragorn's horse. They might as well have hit him. Another solution would have been to let the Orcs overtake Aragorn, or that the horse shies away from a certain obstacle and throws off the rider. Anyway I enjoy to read it and I hope you won't consider my remarks unfriendly. You can give it back - if you want to - by reviewing my stories (g). - T. | |
| Timmy2222 | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/3/2004 |
| I laughed heartily about this sentence: "Orcs made him nervous, and hospitable Orcs made him question and worry." This is too good to be true! -T. | |
| Timmy2222 | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/3/2004 |
| Wow, what a start! Hope it's going on like that! -T. | |
| Lady Wind | Reviewed Chapter: 17 on 5/24/2004 |
| Well, having read both the current and the previous version of the fic, I must say that I approve of your edits. I really think both what you added and subtracted improved the story, especially changing the confrontation between Fev...can't spell name... and Aragorn. It's really nice that you took the time to go back and really go over your work, rather than just leaving it in a state you felt to be unfinished. : ) I also approve of your sequal idea! Most gollum-capture fics I've read have been poorly written, so it would be nice to see a good one done. (one exception is "Boundaries of Time" by gypsum, but it remains unfinished unfortunately...) Ah, enough blathering. Good job!! Author Reply: My goodness, I'm terribly sorry for not responding sooner, but Real Life hasn’t given me a chance to be online in over a month. Thank you for your kind words, and I’m honored you thought enough of my story to re read it! I still can’t say I’m 100% happy with this final product, but then I’m afraid I’d alter more then sentence structure and border on major plot changes. But c’est la vie! Some bad new, though. I don’t think I will actually do the sequel. The more I think about it, the more I know I’d mess up Gollum’s character. I shudder right not even thinking about it. He’s a little too complex/complicated/weird/whatever for my current skill level, and like you said, it has to be done right. It’d take a little more then adding “precious” to every sentence. :-) But! I am currently working on another short story, hopefully around 5 chapters. Still centered around Aragorn, of course, though this time he's much younger. False Faces taught me that it can be difficult and annoying to post WIPs so I’m going to wait until I finish the whole thing. There were a few too many times that I wanted to go back and change major details or add a subplot but couldn’t because it had been posted already. Anyway, sorry for babbling. Thank you for the review and for taking the time to reread my story. I’m glad you approve of the changes; I spent entirely too long on them! | |