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He's Not Heavy by paranoidangel	3 Review(s)
Teresa	Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 2/21/2011
Chuckle......... a very nice glimpse of the brothers! It looks as though Faramir has learned something about diplomatic negotiation already! He also seems to be working on his observational skills too! That can only help him as a future Ranger and Steward of Gondor! As for Boromir, I'd say the the determination that serves him so well in battle is showing, and the affection that he has for his brother is great! Denethor should have realized that his sons would ally against him and follow their own interests! Many thanks for this! :) Author Reply: Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.

Darkover	Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 2/20/2011
Dear paranoidangel: This story was enjoyable to read. I liked the descriptions, especially such things as when you mentioned Faramir's "hopeful expression." Too many stories are written like movie scripts, with just the dialogue, and you did not do that--well done! I do have a couple of criticisms, however. I would have liked to have some idea of how old the brothers were at this point, and you did not give your readers that. If this transpired when Boromir, or he and Faramir both, were in their teens, it would have seemed more realistic, as I seriously doubt if an adult Faramir would need his father's permission to visit the library, or that an adult Boromir would need such elementary help in impressing the opposite sex. But the sentence about how Aerliniel "wasn't suitable to be the wife of the steward" implies that the brothers are older, as a Boromir in his mid-teens would probably not be too concerned about marriage. Also, the last line of the story, Boromir's comment to his brother; "One day you'll be the death of me," was not something I liked. Well, frankly, I hated it. Given the importance of "foresight" in Tolkien's writings, upon which this story is based, it seems to me that you were implying that Faramir eventually was the death of his older brother--that, like Denethor, you believed that Boromir would not have died if Faramir had not had the dream about Isildur's Bane being in Imladris. Maybe that was not what you meant at all, but that was how I interpreted it. Otherwise, I hasten to assure you, I thought this was a well-written story that was enjoyable to read--I just would really like to see you end it with some other line. Thank you for writing and posting it. Sincerely, Darkover Author Reply: Thank you for you long review. The last line wasn't supposed to suggest at all that Faramir was the death of Boromir. I was sort of vaguely hinting that Boromir wouldn't have died if Faramir had gone in his place. But only very vaguely, it was just a way of finishing the story off.

daw the minstrel	Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 2/19/2011
An amusing and touching exchange. You convey a lot of emotion in relatively few words. I really enjoyed this. Author Reply: Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.

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