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The Heir Apparent  by Mirkwoodmaiden 5 Review(s)
LarnerReviewed Chapter: 10 on 3/28/2020
That Galadriel sought so to comfort him is important. He has much to do in the next eighteen years.

Author Reply: Larner!

That was why I thought she needed to step in and comfort him. Erithain needed the strength at that time and who better to give it. He will face the next 18 years with the strength and grace of the best of the Dunedain!

P.S. I can't tell you how much I appreciate that you are re-reading my story. I am really happy that you are enjoying it and are talking the time to write back! :-)

MM


LarnerReviewed Chapter: 10 on 11/7/2005
Not all chapters need to be longer--each should end where you sense it should.

Like the movie-verse touch of the telescope and "What shall we do?" Very much appreciated, I find.

Decent descriptions of settings.

I find I like it well.

Eruanneth_LuinReviewed Chapter: 10 on 6/30/2005
Stars, I never gave thought to the grief Gilraen would no doubt feel at the loss of even the name of her only child. But had he been known to be in Imladris for a certainty deadly foes would have massed at the borders to finish the line of Isildur.

Gliraen’s brother as regent is logical and believable as well. Dark would be the days and little hope left, with the Enemy closing in again.

Thank you. Short or long an enjoyable read.


Author Reply: Eruanneth_Luin!

I was just looking back through my reviews and realised that I had never answered your last couple of reviews! Very remiss of me!

About Gilraen, I tried to think about what she would have thought about what had been foist upon her by life and I could only imagine that she would have been devastated by not being able to share so many memories about Arathorn with little Estel. Parents might share memories of the loved ones with the child as a way of sharing and maybe healing, but this was for the most part denied Gilraen. Her life is torn asunder and I was thinking that she never is really allowed to mend the pieces of her life and move on.

I'm so glad that you've enjoyed the story. And thanks for the reviews!

MM

DotReviewed Chapter: 10 on 10/28/2003
Hi there! Welcome back. I hope all is well – I certainly missed you! Did my e-mail get through alright?

What an incredibly powerful chapter. Yeah, it was short but that gave you a great opportunity for some deeper characterisation. You did a particularly good job showing Gilraen’s sense of futility and her questioning of her life now and her place in the world. She seems at a total loss as to what to do with herself, especially when she is without Aragorn to keep her focused.

I’m glad Elladan and Elrohir are spending so much time with Aragorn – the child could probably benefit hugely from their influence. They’re just so amazing – I imagine Elrond must be very proud of them.

I really like your portrayal of Elrond, actually. I think it’s important to see that any decision he makes is only done so with difficulty and that he is completely aware of the pain he may cause. He strikes me as so compassionate, which is exactly how I would have imagined him.

I never thought before how the protection of Aragorn would have affected Gilraen in the sense that she is forced to hide so many of her memories instead of sharing them. It was his devotion to his people and his heritage that made Arathorn the man he was and yet she cannot share this with his son. That’s really quite heartbreaking - you really made me stop and think!

That part with Erithain receiving the news was handled so well. The numbness, despair and reluctant acceptance of his new position... Arathorn played such an important role in his life, and his devastation is portrayed so realistically.

Galadriel??! That was unexpected! But a beautiful touch. I like the way she reinforces the importance of the unity of the Dunedain. I’m beginning to suspect that Erithain has a role to play yet (yay!)... I was a little worried about him but he’s lucky to have such a friend as Erkenthal, who really must be equally devastated. Our boys’ll be alright, won’t they...?!!:)

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 10 on 10/27/2003
The two sections of this chapter showed the brother and sister suffering the aftermath of Arathorn's death, each in their own way. You made the pain very real. I could see how much at a loss Gilraen was as her life was stripped from her. And her brother is now alone with heavy responsibilities. Great chapter.

Author Reply: Thanks Daw!

I tried to stay true to how the emotions of these people would unfold. At first I thought to leave Fornost entirely and not show Erithain's pain but I developed a great fondness for him and thought he needed to express his grief!

MM

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