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Interrupted Journeys 10: Finding the sun  by elliska 8 Review(s)
CandissDReviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/23/2013
what a cliffhanger -please update soon! Poor Thranduil having to relate the Menegroth story and poor Legolas having to fight his jerk of a guard while injured. Cannot wait to see what happens next

Author Reply: Poor Thranduil and Legolas indeed. I think you will be saying that even more still. Thank you so much for the reviews, I really appreciate them. I hope you continue to enjoy!

katrinaReviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/21/2013
Ah cliffhanger!! I'm reviewing this on my phone while walking to the train station, but I just wanted to let you know how much I appreciated and liked this chapter =)

Author Reply: Thank you so much for reviewing (and I am a little jealous you live somewhere that you get to take the train--so much better than driving). I appreciate the reviews so much! I'm glad you enjoyed and I hope you continue to.

picaraReviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/19/2013
Tricky beginning. You fooled me into thinking it was Tulus again for a moment. Thranduil's story to Berior was very pwerful. And everything at the Oak was very tense. Given what we see in this chapter, I am certain that Legolas is in a lot of trouble and not just because of that arrow pointed at him. Update fast.

Author Reply: Good, that's what I wanted you to think. ;-) And I'm glad it came across as tense. You are definitely right about trouble. No doubt there. Thanks so much for the reviews. I really appreciate them!

curiouswombatReviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/18/2013
Now that last line is what I call a cliff-hanger...

Thranduil's telling of Menegroth was a very powerful way of reminding Berior ( and the reader) of all he has been through - and how he has experienced not just loss but kin-slaying. It should, most certainly, explain his reasoning - when Berior is finally able to really think straight, poor lad.

As for Tureden - I presume he has some reason for his attitude problem in this new role - but even if has, I still want to hit him over the head with rotting fish!!

Author Reply: I'm glad you enjoyed Thranduil's story. It is not something he talks about freely, as he said, but Berior's comment that he would finish Fuilin and Mauril himself was just a little too much for Thranduil. Berior does have some thinking to do, and he'll do it.

Tureden--wow he is not making a good first impression. But I was in the library reading when I saw this review and I got quite a few glares for my loud laughter at the last line. I am still laughing. Legolas might just borrow that idea at some point. ;-)

Thanks so much for the reviews. I appreciate them so much!

FantasiaReviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/18/2013
For goodness sake!!!! you are going to kill me!!!!

Thranduil's story was very sad, touching and realistic. Civil war ( I see the kinslaying as an equivalent of human civil war) it is the worst war nightmare that can be inflicted to humankind. Families vs families, it is so terrible wrong.

My heart goes to Berior, he is such a brave young elf, he will do well, no doubt.
Thranduil is right, artistry is needed, even in evil times.

Tureden is completely out of place, someone needs to "train" him as a personal royal guard, Gosh, how I miss Tulus!

Please, please update soon....

Author Reply: LOL! I'm glad you enjoyed. Thranduil has seen a lot. The older elves all know that. The younger ones have heard that statement, but they don't know the details to make it real. Now Berior has and it definitely made an impact.

I laughed when I saw your comment about Tureden needing training. In one version of this, Thranduil reacted to hearing that Tureden re-broke Legolas's ribs by saying essentially the same thing.

The rest of your comments, I can't respond to without dropping major spoilers. So I need to shut up. :-)

Thanks so much for the reviews! I appreciate them so much!

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/18/2013
Man, this had some high tension moments in it. Often flashbacks are flat because we know they're done, but Thranduil's story of the attack on Menegroth had me right there, horrified. And it seems to have helped Berior get some perspective even if he hasn't yet changed his mind. I loved the moment when Thranduil says Berior is frightening him. That surely should have given Berior some sense of how his actions are coming across. It sounds like he'll be busy with his new duties though.

I wanted to smack Tureden. He thinks the worst of Legolas with no excuse that I can see. Yet, anyway. And then he fails to pull his hits and smacks Legolas right in the broken ribs. He'll be lucky if no real damage was done.

So I hate to admit that he then does a good job guarding Legolas when the bad guy shows up, and he shows faith in Legolas's ability hit the guy in mid-jump. Which he does. Only the guy has another arrow.

I liked the speed shooting. That's a great idea for a contest. And I liked the way Galithil is taking his father's place.

Thranduil is not going to be happy about any of this. A bad guy so close to the stronghold. Legolas out without a guard. The guard forcing him to spar when he isn't supposed to. And of course, the little matter of an arrow still being pointed at Legolas.

Author Reply: I'm glad that Thranduil's story came across. I was worried about it, for exactly the reasons you mention. It went through some major changes, which, though I gave up some stuff I liked, I think I ended up with something that was more in character for everyone. Point is, thanks, daw! :-)

I loved the moment when Thranduil says Berior is frightening him. That surely should have given Berior some sense of how his actions are coming across.

Thanks again! And we'll hope so, for Berior's sake.

Tureden is not Legolas's fav person right now either. Not even a little bit. But, true, he does do what he is supposed to do. Legolas also isn't feeling generous enough at the moment to notice that.

I'm glad you liked the speed shooting. I did too because it is a practical skill, especially for elves, and it is simple, requiring no special/elaborate set up or explanation (easy to write and fit in almost any story space). It made me happy to think if it. :-) Galithil is much more mature, generally speaking. That doesn't mean he's forgotten how to cause a little grief for Thranduil :-)

And yeah, Thranduil is going to be one very unhappy elf when all this comes to light.

Thanks so much for the reviews! I appreciate them so much!

MornReviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/18/2013
Wow. what an intense sad story. I love the thorough history all your elves have. It is good to see how thought out this is and how their actions are affected by this history in this way.

And Legolas just can't catch a break at the moment. what cliffhanger you leave us on yet again.

Just a small note. By a happy coincidence I'd been rereading some of your story as I'd forgotten some of the details since I'd last read it. I had been reading chapter 3 and one point set alarm bells ringing. you've killed off his naneth's brothers twice! Poor things. ;)

Besides that, a great chapter. Thanks for pointing out the lack of death warnings on the last review: I can breathe a sigh of relief. For a small amount of time at least.

Author Reply: Oh that's true. I should make that more specific. Sometimes I know what's in my head, but all of it doesn't get on the paper. Thanks so much for catching that! I'm going to go do that in both places and then I'll answer the review more carefully.

Author Reply: Ok, that's done. At some point, I changed a few things about who lost what family where, for a variety of reasons (this being one of them). I thought I caught all that in the already posted stuff, so I'm glad you said something. It is terrible to have to die twice, even for an elf. ;-) (When I was editing this part, I originally had the word 'remaining brothers' in this chapter. On re-reading just before posting, I took it out because it sounded odd. Now I remember why I had put it in there).

Anyhoo, in another version of this, Legolas was in the room for this little story as well. It was a wrench to move him out when I re-arranged sections, because he's tried to get his father to talk about Menegroth so many times and failed. This was written from his POV, coming to an understanding of why Thranduil never talks about Menegroth. I liked it a lot that way too. Now, hopefully I can still keep in Berior telling Legolas about this little story. That chapter is awfully long and I am eyeing stuff to cut from it...

It is a bit of a cliffie, isn't it? I mean, unless this story is going to suddenly take a seriously AU twist, Legolas survives. :-) But who knows what else might come of it. I just posted an answer to another review and it forced me to look at how much of this story (the whole thing, not just this part) I have left to post. I am now considering if I can reliably post more than once a week! Fingers crossed.

Thanks so much for the reviews (and careful reading!) I appreciate them so much!

tnt2b2Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/18/2013
Quick! Send the next chapter!!!! I can't leave this story lingering on a cliff in my mind for a whole week :).

Elliska, I truly enjoy your story. I look forward to your updates. Thank you for sharing your gift for my to enjoy.

Author Reply: LOL. It just so happens that I am trying to figure out if I can post faster and still be reliable about it. So, there may be hope.

I'm glad you are enjoying and I hope you continue to! Thanks so much for the review. I appreciate them so much!

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