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As Soft As Steel  by TolkienScribe 3 Review(s)
Esteldė TincalimaReviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/24/2017
I love this first chapter and I hope that more are to follow! :) I particularly admire your portrayal of canon characters, especially Fėanįro. He's a complex one, but one of my favorites. Excellent beginning.

I'm just gonna leave a quick nitpick, since my beta side is hard to silence. When you have someone speaking and their dialogue is followed by a dialogue tag, it should look like this:

"I am speaking," he said.

Note the comma before the quotation marks—it's not a period. :) I noticed you did this multiple times in the chapter. It's minor, but it would be fantastic if you could make sure it's right and all.


Esteldė :)

LarnerReviewed Chapter: 1 on 4/18/2016
A very likely beginning to the friendship we know came to bind them.

ElentarriReviewed Chapter: 1 on 4/18/2016
This is good, very good. More please.

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