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|The Enemy Within by daw the minstrel||56 Review(s)|
|Moonshine4488||Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 3/26/2017|
|Always a pleasure reading one of your stories. I really enjoyed Legolas interacting with a human child. This is fun and exciting to read like all of your fanfics :)|
Author Reply: Legolas needs to prepare to join a Fellowship that includes other races. :-)
It struck me that a human girl would look exotic to him, and at his age, girls are already hard to figure out.
Glad you liked it.
|Caz-Baz||Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 2/23/2017|
|OMG! I have been rereading all my favourite childhood literature recently, from Roald Dahl to Tolkein to J K Rowling, and I had this sudden urge to come back to this site and start rereading some of your fan fic. Definitely not disappointed! |
I was so happy to find a new story uploaded as well! I hope you are as glad as I am that you didn't kill Eilian off in one of your earliest stories. I always related so much to the misunderstood middle child through my teens.
Thank you so much for sharing all these wonderfully creative tales they were a pleasure to read the first time around and I am working away on rereading them all now. I think Annael maybe one of my favourite OC's now!
Author Reply: Hi, Caz-Baz! Long time, no see.
I was insane to think of killing Eilian. He turned out to be a wonderful character to write about because he has good points but also flaws, so he always felt alive to me.
Annael is one of my favorite OCs too. He's the friend we all wish we'd had.
Glad you're still enjoying these stories.
|Bodkin||Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 1/7/2017|
Hard as it is to credit, I've only just had time to read the whole of this. Christmas and grandbabysitting really do eat into your time!
You can't blame Thranduil for having so little faith in men. He never seems to meet any that are really trustworthy ... well, not until Aragorn comes along. And even he has his downside when it comes to elf/men relations - carrying off Elrond's daughter as he did.
Legolas is growing up, but not as fast as he'd like. But I'm glad Thranduil took a hand in sending Ithilden and Alfirin off together. I'm not sure that Ithilden would ever get round to it without paternal encouragement.
I'm missing LotR. I think I'm going to have to go back to reading my favourite authors.
Author Reply: Bodkin! How wonderful to hear from you. It sounds as if your life is full, which is good.
Thranduil didn't have the patience to wait for Ithilden to take the initiative. He just briskly set things in motion himself. :-)
I miss LOTR too. I miss the way it absorbed me and also the lively online life it created.
|Dot||Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 11/26/2016|
|I'm working elsewhere today and am being very bad and sneaking on here. I feel like it's years since I've done that!|
You know, you almost have to give Camil credit. He's seriously determined. Or totally oblivious to body language.
I'm glad Thranduil is able to tell Ithilden that his self doubt is unnecessary. Charm or no charm, Ithilden can be so hard on himself. Not that I'm biased.
Thranduil must have thought everyone had just completely lost the run of themselves. It sounds like quite a brawl going on!I laughed at him realising he was actually rather relishing the chance to wade in and do something.
Fair play to Eilian and Legolas for realising what was going on. How do you even think of these things, daw?? I'm glad that Camil didn't realise what he'd been doing. He didn't seem like someone who'd deliberately cause harm, especially not to his family. Plus you'd imagine if he'd known what was happening he wouldn't have loitered...
Thranduil wondered what the charm had whispered to Eilian and felt a flash of pain that whatever it was had preyed on a weakness he knew his son was struggling against. Oh man. That's heartwrenching.
Thranduil deciding not to push the topic of Hoth was wise, I think. Pick your battles and all that.
I think my favourite moment was Eilian making such an effort for Gelmir's parents. It says so much about him. And of course, it was so good of them to come and reassure him. That'll tell you how engrossed we get in your stories - I knew Gelmir was ok and still I was worried!
So what was the story with Jardin? Was the not eating to do with what was whispered to her or just stressing about her father? I possibly missed something as I keep reading this in bits.
"More than you hope, but less than I'd like." Love that. Sounds to me like parenting in a nutshell.
"Ithilden will escort you home, Alfirin," Thranduil said briskly. "No reason for you to hang about while your adar waits for your naneth." Ooh, nicely played! :-D
And it all finishes on a lovely and normal note - Legolas trying to persuade his father he's better off not actually being punished.
I better go... But I thoroughly enjoyed this story and would love to encourage you to write more :-)
Author Reply: I wonder how well humans can read Elven body language. Or vice versa, for that matter. I suppose Camil has had a fair amount of exposure to Elves, so you'd think he could manage. But Thranduil just doesn't care most of the time. He's busy.
One of my favorite moments in this chapter is Ithilden vaulting over the table to wade into the brawl, snapping his fingers at warriors along the way. The guy radiates authority, which I find quite attractive. Is that wrong?
I figured the charm was whispering to Jardin whatever it is that people with anorexia say to themselves. I've wondered about things like eating disorders and cutting. Have they always existed? It's hard to say, I think.
Glad you enjoyed the story, Dot, even if you are sneaking a read. :-)
|Dot||Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 11/26/2016|
|Wow, there are a lot of crotchety woodelves. I love Annael trying to keep the peace. Although I imagine Legolas thinks he's being restrained by not yelling at Eilian. |
I was kind of glad Hoth challenged his father, though. It was time for all that underlying tension to spill over.
"The Troop Commander told you what happened?" Yikes. Though to be fair, there was no way it could be kept secret for long. Poor Eilian. Obviously there's more to his temper than he realises but still, I feel for him.
"Hoth's gone." Well. Of course he is. What else could go wrong?!
And Legolas trying to look after Eilian! I'm torn between thinking it's sweet and feeling so bad for Legolas that he feels he has to.
"His back is burned." Oh, for... *sigh* Go get Gwaleniel.
"Legolas," Eilian said, "go get Gwaleniel." Hey, I just said that.
Why does he need the charm all the time???
"We have to talk to Adar," Eilian said. Oh thank God. Except I have to run to work now... Back later!
Author Reply: It's very annoying when they expect you to go to work all the time.
Hoth did the right thing in speaking up to his father. His impulses were good ones. Well, some of them anyway. The one to jump the fire wasn't.
Eilian's best moment was when he acts to help find Hoth even though he's still wearing the charm. He wavers because he's not at his best, but in the end, his love for Legolas makes him do what the brat asks. And then the charm annoys him enough that he pulls it off. Good going, Eilian. :-)
|meckinock||Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 11/24/2016|
|When you're writing Thranduil now, do you ever think of George Washington from Hamilton? Especially the parts where he's telling people to take a walk and meet him inside.|
This was such a satisfying ending. It's great to see everyone at each other's throats but even better when they all make up. And I'm glad even thought the Men were responsible, it wasn't a deliberately malicious act. Funny that of everyone who was affected, Ithilden seemed to show fewer signs because making him more uptight and controlled than normal just seemed...normal, somehow.
Author Reply: It never occurred to me to compare Thranduil to Washington! Tough leaders are tough leaders, I guess.
Funny that of everyone who was affected, Ithilden seemed to show fewer signs because making him more uptight and controlled than normal just seemed...normal, somehow
That's true. Ithilden is always his own worst enemy, but then maybe we all are.
|meckinock||Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 11/24/2016|
|Thranduil would have to know about the injury to the merchant's son, but given the scene Eilian had just made on the Green, some other time would be better. Much better.|
Oh, yeah. Much.
I can't wait to see what Thranduil is going to say about all this.
Author Reply: I love Thranduil but he's pretty high-handed and exacting. I wouldn't want him as a father. And his boys have learned how to get around him, each in his own unique way.
|meckinock||Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 11/24/2016|
|Hee, vintage Eilian - clucking at Legolas not go too near the cliff's edge, and then diving straight off it himself. I can't wait to see where this ends up, with Legolas in rationally logical bad-decision mode and Eilian indulging his inner demons at the same time, and the Mannish girl in the mix doesn't bode well either. |
Author Reply: Eilian indulging his inner demons
I announced the theme of this story pretty blatantly in the first chapter when Thranduil is hearing a case about two elves behaving badly. He says that if you give in to your worst impulses, you don't need someone from outside to destroy you. Then everyone went on to act it out!
|obsidianj||Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 11/23/2016|
|Thranduil as parent was great. Too many things to deal with in depth at once, so he let some things go like Hoth. It was probably for the better that he didn't know what Hoth was up to or Legolas would not hear the end of it. |
Author Reply: Too many things to deal with in depth at once, so he let some things go
That's very well put. Exactly so. Three sons and his people drawing daggers on one another mean he has to set some priorities.
When I first stated writing fanfic, there was a fashion for showing Thranduil as an abusive parent. That struck me as unlike the elves Tolkien shows us, and I had fun writing him differently.
|asms2||Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 11/22/2016|
|So Camil didn’t know about the charms – at least he claimed not to. I wonder what the Easterlings were trying to do – just cause chaos? I’m actually not sure what an Easterling is since I never read the books so I just goggled them and they appear to be part of the enemy. |
It was sweet to see Thranduil give credit to Eilian and Legolas for figuring out the charms! And then it made me smile to see how Legolas tried to turn that into a bid to be done with his punishment. “Really, it was a good idea to let me out of my room” Legoals said hopefully”. Haha. Can’t fault him for trying! And Thranduil as a parent is such a treat to read.
I’m sad to see this story end, as it was a lot of fun! Do you anticipate writing any more fanfiction? Thank you for posting your writing– it has been so much fun to discover and read!!
Author Reply: I love Thranduil as a parent. I suspect his relationship with Legolas is affected by the fact that he raised Legolas mostly on his own. I think he's may be a little more nurturing with Legolas.
I'll eventually write more fanfic. I like doing it when I have the time. You're very kind to take the time to tell me you enjoyed it.