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| Lost by FirstMate | 82 Review(s) |
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| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 15 on 11/5/2004 |
| I think you're right to recognize that Elrohir wouldn't have recovered his spirits immediately. And Elrond's reluctance to let him out of his sight was realistic too. But I think Elrond was wrong. Elrohir needs to be in control of his life. Actually, the relations between elven generations are interesting to me. The "children" are old and very experienced but Tolkien does seem to suggest that they were organized into houses and that the oldest male seemed to rule. Elladan's meeting with the dwarves was intriguing. I like Lord Bremon. The punishment he imposed is as interesting as the one that Elrond imposed on the Elves. It seems to suit dwarves, especially dwarven warriors. The meeting between the twins was so complicated. You drew out the approach and gave us time to appreciate it. And Ellladan's resistance made it so unexpected. I found his anger hard to accept at first, but I could kind of see it when I thought about it. I thought he might be feeling guilty that he was the one that the men were actually after when they hurt Elrohir, but certainly his ceasing to search would be a big deal too. I have to go to the grocery store now. Back later to finish reading the last bit. | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 15 on 11/5/2004 |
| Fantastic! it's worth waiting and it deserves a more thorough look than what I´ve managed. By now, I'd like to tell you that the final scene is great!! (all the chapter is)it's almost as it came right out from a film,(a compliment intended!) I can imagine the camera´s movements, the shouts entering Elrond's chambers and the joyful happy uproar outside, all from Elrond's point of view, up some stairs and overseeing it all IN SILENCE (amazing contrast with the roaring din)and with a sense of calmness that had deserted him for so long. Magnificent, I loved it. It all ends up with a sense of wholeness with which I completely agree.. the punishment to the elves is very "elven". From time to time, while awaiting update I had mused about that, I had considered banishment myself, but was unsure of what you would do... I am glad you chose the same for even though Turgon dealt death to Eöl, I am more of Gandalf's point of view:"Many live that deserve death, and many die that deserve life... " and all that ensues. Thank you for your compassionate approach, it is important to remeber and be reminded that compassion lies in our own hands and our own decissions. So, best wishes, I´ll patiently await for more stories from such a talented writer... perelleth | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 15 on 11/5/2004 |
| What a great finish and such a wonderful chapter. And long is wonderful - I so enjoyed it and I can look forward to going back and picking up bits I've skimmed through. I am so glad that Elrohir and Elladan are reunited and happy at the end and back home safe and sound. Elrohir was remarkably impressive with the slime-ball Robard - so much the son of his parents and grandparents. None of them could have done better. And yet even in his wrathfulness, he was able to show those merciful characteristics that are so much part of him. Not, I suspect, that Robard will consider his fate particularly merciful, as a bully without the money to pay his protectors is likely to find himself a victim himself. Can't think of a worthier recipient of his own medicine. Elrohir was also able to rise above petty vengeance when it came to Kalen and Matias - I think Elladan would have found that rather more difficult to manage. I was glad that Elladan learned that the bad dwarves also ended up with a rather nasty and humiliating penalty for their evil-doing. Now the people who kept Elrohir enslaved and drugged could do with their come-uppance and all his abusers will be paid off. Elrond was quite understandable in his desire to be over-protective of his poor son, but I'm glad he was able to accept Elrohir's need to be free. Actually, your portrayal of their reactions in the aftermath is, I think, really good - people so often cope admirably throughout crises only to become snappy and defensive afterwards. Again - thank you for a great ending to a great story - and for making it so delightfully long and satisfying! | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 15 on 11/5/2004 |
| First, I'm so glad to see another chapter of this story! Second, you're going to get several reviews from me about it because it's kind of long so I'll probably read it in chunks and I don't want to forget what happened at the start by the time I review. I like the idea that Elrohir is "not his father's son for nothing" so he bravely confronts someone he would rather not think about. And then he turns into the hardened warrior that he is when he's away from home and fighting orcs (so Glorfindel is familiar with it). That was good for Elrond to see, even if it was surprising. Parents have trouble seeing their children as strong adults sometimes. But even Glorfindel is surprised by him. "An irritated elf lord." That made me grin. I'm struggling to write about the twins right now and I'm taking note of what you do with Elrohir! You reason so well about his need to be in control of his own life after what's happened to him. Nice image of Arwen squeezing in beside Elrohir in the big chair. I thought the sentence for the two guilty elves was very appropriate and elven. They are going on a kind of pilgrimage to seek redemption. And they are trusted to know when they have done it. Being elves, they have time on their side. And it's like Elrohir's forgiveness of them is being passed on in their future good deeds (one hopes anyway). That's all for now. I'm off to the gym. | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 15 on 11/5/2004 |
| How wonderful to see an update at last! What a marathon chapter, too. I loved to see the change from Elrohir as victim to coldly furious elven lord - he was magnificent in dealing with Robard. I have to say that I thought banishment the least punishment to be dealt to the two elves, and I can't help hoping something nasty happens to them! I could have slapped Elladan for being so insensitive when he was finally reunited with Elrohir - Elrohir's pain and confusion was awful. The eventual 'real' reunion was wonderful though, and very sweet. And finally, the welcome home! A lovely scene to imagine. I hope you'll be writing something else soon. Jay | |
| DeepBlueSomething | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 10/28/2004 |
| Hi FirstMate! I already reviewed on Fanfiction.net, but I thought of a few things I forgot to mention in that review. First of all, this story is just so great! You're really doing a great job and I hope you write more in the future. The twins are my favorite LOTR characters and you have portrayed them beautifully. Also, I have some more thoughts on the bad guys. I wonder who will be sentencing them because when Elrond hears what has been done to Elrohir these past few weeks, it is going to be darn hard for him to be objective. It was absolutely heartbreaking how Kalen and Matias have treated Elrohir over the past few weeks. Is it going to take him a little while to recover from this? I would imagine that being starved and kept pretty much immoble for a few weeks would have bad effects on even an elf. I shudder to think how Elladan is going to react when he finds out what happened. Hey, that just gave me an idea! I have thought of a good punishment for the bad guys. I think they should be locked in a room, weaponless, with Elladan for a few hours. Wouldn't that be fun (LOL)! Anyway, maybe I have finally gotten all my thoughts on this chapter out of my system. You are doing great and I hope you are able to update soon. Author Reply: Hey DeepBlue! I FINALLY found a place I could log in, so...final chp is up. Yeah! Since I already e-mailed you a response, I'm not going to recap everything I said before, but wanted to close the loop here on SOA. Anyway, thanks so much for the review...hope you enjoy the last chp! FM | |
| Liz | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 9/6/2004 |
| Hi, Just sending a bit of encouragement your way so that your muses get rejuvenated and you feel renewed motivation to finish your wonderful story. Remember, you promised! You can't leave us all just hanging, I'm mean poor Elladan is out there somewhere believing his twin is dead and only you can fix that! You have all the power! Put it to good use and make our favorite characters happy again! I am sooo looking forward to the next part. Do update soon! Please! ~Liz Author Reply: Hey Liz, thanks for that bit of encouragement! My muses are rather frustrated with me at the moment. They keep telling me what to write, but that pesky thing called Real Life keeps getting in the way of me sitting down and putting it to paper (uh...well...computer screen...you know what I mean). I believe when I write another story, I'm going to finish the whole thing first before I post anything. That way I won't be mean to readers and make them wait too long. I really don't TRY to make people wait. I have already written about 25 pages worth, so it is coming along, albeit slowly. Hmmm...maybe for my next story I also won't make my chapters so long. Well, anyway, I have the twins' reunion already done, so take heart that they will be together again soon. Thanks again SOOO much for the note. It really does make the frustration easier to bear when I hear encouraging words! FM | |
| Kellen | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 7/1/2004 |
| Wow, what a story!! I sat and read all fourteen chapters in two days (would have been shorter had I not had to actually leave my apartment for anything. LoL) Very nice. I have really enjoyed this story!! cheers,Kellen Author Reply: Hi Kellen! I am sorry to have taken so long to respond. Life always has an interesting way of interferring with more pleasurable things like replying to reviewers (or even, sigh, writing). You read all the chapters in just a couple of days, huh? Wow. I figure it's about at novel length at this point, so your eyes must have been strained looking at the computer so long. Yikes! Well, I'm glad you enjoyed the story so far. I'm still working on the last chapter, but haven't been able to get it finished yet. Thanks so much for reviewing! FM | |
| Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 6/27/2004 | |
| That was a fantastic chapter. Poor Elrohir, he breaks my heart the way you describe him so well Polinas is really evil, whereas I feel ambivalent towards Kalen and Matias. The worse thing for them is, no matter what punishment Elrond can mete out, no matter what Elladan and Elrohir say or do, it is never going to be worse than their own feeling of guilt, and the fact that their misdirected vengeance and anger should have been placed on none other than their own brother in law who effectively destroyed their family completely. Please bring Elladan home safely, and Estel. I want them to be happy again. Author Reply: Hi...thanks for the nice words in your review. Yes, I believe that Kalen and Matias are going to be their own worse enemies now. They will never be able to truly forgive themselves for what they did to a friend (and now they know it was for a false cause!) Elladan is going to be reunited with his twin shortly, don't worry. But Estel is not coming back in this story. He's off galavanting somewhere with the rangers and is too far away. Maybe a sequel someday will address his reunion with his brothers! | |
| Molly | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 6/26/2004 |
| I was really excited to see this update. Finding out the motive behind this whole thing satisfying, though I wonder what will happen to Kalen and Matias now. I can't wait for Elladan to get home and find Elrohir much recovered! How awful for his family to find out that all along he was in the stable, right under their noses. Reading about him in that box, though, I kept wondering - when did he go to the bathroom? If his captors didn't give him breaks, that would have made the box a whole lot more miserable. Author Reply: Ha! You know, I did wonder that same thing myself and actually had written a few lines kind of explaining how they took care of that little detail...but then I decided that it was just TMI (too much information) and it didn't really add to the story. In the end, I just left it up to everyone's imagination. Either they could assume he was allowed to go to the bathroom when they let him out, or even that he...uh...was forced to just use his box. Ugh...I think I'd go for the former explanation! Too icky otherwise (although I suppose it is the more likely answer). Elladan is definitely going to be surprised to find his brother recovered, although it won't be instant joy. He has a few issues to work out first (guilt mainly). Anyway, thanks for reviewing! | |