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The Only Love-Gods  by Melyanna 72 Review(s)
purrlinReviewed Chapter: 14 on 7/10/2004
Oh My!

I'm interested in knowing how you will get out of this one.

Honest mistake meets vengeful brat....it does not auger well.

If you stay relatively true to canon, then I'm hoping that you have something interesting up your mysterious sleeve as I do not believe that Eomer would accept a "veiled" wife as a fit punishment knowing that such a bride would be "Queen" of his people. I'm hoping that somehow Eomer will teach the "lady" the depth that vengence can go.....

Maybe..... ok just a thought...and maybe Im being pre-emptive....maybe Eomer will accept a boat ride...we know how dangerous boats can be....maybe she will believe that he has died and will desire it be otherwise...maybe they will cancel out each others baser natures...

Whatever you decide to do you can not allow a "King" to lose face to such a degree (that goes for Aragorn "King Elessar" as well - what "Vengence" will he require after the trick played upon his people and family as well) I think the Lady has a number of people to whom she owes a great apology to. I can't begin to see how she will repay such a debt without losing face...love does conquer all (between those in love) it doesnt sooth those that are not the loved ones...she has certainly hurt many more people, and I do not see how she can expect people to accept her as a "Queen" when she certainly doesn't behave like she should be one.

I wish you luck and look forward to seeing how you will handle the interesting situation you have created.

purrlin :)

purrlinReviewed Chapter: 14 on 7/10/2004

KittyReviewed Chapter: 14 on 7/10/2004
After reading the whole story today I'm quite taken with it. Very well written!

After the nice beginning I had never expected such a turn! Eomer may have judged too rashly, but at least he had some reason to believe what he saw with his own eyes. And he has acted as the honourable king he is after he learned the truth.

Lothiriel is another matter. Honestly, I can't understand Imrahil - he should never have allowed this, let alone helped his daughter! And I hope very much he will get a severe lecture from Aragorn after this. Lothiriels faked death cut not only deeply in Eomers heart, but in the hearts of so many others as well. This is neither honourable nor fair at all! If I were Eomer, I couldn't trust her after this, and I don't think Lothiriel deserves this man after all. Spoiled little brat!

Please update soon, I can't wait to know how this will continue!


eokatReviewed Chapter: 14 on 7/10/2004
I don't know. Loved the chapter as usual, but this plan of Lothiriel's is a lot to forgive. I hope Eomer understands but I feel it will knock their courtship back months. Eokat

BodkinReviewed Chapter: 14 on 7/10/2004
I do so agree with Faramir. This sort of worked as a scheme in Much Ado, but then Shakespeare didn't bother much with reality - and I always thought it was a really horrible thing to do to someone. Especially here, as it's not an impulse, but has lasted over however long it takes to get back and forth to Dol Amroth three times.

Eomer behaved beautifully. Imrahil would have behaved beautifully had he not known that Lothiriel was sitting in her room doing her hair. Lothiriel - spoilt brat merely begins to describe her.

Faramir is quite right. In an argument over trust, she has proved herself to be untrustworthy. (And, come to that, selfish and unreliable. She should never have run away in the first place. Perhaps Eomer should dump her and marry the maid - Mithlomi? - and Lothiriel could be left to learn from her mistakes!)

ArwenReviewed Chapter: 13 on 6/25/2004
Melyanna,

I read all of your chapters yesterday and they left me breathless! For me you captured Eomer and Lothiriel so well. I can well imagine that as the youngest daughterer of Prince Imrahil she might be the one who, for lack of a better word, is the most spoiled. Because Eomer had such a strong sister in Eowyn, he might well look for the same kind of spirit in his wife. Eomer needs a strong woman to balance his own strong personality. Their dialog and interaction in your stories are wonderful!

The detail you have described in the Rohirric culture as well as Minas Tirith is excellent. The characters are true to Tolkein as I would have imagined them to be.

I had a few questions and that was if Eomer did not trust Lothiriel before because he thought she had cheated on him, then what trust would he have in her now when he finds out she faked her death? I might imagine once he gets to Dol Amroth he will be so happy to learn she is in fact alive, he might forgive her deception yet relationships are built on trust and your writing leaves only one conclusion, she lied about her death. Now a way out of that may be the reason she did it...but between couples, deception not a way to build any relationship.

I had another query but I cannot think of it at the moment...Will come to me later.

I so look forward to your next chapter...waiting on bated breath over here. Being a great fan of Eomer, I would love to see my man very happy with his new wife and Queen. In fact, I wish I were her...LOL!

Wonderful stories....please continue. Anon.

All the Best,

Arwen


Raven of RohanReviewed Chapter: 13 on 6/22/2004
I guess this chapter was aimed at keeping the story together, but it seems
a bit short:) I think I was expecting more depth in the description of Eomerīs
feelings. He must be really devastated. Is he really capabable of travelling?
Though I wonder about these things, Iīm definitely looking forward to the next
chapter.

eokatReviewed Chapter: 13 on 6/21/2004
Oh dear, I am glad that Mithlomi was innocent and not a...you know what. Poor Eomer, but methinks he will have to dance to everyones tune now before a reconcilliation. Super chapter. Eokat.

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 13 on 6/21/2004
Well, the truth comes out at last. Eomer is lucky he has Eowyn, Faramir, and Elessar to support him even when they disapprove of his behavior. That's a sign of real love, I think.

maya_arReviewed Chapter: 11 on 6/21/2004
Hmm: Much Ado About Nothing meets Middle Earth. It's an interesting premise to base a story on, and it's made for interesting reading. But I do think that combining the Beatrice/Hero roles for Lothiriel and Benedict/Claudio for Eomer has weakened the structure of the story. For one thing, the characters are so widely divergent that it takes away from from their plausibility. Secondly, the extreme immaturity of Claudio's behaviour in the play makes him the least admirable character in it. Even Don John had a sort of dignity in his venality: "I had rather be a canker in a hedge than a rose in his grace,", etc. The events as they play out in _Much Ado_ lead to a very less satisfying love story for Hero and Claudio- the couple who did not truly know each other, and failed each other at the first test. Does anyone really believe they had ever felt anything greater than infatuation, by the end?
Grafting this couple's behaviour on to Eomer and Lothiriel has not helped the characters, in my opinion. On the other hand, I have strong fellings about the original play, so perhaps you should discount my feelings a bit on that account.
I do understand the need to introduce conflict between the characters at this stage; but perhaps this could be managed without reducing Eomer and Lothiriel to the adolescent irrationality that Shakespeare's characters displayed?
On a related note, the sudden introduction of a villain was incongruous. Some earlier hints and background development would add to the dramatic tension.
best wishes,
Maya



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