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| The Prince and The Shipwright by Dragon | 42 Review(s) |
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| Eruviluieth | Reviewed Chapter: 17 on 12/12/2004 |
| I've been very much enjoying this and your other stories. I hadn't considered the lives of the Silmarillion elves until this, but I'm finding them fascinating, especially in your hands. Please do continue. Author Reply: Hello! Thanks for the review and I'm so glad you're enjoying the stories! I have fun writing them! I always found the Silmarillion really tough going, until I began scribbling about them - somehow I find that if I can picture them eating breakfast or going sledging then I can remember which name they are! Dragon | |
| eRose | Reviewed Chapter: 17 on 12/12/2004 |
| What a wonderful tale - so well visualized. The sensitive child and the awkward bachelor. One has empathy for both. I am enjoying it so much. Author Reply: Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying the story - it's one of my favourites to write and I have so many random little bitties for it! Writing Cirdan is fun! He's so splendidly out of his depth! | |
| siorah | Reviewed Chapter: 17 on 12/11/2004 |
| Wonderful Story! Please continue Author Reply: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you like it! | |
| kate | Reviewed Chapter: 17 on 12/11/2004 |
| this is a good story. please continue on it. however, i am curious as to if you could allow some scenes of when he is a teenager to allow to see if all the problems of a young child scared and confused in a new place are solved. Author Reply: Hey Kate! Thanks for the review! I do write teenager Ereinion in some other stories (check my profile) - Storm Cloud, and A New Beginning in particular. Most are solved but some, like his refusal to wear cloaks and need for a father remain. Dragon | |
| Mum's the Word | Reviewed Chapter: 17 on 12/11/2004 |
| Well done again, Dragon! I'm responding to two chapters at once: "Ranlhach" shows some new dimensions of Cirdan -- his kindness, which he struggles so hard to hide, and his fear of children. If only Sauron knew this weakness, he'd gather all the toddlers in Arda and foist them on Cirdan -- easily defeating the mighty Lord of the Havens! Seriously, we can only hope that Cirdan learns soon how to parent elflings; there's a reason young ones need guidance. Ranlhach himself is wise beyond his years and very comfortable with children; I hope we see more of him in your story. As for "A Bad Day," it just makes us want more than ever to gather little Ereinion up and take him home. He's so young and miserable and trying so hard to be grown up and defend himself. He can be happy and well-behaved, and he is bright; the adults just need to learn which buttons to push. So glad to see your update! Author Reply: Hello! Thanks for reviewing! Cirdan does try very hard to avoid appearing kind - I think he thinks that it's part of his duty to be kind to anyone who needs it, and thus gets embarrassed if anyone thinks he is kind or knows of his kindness. The comment about toddlers made me giggle. It would be a mighty foe indeed and poor Cirdan might just sail off west! I think he's glad he's got Ereinion instead, who is really a very odd child. Ranlhach will keep popping up throughout the story - making sure Ereinion is fed, looked after and so on. I just think they're not sure which buttons to push, especially when all Ereinion wants is his Naneth and Adar! Dragon P.S. My checkup this week went really well! | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 17 on 12/11/2004 |
| "Please review. I have know way of knowing if its worth updating if you don’t" Sure it is! I love this story! the way you manage to show the abyss between the child's point of view, and the adults'.. I mean... It is not difficult to keep a child happy, it only takes a bit of dedication and surely a bit of empathy... which both the librarian and Cirdan seem to be lacking... But then... they're learning too...and I'm sure Cirdan will grow to really love the elfling... it's just a matter of time (and Ereinion surviving the meantime!) Poor child, he must feel so utterly alone and discomfited by this alien world, he can only hold on to memories... I felt like crying when he was rembering the things he would do with his grandfather and that horrible librarian said they had not taken care of him.... I hope Cirdan understands this is not a matter of tantrums and discipline but about a lonely and disoriented child... Wow. I hope he´ll soon adjust to the havens! And please, do keep on! (no matter how long it takes) ;-) Author Reply: Cirdan is learning indeed (and if Ereinion does survive in the meantime I'm sure they'll eventually do very well together) - he's fortunately not a thick elf, so he should pick up the basics quickly. And once Ereinion is a little more confident, he'll have no problem directing Cirdan over what he "should" be doing. I think Cirdan does understand somewhat. Or in any case, he knew Ereinion's grandfather and can understand how much Ereinion misses him! I'm sorry updates take so long (I do feel guilty!) - I'm in college most of the time, and I never write fanfic (except bitties on paper) whilst in college because it would be too distracting (and fun)! Thanks for reviewing! | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 17 on 12/11/2004 |
| Poor little elfling. The only one with a smidgen of empathy is that young healer whose name escapes me! The librarian expects him to turn up, frail and stressed and immediately start learning using a script he has explained is alien and be able to show knowledge about things from a different region and know the stories he would have taught him! Elves clearly do not spend enough time either as or with children. Cirdan, at least, has the excuse of not having been brought up - what's the librarian's excuse? I'm quite impressed with Ereinion's strength of mind. Just as well really. He'll need that determination. More please. Author Reply: Hello! I don't think the librarian, like so many adults, can really understand how alien and incomprehensible different handwriting can look, especially coupled with the inevitable regional dialects, to a child who is learning to read and write. I think the librarian is just somewhat... well... he was chosen by Cirdan for his crustiness, shall we say. I think he was expecting an older child, who would be more of the essay writing variety than the picture-book kind. And there never have been children in Cirdan's house... and if he had no siblings, perhaps... Ereinion is a stubborn little brat. I like writing him! Dragon | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 17 on 12/11/2004 |
| Oh my goodness. Poor baby. I love the contrast between the adults' point of view (which is not totally unreasonable, just not particularly perceptive) and the child's. Ereinion is just so lost. I feel terrible for him. Author Reply: Hello! Thanks for reviewing! I think Ereinion just can't understand the adults' opinions, and they are just baffled by him. I think Cirdan is even baffled that elflings come in such small sizes. He'll learn. They all will! Dragon | |
| Kitt of Lindon | Reviewed Chapter: 15 on 9/28/2004 |
| Well, Cirdan, you were being needlessly cruel and heartless. Hmm, in Ereinion's place, I probably would have fainted. Poor elfling... as if a visit to the healer's is not bad enough! 'The Shipwright did not seem to be a kissing sort of person. He had even grown that scratchy beard to scare people away.' I loved that! I'll have to add it to my favorite quote list or something. No matter how bad the healer's place is, hopefully they can get Ereinion well! Author Reply: *nods* I can't imagine anything as heartless as sending anyone that small in to see the doctor alone... awww! Ereinion will get better, it'll just take a while, and a lot of milk and cuddling. | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 15 on 9/27/2004 |
| Oh gods! it is really hard to keep up with you!!!! specially when one is new to all this thing.... why do you update in bunches? (so many wonderful stories, and so little time!) I´m getting mad keeping track, just because I really enjoy what you write! seriously.. now forgive the question, is a rethoric one but have you got children? if so they have to be very special.. I mean, it is amazing how clearly you see through their psychology and their reactions, and the simple way they look at the world, though it is us the adults who always make things difficult!!!! Amazing, and so lovely they are..( children in your stories, I mean..:)) But then, I am reviewing th Shipwright and the Prince.... I ran into your story..( and into this archive and into fanfiction world in general ) not long ago (maybe last january?) and I have been around since then ( not that much but slowly getting "hooked"). This is one of my first reviews ever, and I do not know what I am supposed to say.. except that I very much like what you are doing. Giving Gil-galad a background is something I really like. In my personal AU (only inside my head! mind you) he is Fingon´s son, Fingolfín´s grandson and Finwe´s great grandson.. this line of ancestry meaning he is last in a line of caring, serving and fair kings who understood that honor was bound to duty and that protecting their people was first to every other consideration. I think that the editorial decision made by Cristopher Tolkien was a most fortunate one, for In my opinion it gives Gil -galad a more solid, dramatic personality and also a sense of fate that so perfectly suits his personal story. I remember when I first red the silmarillion, those simple words "but his young son Ereinion he sent to the havens" really moved me, for it was striking to think that Fingon, recently deprived from his beloved father, with his brother "on the run" and never showing up to help his kin, should send away his only son, and most probably a child at that time.. it only added to "the Valiant"´s legend in my eye. Since that, I longed to read more of that young NOldorin Prince, the son of a kinslayer sent to foster in the land of the teleri.. Wow! I think it must have been hard for the child at the beggining. So I must saya that you are reflecting it so well ( in fact I find that some parts of your story are so heart wrenching!) that I´m hooked to the story. The challenge is..How far do you intend to go? I´m loving the amount of detail, and I can almost see him, his expresions, his puzzlement and the ups and downs of a child´s humour in such a situation, with their ability to be distracted by something this moment and then depressed by small details the next.( the bath part was.. splendid! I have a little nephew who loves a special pyjamas and one day he was suppossed to be sleeping at my home, he made me drove back to his, only to pick up that very special pyjama.. so I could not help laughing out just guessing the shipwright´s expression!!) I mean.. Would you care to keep on until.. let us say.. the Prince becomes King and so you should change the title? (I´m joking) All this simply to say that I think you have a very personal approach and I very much enjoying it. Just one thing. shouldn´t the kid be thinking of his Ata and Amme rather than Ada and Nanna? ( stupid question I know!! but then I thought he would learn and speak Quenya at home. although he probably would have also learnt Sindarin too.. but.. I think at such young age he would still unconsciously refer to his parents in Quenya..) Plese do keep on... everything, but Valar! I cannot track you! Perelleth Author Reply: Hello! Thanks for that lovely long review! I'm going to continue for a while yet - perhaps until Ereinion and Cirdan reach some sort of understanding. But Ereinion's story is continued in many of my other scribblings (and some Fingon and Fingolfin too). I think I have one baby Ereinion, two small Ereinion, two very-new-King Ereinion, and he's in AVTI quite a bit. I don't have children yet either (I'm twenty). I think the Silmarillion descent for Gil-galad as son of Fingon suits him best too - very brave Kings, who are fair and just, and meet gruesome ends at the hands of terrible foes whilst trying to save the world! Dragon | |