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| Along Came A Spider by Jay of Lasgalen | 113 Review(s) |
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| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: Epilogue on 3/5/2005 |
| Wonderful epilogue. I forgot that you had promised this. I love the talk with Glorfindel and the description of hearing Namo. I particularly love the line about 'that's the second time you turned away.' I like little things like that and the character's discovery of their meaning. And the last line. You should be ashamed of yourself! :) What a terrible joke! :) Very nicely done to litten the mood at the last for us. Great story Jay. Author Reply: Elrohir and Glorfindel have shared a unique experience, so I thought it natural that Elrohir would want to talk of it. Namo did not confuse the twins, of course - but Elrohir will not realise his meaning for another 100-odd years. I'm so glad I put that last line in - I nearly didn't! | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: Epilogue on 3/5/2005 |
| Oh pain! Bad pun! No warning given! Pain! I enjoyed this epilogue,Jay. I particularly liked the talk with Glorfindel, of course. I was struck by his description of his death as a coming home. Author Reply: Do you think it needs a pun warning? I'm sorry, I couldn't resist it ;) I wanted to make Námo and the Halls sound very welcoming, to make it all the harder for Elrohir to decide not to go with him. Glorfindel didn't have a choice, of course - but who else could Elrohir talk to about this? Thanks, Daw. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: Epilogue on 3/5/2005 |
| 'Finding Námo', indeed! What an ending! Glorfindel would understand rather better than most, wouldn't he? And I take it Elrohir still doesn't know that he practically didn't survive his birth. It's good to see everyone back home safe and sound. I hope the twins give their poor family and friends a few weeks off before they next drive them to despair. (Although you don't need to!) Author Reply: *grin* I couldn't resist it! Who better that Glorfindel to talk to about this? And although I've written the scene where Elrohir finds out what happened when he was born (in the epilogue to Two By Two), it doesn't happen for another 100-odd years, so at this stage he doesn't know, and wonders what Námo meant. I think the family deserve a little peace and quiet now - my next story is when the twins are around 15, and Elrohir makes a surprising discovery. It shouldn't be as angsty as this tale! Thanks for the review, Bodkin! | |
| Dot | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 1/24/2005 |
| Ah, yay! I was only thinking about this yesterday and hoping that your muse hadn’t wandered off and abandoned you. But here you are! I really liked the opening scene between the two brothers. Only with each other could they really be so unafraid to say what they’re thinking. I really feel for Elrohir’s frustration, especially as a lot of it stems from knowing that he’s irritable but being unable to pull himself out of it. But it must be just as frustrating for Elladan to watch him wear himself out just because he doesn’t want to feel like an invalid. Oh well, Elrohir is just trapped in a vicious circle at the moment and needs something to pull him out of it – luckily there’s a race on the horizon! Yeah, poor Thalion. It was actually good to see Elrohir feel a little guilty about it because it shows that, as Elladan says, frightening off young healers just isn’t like him. If it had been Calmacil it would probably have barely registered with him because I imagine he’s seen it all before but I’d hate to think Thalion might be reconsidering his calling in life! “Of course I will. You are too impetuous; you do not think through your moves. Besides, I am simply better than you.” Uh-huh. He was asking for trouble with that statement. The only thing is, losing to Elladan was probably more effective than anything else in persuading Elrohir that he was weary enough to rest. *sigh* Stubborn, stubborn males. I loved the banter between Elladan and Legolas and you created a wonderful sense of the excitement and amusement in the air. I just adore how you bring the horses to life too and give them very distinct characters! LOL at the tree practically handing Legolas the cloth! The next time Elladan might consider racing against him in a big field… I’m still smiling at Thranduil, Elrond and even Celebrían all taking part in the wagering and particularly at poor Legolas, who could be walking funny for a while! “Forgive me, your majesty, for besmirching the honour of Lasgalen and the House of Oropher. The Noldor used a fiendish torture device known as a saddle to defeat me. I throw myself on your mercy.” LOL. Well said. Actually, what I like most about that is that it really shows how friendly the relations are between everyone present or there is no way he’d have said that. And what joy to see Elrohir so relaxed and free of pain and exhaustion. You’ve brought him a long way in this story and I’m so happy to see him recovered, and to see Elladan able to release his worry. “Remember today, little brother. Today is a good day.” That’s familiar ;-) Very fitting, though. What a wonderful story. I’m looking forward to the epilogue. Where’s Arwen again? Sorry, I’ve forgotten if I know where she is… She could probably do with some reassurance. I bet the twins will be glad to get home too and hopefully we get to see more interaction between them ;-) You write everything incredibly well but I think capturing the relationship between Elladan and Elrohir is your forte. I really enjoyed this :-) Author Reply: I'm glad that you think that the relationship between the twins is a strength. It's what I like writing most of all. They know each other so well, they don't need to pretend - and they know prety much what the other's thinking, anyway. Elrohir is still a little snappy and impatient (and distracted) but he is gttign beter quickly. The race was just what he needed to take his mind off things, and to get him out into the forest. The 'Today is a good day,' quote was perfect. I just had to work it into this chapter somehow! | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 1/24/2005 |
| “Say nothing,” he warned. Elladan spread his hands defensively. “I was not going to!” he protested. “I was not going to query the wisdom of venturing to the stables. I was not going to mention that you were only allowed out of bed for the first time yesterday, or that the meal last night was the first time you had eaten in days. I was not going to say –” How not to say anything!!! Well - losing at chess. That's enough to convince Elrohir that he hasn't quite recovered yet. I would have thought that if the horse's spine hasn't interfered with reproductive function, then a saddle wouldn't. On the other hand the calves would find those stirrup leathers pinch rather. The trees might co-operate more with Legolas, but I would think that Elrohir's horse might be more willing to run for his twin than Elladan's for Legolas. But competitiveness comes into it, I suppose. I'm amused that Elladan didn't think his naneth would bet on him! Author Reply: Elladan knows very well how *not* to say things, doesn't he? But poor Elrohir, he still isn't right, and he knows it :( I confess to knowing little about horses, especially the pros and cons of riding with or without a saddle. I just thought that riding with a saddle for the first time would be rather painful for a male, especially the pommel. It's rather touching that the twins didn't think their naneth would gamble, isn't it?? | |
| Faith | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 1/24/2005 |
| Bravo! that was great! love love love it! wonderful fic....absolutly wonderful..i love it...this fic rocks! you rock! rock on sister! :D Faith, the slightly obssessed Fangirl | |
| Faith | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 1/24/2005 |
| LOVE IT LOVE IT!! bravo! this fic rocks!:) Faith the Slightly Obssessed Fangirl Author Reply: *grin* You like it? I'm glad. | |
| Kalima | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 1/24/2005 |
| Well, NOW I can go and get something done. Thanks for the story. I'll be back. K | |
| Kalima | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/24/2005 |
| See? See? See why I wait until stories are done? What if I had to stop here with the dying? Argh! Now I have to read on! I wasn't supposed to read the second chapter at all, but I have no willpower. K Author Reply: Dying? Do you really think I'd let Elrohir die? He's my favourite twin; I couldn't kill him! (Besides, he appears in many of my other storiwes, set later than this.) Author Reply: Dying? Do you really think I'd let Elrohir die? He's my favourite twin; I couldn't kill him! (Besides, he appears in many of my other stories, set later than this.) | |
| Kalima | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/24/2005 |