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| A Midsummer Night's Dream by Jay of Lasgalen | 78 Review(s) |
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| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 3/6/2006 |
| Dramatic chapter, Jay. It looks like Elladan's visions are very useful here, even though it takes him a while to realize that. Thank goodness for Glorfindel. And I laughed at the forester who belatedly remembered to say "my lord." Elrohir comes across as very brave. Author Reply: Thank you! When Elladan hears the full story, he'll realise that it was his warning that saved Elrohir and Aradan. Hopefully he'll feel less useless about the visions then. I'm glad you liked the forester! He made me smile as I added that. | |
| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 3/6/2006 |
| Oh, good. Everyone got out. I figured Elrohir would be safe -- he's a smart cookie and he listens to his brother -- but to have both Elves and both horses out is an added bonus. Whenever Elrond shows up, he can turn his full attention to the kids instead of having to deal with the dead. The stable's a complete loss, but that's not important right now. Author Reply: I knew from the start that no-one would die - Aradan is the sort of character I'd like to use again, so I couldn't kill him! After the zoo fire, I couldn't kill any of the horses, either. There are injuries that need treating, but nothing too severe. They were lucky - things could have been far worse, and it's thanks to Elladan's warning that they weren't. Yes, the stable's gone - but it can be rebuilt. | |
| Lyn | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 3/6/2006 |
| Excellent! I have no suggestions for improving this chapter! I am particularly pleased at the realistic portrayal of the fire, Elrohir's resourcefulness, and the cold water treatment of his burned hands. Details of the scene, characterizations and motives, animal behavior, even barn construction---outstanding! Thank you. | |
| Lyn | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 3/6/2006 |
| Excellent! I have no suggestions for improving this chapter! I am particularly pleased at the realistic portrayal of the fire, Elrohir's resourcefulness, and the cold water treatment of his burned hands. Details of the scene, characterizations and motives, animal behavior, even barn construction---outstanding! Thank you. Author Reply: Thank you! I hope the details were convincing - I want to make readers feel the heat and smoke. As I've never been in a fire (thank God!), and know little about horses, most of this was guesswork. Water in a horse trough may not be the ideal treatment for burns, but its all they've got at the moment. | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 3/6/2006 |
| That reaction of anger when the danger is past is well done - amazing how the range of emotions can be run in such a short time - adrenaline driven fear and action, then despair, then a second burst of adrenaline, then relief mixed with anger, and finally, at the end, there is just exhaustion. Now that Elrohir's adrenaline has passed, he will see how hurt he might really be. Hopefully Elladan will see the vision did aid them - much as Galadriel speaks about her mirror. The information may aid you, but the knowledge is of what is or maybe, and foresight is a poor thing to base decisions on. Author Reply: I thought Elladan's anger towards Elrohir would be a realistic response. Relief can do odd things to us. Elrohir, too, is now beginning to feel the pain of his burnt hands, which he didn't even notice at the time. When Elrohir explains how he used Elladan's vision and warning to save him and Aradan, Elladan is going to feel a lot better about his visions - they're not useless after all. I suppose it's another source of information to help in making decisions, but not the only factor. | |
| Faye | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 3/5/2006 |
| That's awful about the giraffes. This was wonderfully written as always, but Elrohir is still in the stable. Author Reply: I'm working on getting Elrohir out as soon as possible! The next chapter is virtually finished, so I'll post asap. Poor giraffes - it's made me determined not to hurt the horses in this story! | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 3/5/2006 |
| Sorry I am so late in reviewing... what! adn these elves are still inside that barn! oh my! The ladder won't last that long! Poor horses and poor Elladan! now I hope that you are letting us know soon waht's going on under the debris! ! Author Reply: I've very nearly finished the next chapter, so it will be posted soon, I promise! The chapter will be mostly Elrohir's POV. | |
| pipinheart | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 2/26/2006 |
| Love it! Elrohir has his hands full, but it seems the fire is faster than they can work. Aradan is more worried about the horses that won't follow than the fallen roof, unfortunatly sometimes you can't rescue all. They seemed trapped and a cliffhanger to boot... Elladan is not going to be happy with his brother Please update soon... Author Reply: No, Elladan really isn't happy with Elrohir now - he warned him about what would happen, Elrohir went charging into the stable anyway - and now it's collapsed. Poor Elladan is having somevery bad moments. Elrohir has his own problems right now - but I promise to resolve the cliffhanger in the next chapter. | |
| Ellie | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 2/22/2006 |
| I was wondering what was taking Elrohir so long in there. I wonder what has happened to him now. Excellent chapter as always. Cna't wait for more! Sorry to hear about the giraffe family. So very sad indeed. Author Reply: Although elves have a 'way with all good beasts' - and Elrohir and Aradan more than most - even they find it hard work to calm a dozen or so terrified horses and point them in the right direction to escape :( It would have been sad about the giraffes at any time - but more so because of the calf. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 2/21/2006 |
| Those poor giraffes! Fire is a terribly relentless opponent. I doubt those two horses are going to make it out of this experience either. Even if they are brought out alive, the shock to their systems and the smoke inhalation are likely to prove too much for them. Elrohir and Aradan, though. GET THEM OUT! Elrohir's ladder trick might just give them an extra moment - and they know that running through the flame will bring them to help. But they really have no time left. Save them now! Author Reply: It will be a little while before I get them out - but I promise I will. Well, Elrohir, anyway. Elrohir's ladder trick may just save them all - thanks to Elladan's foresight. The visions can be useful at times. I've decided that in this case, the story will no longer mirror life. The horses will escape - somehow. | |