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| Stirring Rings by Larner | 315 Review(s) |
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| Imrahil | Reviewed Chapter: 21 on 8/27/2016 |
| This chapter is perhaps the worst I have read in regards to historical inaccuracies and a lack of understanding of Tolken's works and themes. "They apparently intend to cross the River Anduin tomorrow and to roll through the Pelennor to the White City itself, where without the King it is expected Pelendur will give over the rule of Gondor to them." Minas Anor was the greatest fortress in all of Gondor. Anarion raised that seven tiered city on the knee of Mount Mindolluin and encircled it with a Great Wall of unbreakable black stone. How in the world would the unorganized rabble of the Wainriders ever breach that fortress. How would they even cross the Anduin? And why, under any circumstances would the Steward of Gondor surrender his City, nay his entire realm to a horde of barbarians? it took centuries of unceasing warfare, a might host led by the Lord of the Nazgul and the immense mental pressure of Sauron himself for Denethor to lose his mind and give up. Why would Pelendur, with no such pressures even think of surrendering Minas Anor to a horde of savages that, by all record, had no possible way of break into the White City. I did like reading about Earnil and his glorious triumph at the Battle of the Camp. But I have to express some dismay at your assumption that the Men of Gondor needed Gandalf's help at so many major battles. There is no evidence that Gandalf aided the South Kingdom in battle prior to the War of the Ring. Earnil was a proud and mighty Lord of Gondor and he would need no aid from a Wizard to achieved victory. Indeed, Gandalf paid little attention to Gondor until the line of Kings failed and they became embroiled in a hopeless struggle against Mordor. I don't mean to be overly harsh, but your writing seems to denigrate the Men of Gondor to a great degree, and in my opinion does a disservice to the wise and mighty Dunedain of the South. Tolkien wrote them as wise and mighty Men, and in their days of might they would have been even more so. Your portrayal of the Gondor Men does not seem to agree with the Professor's depiction of the Dunedain. Author Reply: Gondor is obviously your land within Middle-earth, even as the Shire is my favorite place to revisit in my writing. Yes, Minas Tirith is amongst the greatest citadels ever within Tolkien's lands; but Minas Ithil has already fallen to the Enemy's people, and despair tends to make for despairing predictions. Earnil cannot be certain as to how Pelendur will react to the news of the deaths of Ondoher and his sons. As for Gandalf helping--if he was present, why should he not offer such assistance as he could? Certainly with his knowledge and experience with making fireworks he could easily have assisted to present distractions to terrorize the Wainriders' horses and many of their men as well. Earnil is not denigrated by accepting such assistance as offered by the Grey Wizard--he is simply an astute leader using all assets made available to him. I doubt that the land of Gondor and its leaders need our championship one way or the other. I simply have my story to tell and am telling it in my way. | |
| Imrahil | Reviewed Chapter: 20 on 8/27/2016 |
| Another interesting chapter, but again there were some parts to this instalment that seem to just jump out as historically inaccurate and not truly part of Tolkien's themes. " “‘Eärendur, however, fell victim to the idea that his great kingdom had grown to the extent that it should be able to withstand the forces of the Enemy even if it should be divided further." Earendur died in TA 860,, and it was upon his death that Arnor broke into three rival provinces, Arthedain, Cardooan and Rhudaur. There is no evidence that Earendur willingly divided his realm, but rather that his three sons all wished to rule. But it is your mention of the Enemy in that sentence that just takes me out of the story. In TA 860 the Enemy had been defeated and formless for 860 years. There is no evidence that the Dunedain knew that Sauron's spirit survived. Given that Earendur's own ancestor took the Ring without any fear, the Men of Arnor and Gondor would have no reason to think that the Enemy still existed. To quote Saruman, "The Enemy is defeated. He can never return." Of course, we the reader know better, but in-universe, the Dunedian in TA 860 had no reason to think that their Great Enemy still existed. It is little details like this that really matter in writing, especially when you are wiring in a prea-established universe that has official canon. Now many fanfics do not bother with canon and I would not critique those at all. But your tale makes an attempt to follow canon, but misses many times along the way. It is because of this that I feel compelled to point out the shortcomings. For example, you refer to the White City as Minas Tirith. Yet the White City was called Minas Anor until TA 2002' when its sister city of Minas Ithil fell, and became Minas Morgul, the Tower of Sorcery. Only then did the King of Gondor rename his capital as the Tower of the Guard. To a learned Tolkien fan these things just stick out like sore thumbs. Author Reply: The Enemy at that time within the northern kingdom would most likely be seen as the Witch-king of Angmar, or perhaps the land of Angmar itself. And although there is nothing definite indicating that Earendur split Arnor as was done, neither is there anything definite to indicate his sons did so after his death. Here I believe myself free to choose the former idea as anyone else might choose the latter. Also, although Sauron himself was now unable to take upon himself any pleasing shape since the downfall of Numenor and was believed to be totally conquered, yet still his influence does appear to have been sensed by at least some of his former enemies as he began making Oropher's former stronghold into Dol Guldur. Perhaps no one believed that what they sensed was Sauron himself, but always there is a vacuum created when one great leader falls, at which time another seeks to take his place. Sauron was believed utterly defeated, but apparently Khamul was intent on stepping into his shoes as Sauron had done with those of Morgoth. So, I let later custom in naming the White City take precedence? Definitely an error, and I will seek it out to correct it when I ought to have called it Minas Anor. I write mostly late third- and early fourth-age stories, in which of course, it is called Minas Tirith. Thank you for bringing this to my attention. | |
| Imrahil | Reviewed Chapter: 19 on 8/27/2016 |
| This is an interesting tale and you clearly have a strong knowledge of the long history of Arda. But some parts of this take directly contradicts the work of the Professor. For we know of Gandalf's travels that "his main province was "The North", and within it above all the North-west, Lindon, Eriador, and the Vales of Anduin." For the same reason, Gandalf did had little to do with Gondor. "Gondor attracted his attention less, for the same reason that made it more interesting to Saruman: it was a centre of knowledge and power. Its rulers by ancestry and all their traditions were irrevocably opposed to Sauron, certainly politically: their realm arose as a threat to him, and continued to exist only in so far and so long as his threat to them could be resisted by armed force. Gandalf could do little to guide their proud rulers or to instruct them, and it was only in the decay of their power, when they were ennobled by courage and steadfastness in what seemed a losing cause, that he began to be deeply concerned with them." And yet, you have Gandalf travel to Gondor and advise it's Kings many times. Do you not realize that what you ar writing directly contradicts the writings of Professor Tolkien? Moreover the way you write the interactions between Gandalf and the various Kings of the South-Kingdom does a great disservice to the wise and mighty Heirs of Anarion. The story is of course yours to write and you do write it well. But in the larger canon of Arda, Gandalf the Grey never advised the Kings of Gondor. His attention only fell to them in the last years of the Third Age. Your timing on the Fall of Minas Ithil is also incorrect. Ithilien remained under the control of proud Gondor until the very end. The Wainriders never took it. And Minas Ithil only fell to the Ringwraiths after a brutal two year siege, nearly a hundred years after the date you have it at. There are other historical and character inconsistencies, but those are the ones that stood out to me. I do enjoy reading this tale, but I feel compelled to offer some literary criticism, in what I hope is a constructive manner. Better attention to the work written by the Professor is something that all lotr fanfic writers should aspire to. Author Reply: How frequent is "frequent" in your view, Imrahil? We know that Gandalf went about the lands of the north, and that in the south he was granted a name considered derisive, indicating they saw him as a spy on their lands. Do you equate that southern land with Gondor? I'd rather suspected it was Umbar and/or Harad that called him by that name. Gandalf indicated within LOTR that he was familiar with Gondor and the northern lands, and that he rarely went south of Gondor and never into the east where Sauron's influence was greatest. His title of Mithrandir, or the Grey Pilgrim, was originally bestowed upon him by the Elves, and he was known by that name throughout Gondor, apparently. He was considered by all to be under the leadership of Saruman, and as you have pointed out, Saruman was far more interested and involved in the doings of Gondor than was Gandalf. If Gandalf had need to consult with Saruman as his superior, therefore, where would he go to do so? The Master has made it clear that save when he entered Middle-earh, Saruman rarely went north of the White Mountains, and spent perhaps as much time investigating matters in the eastern lands as he did in Gondor or Rhovanion--if he spent much time at all within the lands of the vale of Anduin north of Rauros. Therefore, it was most likely that Gandalf made his personal reports within Gondor itself, and probably within Minas Tirith. And if Saruman was once again absent on one of his own journeys when Gandalf arrived, it is most likely that Gandalf would remain within whatever lodgings were made available to the two of them until Saruman returned or Gandalf would be drawn away northward upon his own journeys and perceived duties. During such times as he did remain within Gondor, then I believe that he would at least make token visits with whosoever was King at the time, and offer his own advice, whether solicited or not. I am sorry about my errors regarding Minas Ithil, but have decided to leave them for now. The city has not been described as heavily populated since the death of Isildur, and the last struggles over sovereignty of the city would have been hard for the lords of Gondor to countenance, I am certain. Thank you for your criticism, for I do appreciate criticism when it is indeed constructive. And thank you also for the compliments. I do appreciate them! | |
| NotACat | Reviewed Chapter: 39 on 4/23/2015 |
| Yikes, what a place to have to stop reading! This is a fascinating story, which I have much enjoyed. I shall now have to read all of your others to see how they fit together while I await in hope a fresh chapter of this one ;-) Author Reply: This story is taking a bit longer than I'd hoped to finish, so please bear with me! I hope to have the next chapter finished soon, although I'm working on chapters to two other stories at the moment. So glad you enjoy this one--it has been close to my heart for many years, and I want so to get to the end of it, which has literally been finished for at least five years! Heh! | |
| Sunny | Reviewed Chapter: 39 on 11/22/2014 |
| Well, you certainly pulled no punches with this chapter, Larner! Rape leaves its mark on the mind and body of the survivor, but often being forced to carry the result of the rape to term is another form of rape. I consider Celebrían'sreactions in this chapter quite realistic, more so since she is an Elf. And for her, having to kill her companion, even though it would have been necessary, and even a blessing, would have just been an agonizing cherry on top a cake of horror and nightmares. Hm. Perhaps you could write a fic about Celebrían meeting a reembodied Celestië in Aman? Depending of how much time you see Elves need to spend in Mandos, I guess meeting her again would either help in Celebrían's healing, or finalizing it. :slips bunny into a crowded hutch: ;-) Author Reply: Hmm. May do just that someday, Sunny! And I just DON'T need any more plotbunnies! Tallis keeps sending me so many, and it's impossible to do all of them, I fear. Heh! As for rape--have seen some friends who've gone through absolute agony merely remembering being raped. It would have been a horrible dilemma for Elrond to be faced with, too, both ethically as a healer and as a husband to a rape victim. Thanks so very much! | |
| Dreamflower | Reviewed Chapter: 39 on 11/21/2014 |
| Oh, what a heartbreaking chapter! Author Reply: I know. Thanks so, Dreamflower. | |
| Raksha The Demon | Reviewed Chapter: 38 on 7/13/2014 |
| Celebrian's capture and captivity are so tragic; but I hope you will write of her rescue and the aftermath. Interesting motivation; that Sauron wanted a female elf to turn into an orc and breed from - ick. I always thought that the taking of Celebrian, and doubtless the deaths of many of her party, would not have been random. Good to see this story updated. Author Reply: This story is being updated, if slowly. And I, too, have always suspected that there was a specific motive behind the abduction of Celebrian in particular. I suspect that Sauron wanted to turn high-status individuals into orcs both for breeding purposes as well as to cause particular distress to his greatest enemies. Elrond's wife and daughter to Galadriel and Celeborn--I am certain that Celebrian was a particular target for capture, and if he could have taken Arwen as well, I'm certain he'd have done so! Thank you so! | |
| Kitt Otter | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 2/25/2014 |
| I got distracted for a few weeks, and I am glad to finally return to this! Intense foreshadowing, Bilbiolo's promise of service to Gandalf. It sends shivers down my spine. :) His part in the story ended so quickly, but what a big part indeed! I feel sad for Saruman. He's totally isolated himself. Galadriel, Celeborn, Thranduil, everyone, they all see through his act. And Gandalf is so kind-hearted he still wants to think the best of him. It's so true to Gandalf's character, I love it. Author Reply: I see somehow I missed responding to this. I've always thought that Gandalf would have been drawn to the Hobbits from the moment they came west of the mountains, and that other races would find them intriguing and surprising in their abilities and willingness to offer themselves for others. And Saruman always bore within himself the seeds of his own destruction. I hope in time you read more. Thank you so for the feedback you've given me! | |
| Dreamflower | Reviewed Chapter: 37 on 2/4/2014 |
| Oh, I love this glimpse of early Rohan! And it's great to see Gandalf observing this legendary encounter! Author Reply: And I found I loved writing this encounter, too. At least Gandalf, having watched Eorl win Felarof, knew how to go about it with Shadowfax! Thanks so! | |
| Dreamflower | Reviewed Chapter: 36 on 2/4/2014 |
| Things are grim and getting grimmer still! Author Reply: Yes, they are, unfortunately. Things will soon be as bad as they can get. | |