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| A Pony's Tale by Kara's Aunty | 43 Review(s) |
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| grmpy | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 1/25/2009 |
| Oh my heavens, did I have a laugh over this chapter. I love Bill the pony's way of looking at life. Poor, poor Legolas. Ahh the smelly one, has become the flowery sented one, he can give tips to Bill, about females. Author Reply: Hello gmpy, Glad you're enjoying Bill's wee story! It's nice to try to look at things from his perspective! And imagining how he would refer to non-humans is a hoot. Thanks for R & R-ing, M :) | |
| Ainariel | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 1/25/2009 |
| Oh my...What can I say - I've laughed so hard tears are (still) rolling! Poor little pony, pondering "...Bill-bits gently floating to the ground..." You know you are not feeling well when you consider your own demise! I love Bill's perspective here - decidely more 'pony' than 'horse' (and I've spend a fair amount of time with both) You may not be an equine expert, but you have captured the essense of these mighty little creatures! (I worked with a pony gelding when I was in college that just knew he was the biggest, baddest horse in the barn - Nevermind the fact that he could almost walk UNDER the belly of the School's largest horse!) I do have bit of con crit, though - (two bits, actually). 1)Horses can't burp - they're physically unable. (This is the main reason bloat/colic can be deadly.) Although I must add that it did bring a chuckle! (The stone that started the avalanche, so to speak...) 2)It seems odd that the elf from the stable would let Bill loose in the field, knowing he was bloated. That can be very dangerous - if the horse/pony were to roll, their intestines can shift and become blocked (this is what can cause death). "Twisted gut' has been a known equine malady for quite a long time - I would think it would be known in ME at this time (by the Elves anyway, if not by Men) Of course, hand walking poor Bill wouldn't allow for the 'race' with Asfaloth, and would ruin the end of the chapter... Whatever you used to bribe your mojo worked - I am thoroughly enjoying this story, and look forward to more! Author Reply: Hello Anariel, Oh I loved every last word of your splendid review - it was almost as long as my chapter! Thanks very much. Yes Bill is working-class equine, so to speak. The salt of the earth and highly underrated and his continued differences of opinions with the aristocratic Asfaloth have been a joy to write. I'm thrilled you think I've captured 'pony' essence; that's a huge compliment - especially as I've never worked with a horse/pony in my life (I did 'ride' a horse once, but nearly suffered heart failure when it broke into a trot, as opposed to the extremely slow walk I had been getting used to). So I had a feeling my limited experience would come back to bite my posterior when I wrote that he 'butped'; I wasn't sure if equine actually do, but went with it anyway. You have me there, m'dear! As for the colic & exercise, well, I DID put a note at the top of the chapter stating I was not an expert and had extrapolated info from various websites and that my interpretation may be flawed, so I was a bit surprised to see the crit on that... But thanks for the more concise explanation of the issue: trying to marry various points of info into some semblance of order on a foreign subject was very draining, so you've been a great help as I can apply this to future fics ;) I'm chuffed to bits (very thrilled) that you're enjoying the fic and am going to start on Gimli's pov straight away! Thanks for R & R-ing, M ;) | |
| shirebound | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 1/25/2009 |
| ...a little adventure with a dashing stranger... You show her what she's been missing, Bill! Err, once you're completely healthy again, that is. I'm very glad Aragorn soothed him enough to 'let go', but oh dear, poor... was that Legolas?? Author Reply: Hello Shirebound, Yup, it was Legolas. Sorry for the confusion (I thought I'd left enough tips to indicate it was him, because Gimli wouldn't really squabble with any other elf, but you're not the only person who's asked that, so perhaps I didn't). I just didn't know how else Bill would describe him, not knowing his name. Mea culpa! And yes, Bill with a fancy woman, eh? I thought it was only fair - the equine's never seem to get a love interest! Thanks for R & R-ing. M ;) | |
| Sunny | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 1/25/2009 |
| That Bill is a very ... basic ... sort of creature, isn't he? Feeding and f.. ahem, _reproduction_ is what occupies him - when he is not suffering the consequences of eating "red hay". :-) But oh! The ending of this chapter! If someone had just managed to sneak a camera in there to immortalize the sight of Legolas being ... fertilized! ROFLMAO Author Reply: Hello Sunny, Bill is indeed a 'basic' chap, he only wants a good home, good food and a good master. I don't know if he's occupied with reproduction so much as having a mate (in the manner humans may wish a spouse). He's a decent lad after all, he was prepared to 'marry' her (ahem). Of course, he could just be a randy old perv trying to make up for lost time... Poor Legolas, eh? I had the ending of the chapter in my head before I knew how I was going to lead the story to that point, so filling the other 2000 or so words above the last 4 sentences were the most difficult part. Worth it though! And I can't tell you how much I'm looking forward to writing Gimli's POV next, (I was laughing out loud at work today thinking of it and got some very questionable looks from colleagues who thought I'd lost it - though perhaps I have...). Anyway, glad you liked this chapter and I'm off to write the next! Thanks for R & R-ing, M ;) | |
| Celeritas | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 1/25/2009 |
| Okay, correct me if I read this wrong: Legolas got covered in horsepuke? That, my friend, is hysterical. And Bill trying to impress an elven mare was quite funny, too! From a writer's pov, I especially liked you trying to describe how elven horse medicine would work, from the pony's viewpoint. Author Reply: Hello Celeritas, Actually, he got blasted in colicky wind (and a fair amount of soft poo). Poor sod. But at least the Gimmy knows he's not the only one to suffer at the pony's (ahem) hands. Can you imagine the grief he's been getting from Legoals since he found out about the incident two days earlier? The next chapter will lay it out for you! Researching all those websites for suitable info was a nightmare, let me tell you. But it all worked out in the end (except for Legolas). See you, M ;) | |
| 6336 | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/20/2009 |
| Loved the Legolas/Gimli feud! I wonder if Elrond is ever tempted to not include them in the Fellowship, two more or less would not have made that much differance? Or he could have picked two other representatives of the Free Peoples! Gimli needs to spend more time with horses, or learn which ends to stay away from! More please, Lynda Author Reply: Hello again 6336 (Lynda), Perhaps he could have replaced them...but it wouldn't have been the same without our favourite sparring duo! But at least Gimli will have a healthy respect for ponies (and horses) after his encounter with Bill. He'll stay away from all ends now... Thanks again for R & R-ing, M ;) | |
| 6336 | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/20/2009 |
| Oh dear, poor Bill, just when he has landed in pony heaven he thinks he is about to become a 'Gimmie' snack! How could he ever think that Sam would sell him, considering his only experiance with men is Bill Ferny you can kind of understand his reaction though! I do hope Gimli and his beard survive! Now I know why he kept his helmet on all the time! More please, Lynda Author Reply: Hello 6336 (Lynda), A Gimmy Snack! LOL. Reminds me of a Scooby snack. I think that Gimli's beard will survive his pony encounter - it's his head of hair he should be worried about... Thanks for R & R-ing, M ;) | |
| Antane | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/19/2009 |
| Poor Gimli and poor Bill! Love Sam trying to appeal to Gimli's 'hobbit sense' :) and his love for Bill. But this was just not a good combination of already annoyed dwarf and misunderstanding pony and poor Sam caught in the middle. Gimli definitely does need a 'time out' and he and Bill both need time to calm down. Maybe one of the Elves can talk to the pony while Sam is there stroking him, so Bill can understand it all. Don't like Gimli swearing by Aule who the Dwarves call Mahal anyway - I hear too much swearing at work already. Looking forward to more and more of Aragon and Sam vs. the Ring. Round 2 coming up! Namarie, God bless, Your imp :) Author Reply: Hello Antane, Don't worry about Gimli and...well, everyone else, actually. They'll all come to a good enough understanding to undertake a successful quest and save the world, becoming massive friends in the process! Great, eh? How I love Tolkien! And Aule/Mahal...thanks for the tip, although, I don't really mind the error on that too much. Dwarven culture is not my specialty and I only want people to get the general idea, which I think I've achieved (I hope). Swearing to Aule - er, he is a fictional diety you know, m'dear ;) You have me curious though - do you work with a squad of paratroopers? Only you mentioned you hear enough swearing at work... Am v. interested (and eager) to hear your response on that (goes into wild fantasy about working with a squad of cursing paratroopers). In case you're confused at this, over here we have an expression; 'swears like a trooper' - used to denote someone with a fondness for bad language! See you later, dear. M ;) | |
| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/19/2009 |
| Poor Gimli! He's rather done himself in, going in there scared and belligerent to begin with! Heh! Author Reply: Hello Larner, you know, I was just finishing the reply to your last review, when my Inbox pinged again, and what do you know> It was from you! Yes, poor Gimli indeed. Perhaps he should have taken a 'time out' - like we do with naughty nursery school children. Can you imagine it? Elrond making him sit on a step for a minut of each year of his ife until he'd learned to control his temper and reflect on his behaviour? Actually, Legolas could do with some of that too - except his great age would have him sitting on the steps for the lifespan of your average mortal! Thanks for R & R-ing, M :) | |
| Andrea | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/19/2009 |
| The elf, what was his name, Legless, ... ROTFL!!! That's prizeless! Now I understand why things turned from bad to worse! Gimli was already in a very foul mood when he entered the stables. But is there even a word to describe his mood after Bill tasted the dwarf's hair? I'm sure you know one, otherwise you would create it ;-) Like Dreamflower I cannot imagine how these two will get along with each other. So, I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter! Author Reply: Hello Andrea, Gimli was in a bit of a stinker before he entered the stalls (hardly his favourite destination), but he did try to calm himself, for the gardener's sake. Pity he hadn't reckoned with a paranoid pony... I just suggested (in my reply) to Larner, that it may be a good idea if they swapped minds for 5 minutes, so they could understand each other's POV better. Actually, perhaps Gimli should try that with Legless too... Thanks again for showing you appreciation by R & R-ing, M ;) | |