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The Eagle on the Ramparts  by Canafinwe 263 Review(s)
shireboundReviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/26/2015
This is so realistic, and well written. Another interesting tale!

Author Reply: Thank you! I am trying for realism, all right. ;-)

someoneReviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/26/2015
It is both strange and almost hilarious to see Thorongil locked up and forgotten in a guard room. Had the lieutenant's captain already gone home and they had to wait until morning? Not exactly the welcome he would have gotten if he had taken Thengel's gifts! And it must be frustating to have people looking down at him for the lack of his father's name.

The ring of Barahir would have raised a lot of questions, and it definitely would not have been mistaken for a Rohirric souvenir. Hopefully the liutenant was not observant enough to notice that Thorongil didn't wear it earlier in the evening.

How did Thorongil come to learn Sindarin near the Misty Mountains, indeed! The ordinary people of Gondor seem to be a little ignorant, as there are several Elven realms and the ruins of Arnor there. Bregol's attempts at showing off with his Sindarin and writing skills were funny, he had no way of knowing where Thorongil had learnt both!

Author Reply: I won't deny there's an element of humour there. Given the culture of Gondor, contempt for the fatherless is all too understandable, but no less pleasant to endure. I grinned at the idea of the Ring of Barahir as a souvenir of Rohan!

Yes, the ordinary folk of Gondor know little of the Elven realms. There are legends about Lóthlorien and its perils, but the existence of Imladris is not generally known: Boromir knew of the first, but had to be told of the second by Denethor. More significantly (since Boromir is not exactly an armchair lore master), Faramir did not recognise the name from the vision. I'm glad Bregold's attempts to show off were funny!

AnneReviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/26/2015
I wonderful start. I am already on the edge of my seat waiting to see how he will be received and what his experiences will be as he becomes one of Gondor's finest.

His interrogation answers were so informative! He has being vague down to an art. Although I was very surprised that he let the guard assume he was a bastard. He could have defended his mother's honor without giving away his father's name. It might not have been believed but still. I am not sure I can picture Aragorn willing to take his dissembling as far as to insinuate dishonor to his mother in this way. But I am still eagerly waiting to read your next chapter. It is a great story.

Author Reply: Thank you so much for the feedback! I love constructive comments, as I'm sure I"ve said before.

In this case, my reasoning is as follows: far from disregarding his mother's honour, Thorongil is treating the remark as beneath contempt. There is nothing to be gained in arguing with an ignorant man, and the fact that Bregold leaps immediately to this conclusion shows just how small-minded he is. Furthermore, Aragorn is confident enough in his worth and Gilraen's that he does not need to leap to her defence as one less secure in himself might do. He will try to dispel the notion that he was born out of wedlock later, but only to those whose esteem he values. As you'll see when we get there, denial of the charge of illegitimacy raises *much* more difficult questions.

Thanks again! I'm thrilled you're enjoying the story.

LoriReviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/26/2015
One day when Thorongil had become the loved and famous Captain, these lowly soldiers and lieutenant are going to look back on this day with chagrin and perhaps wish they had made a better impression on Thorongil when they had their chance. I can't wait to read more.

Author Reply: Yup! So it begins... ;-)

DoggieGirlReviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/26/2015
Such detail. That lieutenant doesn't have a clue at the depth of mysteries that Thronogil holds does he. I love how you continue to show Aragorn understanding the suspiciousness, the locked door, and the lack of concern about leaving him there until morning, but still be bothered by it. He is a commander but it still is frustrating. I liked his plan to secret his ring away. It will probably work for now. But better find a hiding place for it before others more knowledgeable and observant might take notice.

Author Reply: No, he certainly doesn't know how deep the mysteries run! I'm glad you like that balance between understanding and frustration. Thank you as always!

AromeneReviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/26/2015
New story! How exciting. And one of my favourite 'missing from the book' tales. I always found this period of Aragorn's history, in his wanderings in the south, so very fascinating, by how he managed it, and also how others saw him.

Author Reply: Oh, it's fascinating, all right! Irresistible, in fact. Tolkien knew what he was doing. I'm so glad you're excited! I hope it meets expectations.

someoneReviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/26/2015
Seeing this story begun and the other one updated yesterday made me happy, and I'm looking forward to this story!

Interesting idea that Thorongil would not come to Gondor as a lord only to prevent benefiting from the Rohirrim, but to test his steward. And the idea that Thorongil knew about the shipbuilding of Umbar from seeing it at Amon Hen is clever, too.

It seems that Denethor's ideas about keeping the Numenoreans "pure" are rather extreme. He could make the life of that poor Easterling soldier difficult, just because of his own prejudices. He is going to meet his match soon; I wonder if Denethor's status as one of the few nearly true Numenoreans will make it difficult for him to accept a nameless wanderer, who is even more like the kings of old... Perhaps it is not only Ecthelion's favor that is the reason for the dislike between Denethor and Thorongil, but that Thorongil shook the foundations of Denethor's opinions by being a man of Westernesse outside of Gondor.

Author Reply: Yay! Glad to know it's so eagerly met. I'm glad you like that idea regarding Thorongil's motives. As for Umbar... yup. Something had to spark his interest in watching it.

Lovely to read your speculations about Denethor! I can't say much, but it was great to read. Thank you!

UTfrogReviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/25/2015
Excellent beginning. I am looking forward to this story. Thank you.

Author Reply: Yay! So glad! And you're very welcome. ;-)

Eirinn LeighReviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/25/2015
Great start! I've been wanting to hear more from you about this part of his travels. Will we get to hear more about the Easterling and his new bride?

Author Reply: Oh, thank you! And yes, there'll be more about that couple. Not lightly do I name characters. ;-)

quodamatReviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/25/2015
Hi, Canafinwe. I was so excited to see the start of this new story! "A Long and Weary Way" has done much to entertain and, in a way, comfort me during a difficult season.

This story looks to be off to a great start! As usual, your writing is rich and expressive without becoming too flowery, and you show great psychological insight. I especially appreciated the way you portrayed the tension involved in knowingly giving up or concealing one's status, but still struggling with the inevitable consequences of being a 'nobody.' I also thought your introduction of Ecthelion and Denethor was brilliantly done. The disagreement over Jamon's marriage was, I thought, very telling - not only with regard to the two characters, but also as a sort of parable about two different approaches to ruling a nation. Knowing that Aragorn is more a man after Ecthelion's own heart gives me a great sense of optimism about how he'll eventually rule: as a king who sees the healing virtue in generosity, and the value of unity in diversity.

Thanks so much for sharing your writing! It is much appreciated.

Author Reply: That's wonderful to hear: that my story was helpful in a hard time. Sometimes a little escapism is a wondrous thing! I know Tolkien thought so.

It's great to know my language isn't too flowery! I came across some *extremely* purple prose in a commercial novel last week, and it left me cringing. I'd love to avoid that without losing the evocation of this wondrous world.

Thank you for your insights into the conversation about Jamon! It's very true: Aragorn is going to be a very open-minded ruler. We see it in his very first week as King.

Lovely feedback: you spoil me!

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