Reviews (146)

Lyn · 23 April 2006 · Chapter 6: Discoveries

It's been a long while since I had soap in my eyes, but as I recall it stung tremendously and the only relief came from buckets of clean fresh water to rinse my eyes. Otherwise, your story was quite delightful and your style of writing very easy to read!

Idhreniel · 23 April 2006 · Chapter 8: Expectations--Part One

Terrible cliff!!! Please don't kill me with curiosity!!! Great, great to read from you again Elliska! I needed to have some good reading and your fic provided me with that. I love this chapter. My favorite line definetelly was Thranduil muttering to himself that those elfings, sons of probably more creepy elves, were stupid - to say in few words!!! He is just the best. I like the way he and Lindomiel raise Legolas. Thank you for the update! Hugs,

Bodkin · 23 April 2006 · Chapter 8: Expectations--Part One

Are you sure 'Galithil' doesn't mean 'own worst enemy'? Legolas picks up instantly on facial expression and body language and knows exactly when to hang his head and when to be sincere. Genuinely, too. He's just responsive. Galithil, au contraire, is responsive in a totally different way - he responds by challenging. He is brave, though - and caring and willing to risk himself for others. It wouldn't surprise me particularly if he were to jump down from his tree to try to save the elleth. Thranduil does have a point about Legolas not listening to conversations - after all, he never knows quite what topic will be absorbing the adults who surround him. I'm glad the elflings are behaving sensibly - even if it is causing Galithil much pain. I hope he hasn't lifted Dolgailon's knife. It would be a very stupid thing to do. The food shortage is worrying - but at least it gave the elflings a chance to get out in the forest and pick some nice healthy greens. Noruil and Anastor are a complete blot, though - hardly surprising when you see the way their mothers behave. Two families that could do with some intensive rehabilitation there! And isn't it just typical that the very moment that the mothers let the elflings out of sight something goes wrong!

daw the minstrel · 23 April 2006 · Chapter 8: Expectations--Part One

A cliff hanger ending? Tsk, tsk, Elliska! What's gotten into you? I was happy to see this chapter and enjoyed reading it. Sounds like Legolas is gradually learning some lessons about things like eavesdropping anyway, but I despair of Galithil. I notice he didn't actually say he didn't have his brother's knife.

perelleth · 23 April 2006 · Chapter 8: Expectations--Part One

Hey! What happened there! How you dare! *Growls boarlike* Poor Galithil. I cannot help wincing every time he has an interaction with a member of his family. It is funny, how Araduronn can be mistaking the approach, when he is likely to have been the same bundle of energy and apparent rebelliousness in his childhood, but then, that was so long ago... ;-) And Dolgailon is not being more successful... Experience is the only way with such children, but at times it is so hard to allow them room for their own mistakes. Galithil is now bottling up so much that he is likely to explode in the worst manner. Poor thing. I smiled when they began running free, and annoying the girls for the sake of it... very springy. And poor Legolas, "spying" on his parents and then being caught, and lectured by adar even if protected by nana.. LOL! Thranduil sounded truly, coldly, almost scaringly annoyed! I wonder what he would say if he knew that the children had been spying his audience with the dwarf! Educating a bunch of elflings is not a minor task! Now, seriously, you are not intending to let us here for too long, are you? Is Dolgailon knife appearing here? I am shuddering at the very thought! Good chapter elliska!

Nilmandra · 23 April 2006 · Chapter 8: Expectations--Part One

There are terrible punishments for authors who leave us hanging, not knowing if an INNOCENT child is about to die. Unfortunately, the boar might be thinking she looks like a good meal next to aspargus too. What a lesson for her brother to learn.. .and all the children. I liked this chapter. Your dialogue flowed very naturally - I think you do well writing conflict! The children are believable.. Galithil especially with his orneriness. I did finish your earlier story (still need to write a review) so I have a better understanding of who all these characters are.. and yeah, a bit headstrong runs in that one's blood. His parents must despair that he will grow up, while reminding themselves that Oropher at least made it to adulthood. Legolas is trying hard at diplomacy even at this young age. Lalfien and Eregdeth should learn a little of that. I suspect Lindomiel will sorely regret allowing the children to race ahead. :(

perelleth · 28 February 2006 · Chapter 7: Ents and Elven Princes

Great to see an update! I was wondering about this tale for long, yet i know that life is unconsiderately busy.. as you well know..( and what could I say about the time it took me to review?) I loved the subject. Legolas' reaction about the ents in LOTR("Every Elf has heard the tale of old onodrim...") always made me wonder about waht songs and tales and fables elflings would learn in their childhood.. and this "lesson" was very real...pity the peaceful moment ended with the discussion about silvan and sindar and Denethor's deeds. NOruil and Anastor are quite conmptemtuous and a bit prejudiced, apart form top mischief doers... shall galithil escape their provocations ? I loved the exchange between Galithil and Dolgailon. Having such a grown up and exemplarly behaved elf as an elder brother is making life unduly difficult for poor Galithil.His father has not been trained in rearing a mischievous elfling, and surely Araduronn has long forgotten his own mischief and restlessness as a chid... I can only simpathize with this bundle of energy...will he be ok in the end, please, pretty please? :-)

The Karenator · 23 February 2006 · Chapter 7: Ents and Elven Princes

I'm so sorry I've fallen behind in reviewing. Lots of stuff going on around this part of the Southern Realm. But you can be assured I'm always thrilled to see your update and read it as quickly as I can. The Ents are a wonderful angle in this since we know Legolas was most interested in them a few...hundred years later. I got a chuckle out of Legolas wondering why his grandfather had passed up such an opportunity as going to see the ents when his brother went. To a kid I guess this was a version of: What were you thinking? Call me suspicious, but I think I'd watch the little whelps, Anastor and Noruil. They've got the look of trouble that goes beyond childhood misadventures. Makes you wonder what they're hearing at home. But as I've said a million times before, you're the master of political intrigue. I suspect you of setting us up all the time! Delighted by it though...even if I'm looking in the wrong corner. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Terrific chapter. Cute elflings and intrigue. What more could a girl want? Karen

Dot · 22 February 2006 · Chapter 7: Ents and Elven Princes

I'm back... The opening made me smile. Dolgailon and Galithil need to just be brothers more often! The elflings are so sweet when they’re trying to wheedle someone into rescuing them from their punishment ;-) They must be cracking up by now. And a month is definitely long enough for them to have forgotten that it was their own fault… I was surprised Dolgailon admitted to them the reason he was kept in the capital, even if it was mostly to see their reaction – but that reaction was well worth it! Of course, Galithil shouldn’t have lost his temper like that – that child needs to learn some patience! – but I can understand his frustration and really, I’d be inclined to agree that Dolgailon should have at least not kept reminding him that it was his own fault. Although I wouldn’t be quite so brave as Arthiel in stirring things between Thranduil and Amglaur! And it seems Amglaur gets play daeradar! I love the image of him with elflings tucked under his arms :-) The lesson was fascinating. I particularly loved the story of the little Hobbit lass. It was poignant and sweet. It just struck me how old Tulus is! I don’t think I’d thought about that before… And I was intrigued by the story of young Denethor and the Ents. I can see why it would sound like a fable, but there’s a lot seems to have come out of it. I’d love to know more about what happened to Denethor. Of course, the Ents and Entwives fascinate me. I’m not sure I’d have the patience to have a conversation with one, though! It sounds like Legolas and his friends are very well educated. And taught to question and discuss too, which is very important. But I guess that the opinions and experiences and prejudices of the parents still come through at this age. At least Aewen seemed open to learning but it’s fairly clear that Anastor and Noruil’s parents are telling them things that they shouldn’t, or at least aren’t preventing them from hearing treasonous opinions. When are those elflings (and their parents!) going to get their comeuppance?! Still, though, every one of the elflings have impressed me with their debating skills at such a young age. And Rodonon will encourage that even more if he makes them look at sides other than their parents’ viewpoints. Poor things, more homework! Legolas seems to be displaying more of his curiosity about the world outside the one he knows. Wait until Thranduil hears what Amglaur has just promised – he may have to find something to distract his excited son for now! But I don’t think Legolas ever gets there. Hmm, it could just be a case of someone putting his foot down or relations between Mirkwood and Lothlorien not being friendly enough by the time Legolas would be old enough to go there. I hope you’re not going to do something to Amglaur! As always, I’m looking forward to more. And do we get to hear these songs?? :-)

Dot · 21 February 2006 · Chapter 7: Ents and Elven Princes

Elliska, I haven't abandoned your wonderful story! I seem to be playing catch-up a bit this week so I wanted to stop by and let you know I'm enjoying it immensely and will be back in the next few days with a review. I hope work is easing up on you a bit and all is well - I miss seeing you around! :-)

lwarren · 20 February 2006 · Chapter 7: Ents and Elven Princes

I came into school early this morning just to catch up on my reading and saw this update - you could hear my screech of joy down the hall! :-) I was SO glad to see this chapter - the last I had read had Legolas and Co. permanently grounded - underground! LOL And still there, I see! This was a great chapter, full of interesting little asides and interactions. I liked the lecture Dolgalion received from his wife about standing up for his little brother...I suppose being so much older, he is completely in the dark about little things like that! The lesson under the trees was another very interesting event - with all manner is fascinating people showing up, from the trouble-making elf-turkeys via the moonbow incident to Tulus. I really like Tulus - I hope he can eventually prove himself to those around him. I really liked how you tied the story of the Ents to Legolas' interest in later years...and Amglaur's promise to take him to Lothlorien takes on ominous tones when one recalls that Legolas had never been there before when the Fellowship finally makes it there...especially as I don't see Amglaur as an elf to make promises lightly. *covers eyes* I don't want to know...no, don't tell me...ok, tell me...but make it quick!!! (how's that for back-door begging for the next chapter?) LOL All in all, what a great read, elliska! linda

Bodkin · 20 February 2006 · Chapter 7: Ents and Elven Princes

I don't think their king would be too surprised to be disobeyed by people that disobeyed the gods. I've not long since written something quite similar to this sentiment! Only I can't remember where - might be a Reflection, but it might be the story due out on March 25th. It's frustrating me enough that I might have to go and look!

Idhreniel · 19 February 2006 · Chapter 7: Ents and Elven Princes

Ah Elliska, it is so good to read from you again! I love this chapter and the tales. Really, Arthiel seems the sister those elflings don't have but need! Nice reaction from Amglaur towards Tulus. I like Tulus, but his son's betral does't come off my mind when I read his name. And those kind of evil elfings... I know they must have some relation to the creepy elves; I just wonder which creepy elevs they are related to. As always it was a delightful reading. I love Amglaur as a dearadar. He seems so cute somehow. Hugs and take care!!!

Nilmandra · 19 February 2006 · Chapter 7: Ents and Elven Princes

Oh, this was delightful! I have to say I was most intrigued by Dolgalion's admission of poor judgment leading him to be reassigned home until he could be trusted again. Have you told this story yet? The stories to the elflings was a wonderful way of showing the Silvan/Sindar differences and perspective. A hero to one group is a traitor to another; a real experience a memory treasured, to others only a fable. I have to say I love their tutor's plans to make it a debate. This is how kids really learn to think, when they are taught to approach an issue from all sides. They will learn that the black and white world actually has many areas of gray. So, Noruil and Anastor have not yet been caught, then? Like Legolas, Galithil, Brethil and company, I am looking forward to that!

French Pony · 19 February 2006 · Chapter 7: Ents and Elven Princes

It looks like the punishment has become a waiting game. Who will tire of their punishment first? Will the Elflings wilt with the boredom of confinement and agree to demonstrate responsible behavior? Or will the grownups crack under the strain of having the confined Elflings always underfoot and whining to go out and finally throw them outside just to put some distance between them? Time will tell. . . One has to wonder just who Thranduil thought he was punishing. I like the idea of learning history by telling stories under the trees. I was especially intrigued by the story of the Hobbits, especially since, by the time Bilbo arrives, Thranduil doesn't appear to have much of a clue about him. He ought to have been out under the trees that day. And the Ents! Now we know exactly which stories Legolas heard about them in his childhood that impressed him enough so that he mentioned them so many years later. Although, given his reaction to Lothlorien upon seeing it for the first time in Fellowship, I have a feeling that Amglaur has just made a promise that he'll be unable to keep. Knowing Amglaur, it's not like he'll just forget or never get around to it. This does not bode well.

Bodkin · 19 February 2006 · Chapter 7: Ents and Elven Princes

What a lovely story - I loved it from the moment two elflings invaded Dolgailon's bedroom until Legolas insisted firmly that his grandfather had made a promise to them. Fair warning, I think, from big brother that his punishment will never end unless Galathil accommodates himself rather better to its restrictions. (Nice to know that Dolgailon wasn't always perfect. He is so responsible.) And Arthiel's understanding of the female art of compromise - making the sentence more bearable by a little gentle tweaking. Not to mention putting ideas in Daeradar's head. Galathil is his own worst enemy, though. He's a ... rocket of a child. Very single-track-minded. Whereas Legolas is better at looking round him and responding to others. More empathy. (And, if Arhtiel's parents are still angry with them - or disappointed in them, perhaps he should think of a way of making amends.) I loved the story-telling. It is so interesting to see lots of points of view. I can see why Amglaur is suspicious of Tulus - boy must it take a long time to live down an error of judgement if you're an elf. But the really worrying characters are the Nasty Boys - Anastor and Noruil. Although, if Maidhien is more open-minded, there might be more hope for Anastor. They are just the kind of kids you wouldn't want your own little angels to get mixed up with. The debate on the relative trustworthiness of men and orcs was particularly interesting in that little Eirienil's intelligence and opinion are recognised as valid despite her youth. And I loved the discussion of Hobbits and Ents. And, it must it be so difficult to rule elves! Hats off to Thranduil - they're none of them happy to accept other people's decision if they don't mesh with their own! But Tulus is making a good impression (if not on Amglaur). Most enjoyable! I must go and read it again a few times - for all those subtle little nuances I've missed. I do love these characters (and hope for a happy outcome for Tulus. Although I'm not holding my breath.)

Jay of Lasgalen · 19 February 2006 · Chapter 7: Ents and Elven Princes

I seem to have missed a couple of updates of this story. I loved the two elflings hiding in the laundry baskets - they're lucky they didn't get emptied out into really hot water! The discovery of the hidden door was exciting - and I love the idea that there may be more, all over the palace. I can imagine Legolas and his friends searching for them all! I cannot believe the gall of the dwarf - first he's caught hunting, then the elves save his life, then he goes to Thranduil and demands compensation! What a nerve! I like the knife in Thranduil's boot - he may have his guards, but he's quite capable of defending himself :) In the last chapter, I really liked the tale of the lost elf prince and the Ent. You could expand it to show it from little Denethor's POV, because it would make a great story. Jay

daw the minstrel · 18 February 2006 · Chapter 7: Ents and Elven Princes

What an interesting lesson. I think elves would have learned a lot of their history and philosophy and so on in stories and songs like this. After all, their elders had loooong memories. I have to say that meeting an ent would drive me crazy. I'm so impatient, and they're---not.

J.G.E · 11 December 2005 · Chapter 6: Discoveries

Hee, hee, I so enjoyed this chapter, its so great to see it after a long wait but it was worth it. When you mentioned the dwarf I was thinking that you were already referring to the Hobbit, but I knew it couldn't be right because 1) Legolas was probably much older in the Hobbit and 2) none of the dwarves were killed, they all made it through Mirkwood. Its just that the dialogue between the dwarf and Thranduil was almost the same as in the book, but you confirmed my thoughts when you mentioned the name of the dwarf. Legolas almost got himself into trouble again for eavesdropping which I am glad he didn't otherwise he would've got into even more trouble, but now I bet that he will put that tunnel to his own good use if you get my drift, it will come in handy for spyng on his father which I have no doubt that he will do just that. I wonder when Marti is going to make her presence known, I am just dying for some action and some nail-biting moments.

perelleth · 10 December 2005 · Chapter 6: Discoveries

First, I'm sorry for the delay, these are particularly busy times...) Second, I'm so glad that you're feeling better, go you and take due care...! I must agree with Galithil that the dwarf was absolutely fascinating. Seen from the children's perspective, this stuborn dwarf's bold stand was even more impressing. I liked the way you pictured the whole scene, when the guards unsheathed their steels and Aradunnon's blade came to rest in the dwarf's throat...UNder his beard, I wonder? MASter dwarf must have feared then for his attributes! :-) And then when the adults were leaving the stronghold, the inmpression they caused in LEgolas was fascinating, and veyr insightful. And very well done, too! I could picture them, striding at the same pace, and everybody making way for the most powerful elves in the realm! NO wondr the children were impressed, too! Thranduil was really scary here... I loved how he handled the noisme dwarf! I would love to see a knife throwing contest between Amoneth and Thrnaduil! :-) NICe chapter elliska. I supose you're about to post another and I fear that it will be another week before I'm able to read it, but I'm looking forward to it!

Idhreniel · 9 December 2005 · Chapter 6: Discoveries

Hi, Elliska! This is Brazgirl with a new name... I love this chapter! What a convenient door they found. I was afraid Galithil would make himself seen by the dwarves of even by his ada. Thankfully they didn't... It was lovelly to read Thranduil melting his anger when he saw his little elfling. Even more when the boys went together to shoot!!! Lovely chapter. I like Galithil's innocence even more. Glad to hear you are better!!!

Dot · 6 December 2005 · Chapter 6: Discoveries

Oh Elliska, this was delightful! It sounds like those children will have no problem finding ways to amuse themselves after all. And I laughed aloud at what happened Legolas and Galithil in the palace laundry! I felt a bit sorry for the ellyth, though – can you imagine explaining to the king that you drowned his son and nephew in a vat of suds?! The funniest thing was Galithil suggesting that the laundress tell Thranduil and Aradunnon that the elflings should be allowed play outside. LOL. I just loved the whole idea of there being secret doors! As a child I was addicted to Enid Blyton books and they always found secret passageways and hidden places! Of course, it’s even better when there’s magic involved ;-) I must say, Legolas is very clever when it comes to hide and seek. And Berior trying to hide behind the tapestry is absolutely adorable!! I really like the way you’ve made the wall just ‘feel’ different where the door is hidden. So, as a matter of interest, can anyone open it or is it just Thranduil and his kin? It seems like a good way to flee from the Great Hall if need be. I almost jumped too when Galithil appeared! And the funniest line of the chapter has to be: ”Only you would find a secret door and then not go through it, Eirienil.” Hilarious. Poor Eirienil. It’s no use having a conscience and/or common sense around this lot. It seems a little risky expecting the tapestry to keep them hidden, judging by Berior’s efforts on the other side! But what an exciting scene they landed into. I do love Thranduil when he’s in a mood :-) And it’s fascinating to see how Legolas can read his father so easily. Thranduil is so clever, piecing together all the bits of information and realising what the dwarf is up to. That dwarf never stood a chance, the twit. Though, ok, I do feel a little sorry for him… Anyway, there was great tension – I was reading this under the desk at work and was totally engrossed in it! I like too the fact there’s a hint of respect between Thranduil and Durin coming across, despite what Narin and his buddies have done. I nearly keeled over when he threatened Thranduil! Holy crap. The way the elves immediately moved into action, so fluid and so dangerous and protecting the king at all costs, was just wonderful – a little scary but brilliant enough to give me a fangirlish moment of glee! “I wish Master Rodonon would teach us more about the world today and less about things that happened three Ages ago.” I thought that was a nice character moment for Legolas – it shows that even at a young age he’s curious about other people and events that are happening now, outside his home. Though they’re all probably a little too young to realise the importance of history and its effect on “the world today.” I’m still smiling at the image of Thranduil being so much in king-mode that even the elflings find themselves bowing to him! And the way Legolas can make his father’s mood lighten is so sweet. I notice Aradunnon was the only one who was immediately suspicious of his son :-/ But it was good to see them gang up against Thranduil! (But of course Thranduil won!) Galithil is so clever to get information from the parents without them realising why he had so many questions! I’m sure he’s exhibited a flair for that kind of thing before. It really suits his personality that he’s so fascinated by the dwarf in such an open and enthusiastic manner, while Legolas is more wary. There’ll be trouble, though, if he goes looking for more such interesting scenes. And secret doors. Ooh, I’m getting excited! :-)

Nilmandra · 5 December 2005 · Chapter 6: Discoveries

Yeah, I am glad you are feeling better! I love exploring! I always wanted to go search for hidden passageways and fake doors and all that. I always figured if I had enough money to build my own house, it would have some secret passages, bookcases that turned into another room, that kind of thing, just for fun. So I was gleefully along for the ride there. The child in me is glad they did not get caught eavesdropping, though the adult in me wishes they had, so that they didn't put themselves in danger. Yet danger is half the fun.... but if the dwarf had grabbed an elfling, that would be bad.... but then, that dwarf wasn't going to move with all those warriors there. So, no harm done, I guess and I can remain glad they got away. The fascinating thing about elves learning history is that people who were alive then can tell them, with perfect recall, what happened. And if elflings are led to delve into the history books, all the better.

daw the minstrel · 5 December 2005 · Chapter 6: Discoveries

I'm so glad you're getting better, Elliska. I cannot keep people safe if I am unaware of their presence or if they are not where I expect them to be.” Given where the kids were at the time, this made me laugh. This encounter certainly wouldn't make Legolas inclined to think highly of dwarves. Very cool moment when Legolas sees his father as king. And Galithil is unstoppable. Too bad.

Bodkin · 5 December 2005 · Chapter 6: Discoveries

Maybe a corral would be better as an elfling prison than the Stronghold - where there seems to be altogether too great a potential for them being where they shouldn't be, doing what they shouldn't do. Or a chain gang approach. . . Maybe not. Eirienil isn't confined, is she? Except in the sense that if all her little friends are required to stay indoors, she will be there too in order to have someone to play with. I can just imagine Galithil trying to make the most of that - and sending her off to do all sorts of things. Although she is a Hermione Grainger of an elfling and would refuse flatly to do things she thought were wrong. I love the start in the laundry - with the elflings swimming in the washing water (although I hope they dumped them in the rinse before releasing them). I can somehow see them heading back there on a hot day when no-one will take them to the river. And the Stronghold seems to be a lovely place for hide and seek. Legolas was very clever to spot the secret door - and Galithil was typically reckless to put his head under the tapestry to see just what was going on. His cousin is still letting him lead him astray though - if he only thought for a millisecond, Legolas would know that his adar would not have wanted him there listening to that conversation. And one of them is bound to drop something that he couldn't have heard legitimately. Taking them out to act as retrievers at the archery range will burn off some of their energy, though. And anything that makes them seek out the library willingly is good. It is interesting how information you have to find is so much more intriguing than that which your tutor is busy trying to insert in your head! I'm really looking forward to seeing where this goes! Although one thing is, I suspect, inevitable. Trouble will ensue.