Reviews (782)

TithenFeredir · 25 January 2006 · Chapter 40: Fragile

I am so happy to hear that your daughter is doing well! My thoughts and prayers continue for you both. In this chapter you have drawn an excellent picture of Legolas' courage. You show him enduring that time of waiting, anticipating the torment to come, his ultimate breakdown and the certaintly of a gruesome death. He is grieving, weakened and completely without hope, yet he plans his resistance and fights to keep his dignity, and there is no bravado in it. I think this is a fairly realistic depiction of how unglamorous and difficult real courage is. To apply it to Legolas in this way makes one sympathise with him all the more. The angst in this part feels very authentic and you do it without resorting to any graphic brutality. Wow. There needed to be some relief, though. I agree that it is too soon for Aragorn to return as much as we may want it, so Brina makes a good substitute. I'm hoping that she will have the remedy to Legolas' blindness. ...And there has to be some dissention from the people of the city for there to be a chance of success for our heroes, right? This story is so well done! Can't wait for the next! ~TF

Lindelea · 25 January 2006 · Chapter 39: Hope Fades

I read the last two chapters in the wrong order, having missed the update for this one. Sorry to hear about your daughter, but glad that she is doing better. I have little ones about her age. (If you'll email me her first name, we'll add her to our family's prayer list.) Legolas is brave. Of course. I do like Alun, and have the feeling he is a wild card in the mix that the baddies may not have taken into consideration. And Aragorn, of course, whom even the good guys think is out of the picture. Looking forward to more.

Lindelea · 25 January 2006 · Chapter 40: Fragile

I am glad to see this updated. I do like Koryon's grandmother. She is obviously no fool, and will help in any way she can. Thanks for the author's note on the timeline at the bottom. I am glad that you are considering Aragorn's situation in realistic rather than super-human terms. Perhaps he would be stronger than an average man, and perhaps he might recover faster, and have more endurance, but he is still capable of weariness and injury. (Even Gandalf was "already weary" when he faced the Balrog.) It is attention to such details (making it more "real") that draws this reader in.

White Wolf · 25 January 2006 · Chapter 40: Fragile

I loved the description of waiting. It was easy to picture all the times Legolas was forced to do it, when he'd much rather be in action. I'm glad that our dear elf has finally gotten some attention for all his physical hurts. I was wondering when someone would notice that he is blind. I'm not surprised it is the wily old healer. I'm interested in the tale she has to tell about elves. After your explanation, I understand why Aragorn hasn't shown up yet. I was wondering where that ranger was. He isn't going to be happy when he finds out what's been done to Legolas or why. I'm glad your daughter is doing well. I've been praying for her.

Mystwing · 24 January 2006 · Chapter 40: Fragile

I think that it is very believeable that people would not realize that Legolas is blind. People are very resourceful and can find ways to disguise disabilities or limitations they may face, and if others aren't looking for it, they may not realize. Ramhar and Malcovan seem to be more interested in seeing Legolas afraid and beaten down. When he turns his face or closes his eyes it may seem to reinforce the idea that he is cowering. That, added to shady lighting and Legolas' conscious effort to act as though he were still sighted seems very convincing to me. Anyway, I am so enjoying your story. And delighted to hear that your daughter is doing well. I look forward to the next chapter!

robinscat · 24 January 2006 · Chapter 40: Fragile

I am not one to make comments on an authors writing. I take it as it is given, but I do like to respond with how the story makes me feel. My heart leaped with joy followed by trepidition when I saw the update. I had to wait until I was alone to read it. I love to see you continue the story, but I have a dreadful feeling in the pit of my stomach. Your descriptions are so vivid and compelling. You draw on all the senses, I can feel the collar around Legolas' neck, the chaffing on his writst, I feel his hoplessness, his dread of the torture to come, the small spark of hope he receives from Alun. HOw will I react to your descriptions of the torture both mental and physical? I keep hoping, preying that this is the chapter where Aragorn comes to the rescue. Alas, it is not to be this time. But at least Legolas got a small respite. And yes, Aragorn is human and needed time to recover. Thank you for putting that in, cause many authors tend to make him a superman, which is not realistic. Recovery is over, Aragorn where are you! And I will tell you that the pictures I have painted from your story are starting to get a might bit depressing. LOL. I didn't think I could paint a dungeon. or a burning cottage, or the inside of a wooden box. I am eagerly awaiting, and dreading another chapter. Thank you for sharing your gift. Robin

Sadie · 24 January 2006 · Chapter 40: Fragile

I'm so glad you have updated. This is one of my favourite stories. I admire you a lot as a writer, because I can see that you think about what you are writing, you look around, look for possibilities... and the text becomes much clearer every new chapter. Sorry, I am from Brazil, so my English is horrible. But I need to say that to you, how much I appreciate your job, how a see you as a terrific writer! I am glad you share another chapter with us. Thanks Sadie

daw the minstrel · 24 January 2006 · Chapter 40: Fragile

So Legolas has two more allies. Good. I particularly liked the descriptions of how he had learned patient attentiveness.

Jay of Lasgalen · 24 January 2006 · Chapter 40: Fragile

I like Legolas's determination at the beginning of this chapter - that no matter what they do to him, he will resist for as long as he can, and feed them misinformation. He's realistic on what his chances will be, but not as despairing as before. Legolas's injuries continue to worry me. What is wrong with him that caused him to collapse like that? I'm glad he has another ally on his side - I like Brina. With her, Koryon and Alun, there may well be far more townspeople out there like them. Aragorn (when he does arrive!) may find more help than he expects. I think it's natural that she has spotted his blindness - she is a healer, after all! I'm glad your daughter is better. I laughed at your story about your blind classmate - it's odd how often in RL we get inspiration and the opportunity to research our fics.

Lamiel · 23 January 2006 · Chapter 40: Fragile

Now I'm as interested in hearing about your classmate as I am in Legolas' predicament. But I'll concentrate on fiction for now. I'm with Lisette on this one -- it's good to see Legolas drawing on his training and discipline as he prepares for what he knows is coming. And really his plans: knowing that he will have to speak, deciding when and how much and what to say, show more of his strength than the physical torture alone would do. And that little anecdote about Legolas hiding underwater and breathing through a reed when the evil men were nearby . . . goodness, what a plot bunny that launched! I was hoping to see a bit of Aragorn in this chapter, but I agree with your reasoning for holding off on the Ranger. His time will come soon enough. I hope the poor dear doesn't have too bad a headache when he takes on the city guard single-handed, that's all. For all Legolas' skill in concealing his blindness, it makes sense that a healer would notice. And if he tells her, will she be able to help him? Not now, that is clear, but perhaps in the end of the story. There's still that fragment near his spine . . . yes, I know that the blindness is not the main point of the story. But it is a factor, and you have set it up so that he might be healed in the end. Please let him be healed. Just think of the opportunities for Elf-worship, the joy and beauty when he regains his sight! It's good to have you back. I hope that real life gives many opportunities to continue your writing in the future.

Eruwestial · 23 January 2006 · Chapter 40: Fragile

HOORAY for your daughter!!! And thanks SO MUCH for yet another wonderful chapter. It made my night so very much better as I've a lot of work ahead of me tomorrow. I had no problem believing that folks missed Legolas's blindness, as we see what we expect to see. They were probably expecting an Elf to act differently anyway, so that would have explained away to them any oddities. It wouldn't occur to them that he'd be disabled, as they are so afraid of his abilities. How foolish to fear a blind Elf! Their own hubris would keep them from even considering the possibility, in my opinion. Again, I am SO glad to hear your daughter is doing well. HUGS and HAPPY DANCES for both of you. Eruwestial

French Pony · 23 January 2006 · Chapter 40: Fragile

Oh, I'm so glad to hear about your daughter. That must be such a weight lifting off your shoulders. I gather that she's not completely better, but is becoming so? In that case, I wish her the best of luck for more health. Legolas certainly has managed to find quite a brave little circle of friends. I get the feeling here that fewer and fewer people in the immediate area really believe that he had anything to do with this murder. If Ramhan and Malcovar can't fool the staff, they've got a problem. What the guard and the grandmother and Alun need to do is spread the word about this Elf. Clearly Ramhan's story does not hold much water, and if none of the villagers believe it, he'll be in a bad place. Which is just where we want him. The villagers are also very good at knowing what's been going on right outside of town. It's probably for the best that someone's been watching over Our Heroes all along, but it'll give Aragorn a stroke to discover that.

Mandy · 29 December 2005 · Chapter 24: Burnt Offerings

This is one of the funniest things I've ever read online. Many people try to be funny, very few make it. Thanks for making me cry! :)

ziggy · 27 December 2005 · Chapter 39: Hope Fades

I am rushing ahead here but obviously Legolas thinks the blindness needs to be revealed at a moment when there would be maximum coverage as it were- its no good telling one guard, he needs to wait until there are a LOT of people- at least some who will see that he could not have murdered anyone. BUT Yes! What is Ramhar thinknig? Of course he will be seen miles before he can attack- and of course its a distraction while Dol Guldur gets busy. (I love the way you have thought this out into a bigger picture than just what's in the immediate narrative)You've still got everyone puzzling over why he killed the Queen- and what MORE does he want- Thranduil must have done something pretty huge in Ramhar's eyes to warrant such revenge- although I suspect thatthe sorceror is behind all this and that Thranduil has, in fact, done little to deserve this thirst for revenge.( Irealise I really not reviewing but repeating what is in this chpater- jusat letting it all sort out in my head) That's what I like about this chapter- it just lets you mull it over a bit but keeping the mystery. WOnderful writing, utterly compelling and convincing. Yes- Aragorn really DOES need to get a move on! How long RAmhar will leave Legolas in the cell ? If he is serious about taking on Mirkwood- he will have to do something publicly to get the city on his side in a sense of righteous anger.OOer. PS: Very glad to hear things are easier for you.All the best.

Wantanelf · 14 December 2005 · Chapter 39: Hope Fades

Thanks for the update. I actually missed it until today. It was a nice surprise. I'm sorry I haven't reviewed more often. I've been with you since the beginning and have thoroughly enjoyed this story. I'm glad your daughter is improving and continues to do so. I have three daughters of my own so I understand that she must some first. Update when you can. Your fans will be patiently waiting to hear how Legolas will get out of this mess.

Socket · 7 December 2005 · Chapter 39: Hope Fades

First, I am glad to hear that your daughter's condition has improved. My thoughts are with you and your family. Yes, I think it's time that you woke up Aragorn! I eagerly await Legolas's realizing that he was mistaken about who died in the fire. And to say nothing about Legolas desparately needing help! It was great to see Alun reappear, but obviously it's going to take more than Alun's help to get Legolas out of his current dilemma. I eagerly await the next installment. Please keep up all apprised of your daughter's condition, and I know that all your fans look forward to hearing about her continued improvement.

Bev · 3 December 2005 · Chapter 39: Hope Fades

Yeeeeppeeee!!! A new chapter...before Christmas. Read this when you posted it but I'm a little behind in my review...*pant, pant*. OK...my heart is breaking for my beloved Elf. When they put him in that new cell and left him with only that stinking bucket...I cheered when he gave it a kick but I sunk with him when he fell to his knees. Another disturbing dream for him....it seems his will to live is fading in that he thinks he has lost Aragorn. He berates himself, believing he is the cause...this is when I could just give him a good shake...(and then a big hug). Thank goodness Alun was able to get to him before they found him. Yes!! now would be a good time for Aragorn to show up....somewhere....to Alun. Maybe Alun could get word to Legolas that he was ok. I know it would renew his strength...cosssss...I have a feeling he is going to need it to endure what is coming. You seem to love to push him to his limits....cause he has very high limits. A little off topic...please forgive...but I have been reading your other story...The Healer. To me...this is the way Legolas should be....very strong, very quick, very,very,brave, able to endure the most horrific torture......and heartbreakingly beautiful. Love, love, love this chapter...can't wait for the next one. *shuffle, shuffle,from one foot to the other*. So glad things are looking up a little...hope you and your family have a Very Merry Christmas. Take care. Peace Bev

nedhieth · 2 December 2005 · Chapter 39: Hope Fades

Hey, I believe I've left a review before, but i'm not sure. I am a notorious lurker reader, so don't count me for any regualarity! When i saw that chapter 39 was up, I started reading it, and then found out I'd missed the last chapter. So this will be a sort of combination review for 38 and 39. Things keep on getting worse and worse for Legolas! I used to think Tarnan and Alun were going to somehow play apart in a rescue, or communication, or something, but now tragedy has befallen them both, and I am at lost on how Legolas is going to get out! However, I know he and Aragorn will have to get of this northern land sometimes, because this story is not labeled AU. My brain is also jumping trying to figure out how Legolas's eyes will be healed. That is one thing I love about this story, all the mystery and complications in the plot! It always keep my interest up. I almost cried sometime in the past 2 chapters! Your story gets me very emotionally involved, so much good angst, drama, friendship, and guilt! That is one of my top requirements for a story, and you meet it fully! I hope your daughter gets better, I cannot imagine having an anxiety disorder, worry is one of the worst feelings in the world, it won't let you alone, and has you in fear over what can't be helped. It must be very worrisome for you as as a parent to have your daughter suffering like that, therefore, instead of my usual update soon, I say no pressure! May life give you joy (everyone needs it), Nedhieth

Ireth · 2 December 2005 · Chapter 39: Hope Fades

I was very pleased to find a new update on your story! I think it is brilliant. I am sorry to hear about your daughter and being a mum myself I understand the need to be there for her, so don't worry about updating soon, family and kids come first. I hope she will be alright and well, and I wish you and all your loved ones all the best for the coming holidays and the New Year. I will look for more of your terrific story regurlarly in the new year and hope to read you soon. Thanks so much for the chapter, lots of hugs and kisses and best wishes for your little girl!!

Yanic · 30 November 2005 · Chapter 39: Hope Fades

I was so excited to see an update, I almost didn't want to read it, I wanted to save it and read it later when I had more time but I couldn't stop myself. Very good, I'm looking forward to Aragorn's side of the story. I'm glad that your daughter is doing better, thanks for taking some time to update!

EllyBaggins · 30 November 2005 · Chapter 39: Hope Fades

as soon as i saw this had been updated i was estatic with excitement! And this chapter certainly didn't disappoint! Everything was written so well, and unfortunately I don't have the time now to go into detail, but I will say that I cannot wait for Aragorn!! And it is wonderful, by the way, to hear that your daughter is doing better.

Eldariel · 30 November 2005 · Chapter 39: Hope Fades

Yay! Another chapter! I liked that you brought Alun back into the picture.

daw the minstrel · 30 November 2005 · Chapter 39: Hope Fades

A real angst fest, Nightwing! You do such a nice job of using sound to replace sight for Legolas. I imagine anything you write after this is going to be loaded with sound imagery. But yes. It's time Aragorn woke up.

Lamiel · 30 November 2005 · Chapter 39: Hope Fades

Yes, I think it is high time Aragorn woke up and made himself useful! Legolas' dream was absolutely heart-breaking -- and it was a master stroke, overlaying his love as friend and protector with Arwen's as Aragorn's betrothed. H'm. Aragorn and Arwen haven't actually bonded yet, have they? I've never been entirely clear what happened between them on that hill in Lothlorien, but if they aren't bonded, then Arwen probably wouldn't be able to tell if he's still alive. So Legolas' fear that she would fade from grief is entirely possible. Oh, I am so glad that real life is being a bit kinder to you, and allowing you some freedom to continue your hobbies! It is a special treat to see TSAW updated again. You did a nice job laying out what we know and don't know at this stage, and why Legolas must keep his blindness a secret, and how the blindness played into his and Aragorn's vulnerability and capture. Sauron really is motivating everything here, isn't he. Distract the Elves to the North, and then attack them from two fronts. Even if the Men are no match for them, they still cannot be ignored, and they'll take time and weaponry to deal with. It's clever, really, in a fiendishly evil way. Now I must pause just a moment to admire this line about Malcovan: "He could feel the power of the old man; it coiled about him with the slow, dangerous movements of a viper." What fantastic imagery -- I can almost feel it. Brilliant. It's good that Legolas still has some friends in the city. But now Alun has confirmed his fears about Aragorn -- and I wonder if that grief won't weaken hiim further. He's a warrior and I'm sure he's been trained to withstand physical torture, but with that anguish weighing upon him I fear that he might not resist with his full strength. He expects to die. Aragorn had better get there soon! Once Legolas gets past the shock of learning that he's still alive, I expect that he'll show these Men what an Elf can really do.

TithenFeredir · 30 November 2005 · Chapter 39: Hope Fades

I'm so glad to hear that your little one has made progress. My thoughts and prayers are with you both. Poor Legolas is almost overcome with guilt and sorrow. His dream about Elrond and Arwen fit perfectly and was a heartbreaking illustration of his feelings of failure, and yet does not allow him the luxury of escape. I think he might have slipped over the edge of utter despair if Alun had not appeared. He still seems to have little hope, but only his sense of duty and his love. Yes, it is time for Aragorn to show up. The poor elf needs a break--maybe some nice hot spiced wine, a good bath and some serious rest in a warm bed. *waving hand in the air, enthusiastically volunteering to provide same* This chapter was well worth the wait. Thanks for bringing us this wonderful story! ~TF