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| Beyond The Dimrill Gate by Jay of Lasgalen | 19 Review(s) |
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| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 5/2/2009 |
| Oops! Poor Estel--cornered by orcs! But there are two Elven brothers nearby who are likely to interfere with the "fun" of these two orcs! Love the detail! | |
| Cairistiona | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 11/19/2008 |
| "I think we should go on a little further." Nine little words sure to lead to Big Trouble. *shiver* I feel like I should be reading this at night, by a campfire, instead of in broad daylight by the computer. Night-time would fit the mood you're crafting perfectly. Love the bioluminescence detail. That seems very plausible. | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 5/16/2008 |
| Phew! Yikes and a few other things! I think they should have tied Estel to them!!!! | |
| meckinock | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 4/26/2008 |
| Eek! If Estel survives this, he is going to be in so much trouble. Bad Estel! This was a wonderfully descriptive chapter, Jay. You really brought out the current creepiness of the place, but with the wistful reminders of the Dwarves as well. Elladan and Elrohir's vast depth of experience and unfailing judgment really shines here as they lead Estel through the passages. Author Reply: Trouble? Oh yes! He'll be lucky if his brothers don't kill him, never mind the orcs! I'm so glad that you like the twins' experience and judgement here - they're dedicated warriors, with many centuries of battle and orc hunting behind them. | |
| Kitty | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 9/5/2006 |
| Sorry, Jay, somehow after the long internet break I never got truly around to read this. Now I'll try to catch up finally. I don't suppose you're over all your cliffhangers already, so I don't have to fear for our three heroes too long? *grin* Knowing there is a balrog, the feeling of unease is so real, even if I doubt this monster will show up - then the Fellowship would have been warned. You have me permanently wondering just *what* is creeping around there. There's a very odd feeling on my back ... *shudders* Uh, they have discovered Estel? And my lunch break is over, I have to wait with the next chapter :( Author Reply: I keep dropping hints about the Balrog, but E3 aren't listening. Elrohir even *sees* the thing at one point - but he doesn't realise it. They come to quite the wrong conclusion in the end. At least if you come to the story late there are several chapters to read at once. And I never mind late reviews! Jay | |
| pipinheart | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 7/20/2006 |
Este, should have made sure his brothers were behind him before he left to investigate... Now he is captured... Great job Author Reply: Estel has a lot to learn about exploring dangerous places. He will get better, though. | |
| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/7/2006 |
| Danger, Will Robinson! I love the journey down into the rock. It's creepy, yet fascinating, especially when the explorers discover the algae lines on the wall. Very practical, very Dwarvish. It also serves as a reminder that Moria has its own mysteries apart from whatever nasties now live there. Author Reply: My explorers needed a light source for when they can't carry torches, or when the torches go out - but it's too convenient if the algae is just there. I had to think of a way to explain it and I'm quite sure the Dwarves were clever enough to farm the algae. Author Reply: BTW, I like the Space Family Robinson quote! | |
| grumpy | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 5/25/2006 |
| Very good start to your story. Love ones with Estel and his brothers. Poor Estel, not only did the twins disappear on him. He has been found by something he would rather not be found by. Author Reply: The twins disappeared on Estel? Well, I suppose from his view they did! :>) Although I nearly always write about the twins, I don't have that many which include Estel - but I'm interested in the 'great deeds' he performed. | |
| paranoidangel | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 5/22/2006 |
| This would be me catching up on reviews! I really liked this story so far. You've done really well with the whole creepiness factor, especially at the end of chapter 2. I know they must get away in the end but I'm so afraid they're not! Author Reply: Well, they'll get away, but Estel's memories of this are 'evil' ... I'm glad you liked the creepiness and tenseness. Don't worry about late reviews - I know you've been busy. Anyway, I love them. They're like an unexpected gift! | |
| Ellie | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 5/12/2006 |
| Love this story. Absolutely cannot wait for more! Author Reply: Thank you! I'm writing the next chapter as fast as I can - I need to get Estel out of there! | |